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Sarita

@AnonMSK

Voyager

Posted: 11 years ago

#11

You compel your readers to transcend a barrier and enter the story menatly. It is always more than mere words. It simply takes you somewhere. And frankly if you have gone through that pain of ending up with someone who was never a part of your 'dreams' of future, this one hits spot on! Impactful. Loved it completely.😊

Edited by SaritaMSK - 11 years ago

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Downhill

@Downhill

Inactive

+ 3

Posted: 11 years ago

#12

why the hell you had to be so good writer.. mentally killing you becomes all the more difficult😭

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punam2712

@punam2712

Sparkler

Posted: 11 years ago

#13

MAAN HAS A WIFE BUT IS IN LOVE WITH ANOTHER GIRL

WHO WAS THE GIRL IN THE COTTAGE

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Madhuri

@Madhuri53

Stunner

+ 2

Posted: 11 years ago

#14

what is stopping him to love her

very well written

cont soon

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mayyo

@mayyo

Sparkler

+ 7

Posted: 11 years ago

#15

Originally posted by: Susegad

@Bold

🤣🤣

I'm sorry but I couldn't help laughing. Mayyo,is writing this from her creaking armchair, back bent over, thick glasses that make her eyes look like big fat marbles, hand trembling as she's typing this and a secret stash of Maan in his SBV avatar to remind her of her good ole days, giggling away while adjusting her perfect dentures.🤣
Mayyo, how old are you again?😆

It sure feels like I'm old! 😆

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Clairvoyant20

@Clairvoyant20

Navigator

Posted: 11 years ago

#16

Is that it ? adhoori prem kahaani 💔

please continue from the piece I think Maan has obligation of the feel since he loved the earlier woman in his life , but then noticing how minutely he has studied Geet ; is it really what he thinks that he cannot accept Geet or the feel that accepting Geet would be a sin for him ? 🤔

Maybe I read too much 🤓 hope you continue 😳

and I loved it so much 👏

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neethu

@neethuMG

Voyager

Posted: 11 years ago

#17

nice ...

wtng for the nxt

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kaamchorni

@kaamchorni

Voyager

+ 2

Posted: 11 years ago

#18

😆 Okay I will not call you a young woman in case Nisha di is watching but you are definitely in trouble! Using your beautiful stories to break our bechare hearts... tujhe sharam nah aayi??

The way his heart and mind are holding on to a fading voice and yet he still finds himself pulled towards Geet. And that it ends on a note that doesn't indicate a miraculous happy ending just makes the story all the more heart breaking.

I demand more of these short one shots (from all of you btw!). I miss having my heart broken and put back together by your words.

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ChandlerBing

@ChandlerBing

Voyager

+ 3

Posted: 11 years ago

#19

Just so you guys know I love you all. I am having a blast reading all the comments.

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979861

Hibernated

Posted: 11 years ago

#20

Hi..😊...dekho main peecha karte karte yahaan bhi aa gyi😊

But seriosly ur stories r just awesome.

My first comment on indiaforum that too on ur story...kabhi socha tha itni achi stories likhogi that people will make accounts to be able to comment on ur stories.😉

Anyways i have already commented on this story on ur site .Hope u recognize me.(we had a little discussion as well on ur story there)

beautiful work

Edited by ardentfitzcy - 11 years ago