If Only You Saw Me (1) - Page 55

Originally posted by: Susegad

@sweetkj

Humari taraf se bhi Maneet wali Shubh ratri

@Maayo

I feel almost emabarassed to comment on Zarin's FF. Her story is that good.

Ha ha! I said that over there. That I'm almost afraid to comment on her story! 😆

Originally posted by: mayyo13

Ha ha! I said that over there. That I'm almost afraid to comment on her story! 😆

Apa, I replied to your comment on the previous page. 😳

Originally posted by: glassdoor

Hey guys! 😃

I am not in a romantic mood last couple of days. So I am just leaving some food for thought. I am a big foodie.

Here are two individuals.

He does not feel nervous in front of a crowd or an auditorium.
But he is so when she is present and does not notice.
Why? May be he does not care about peoples opinion much.
So is he a person who thinks the world is a stage?
And he is the true self only in front of her.

The girl who shies away from other peoples.
May be for her it is the easiest to be on stage.
For the stage is a lonely place. The only place
where the past, present, future nothing matters.
Except the words that are spoken at that moment.
Scary innit?

Forgive my strangeness, me not that well.

Hey! When you aren't in a romantic mood, this comes out?

It's absolutely amazing! What took me three chapters to express, you've so easily put into a few lines! You've described both their personalities in such a way that it's thrown light on something even I hadn't thought of. Hats off Sheesh! 👏

And after reading this, I think reading your stories is a need for me! 😊

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interesting...
thanks for the link Aashu...
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[Quote=spvd]part 2
lovely part...
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[Quote=spvd]part 3
interesting...
cont soon dear...
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Thank you, Deepa! I'm glad you like it. 😳

Thanks once again, Aash!🤗

Originally posted by: mayyo13

Originally posted by: Susegad

Samadaron ki dooriyan na hoti hain qaabil-e-zikr
Nazdikiyan toh dilon ke darmiyan hoti hain

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Wah! Wah! Bohot khoob. Kya durust farmaya apne.👏

Mayyo after reading the comment maine phir se jake update padha. I just couldn't resist.😆

You have nailed their feelings down to a T.

Mera dil kehta hai, this has to be the voice of experience.😉

The feelings are just too real for it to be otherwise😃

Kya hum sahi hai?

Experienced? Partially, yes. But let me tell you which part before you take it wrong. The speech part, the nervousness, the way to cope with the nervousness and all that. Nothing else. 😛

Originally posted by: crazydream

BEAUTIFUL UPDATE.

Amazing

Maan is tensed abt speech. That's sumthing new. Thinking wat to fo n how to do.
Waiting for Geet's arrival. Want to see how she is.

Geet nervous. But managed to keep a brave face in front of whole class. Maan happy dat she carried out well.

Nazarein mili. Atlast Geet saw Maan. N uff his eyes. Shr has also become one of it's prey.

Continue soon.

Thanks! 😊
Yes, both are trying to get rid of the nervousness and Geet saw Maan's eyes but hasn't become a prey yet! 😉

Originally posted by: ninand

came across this at the recommendation of a dear fellow reader Avi, and should say, this is a very pleasant change. College goers who aren't obnoxious and full of themselves!.. in fact are simple, and sweet ..

Maan 's quite admiration for her, his awareness about her, his nervousness , despite his confident outgoing personality are endearing. and lol.. do I love Geet for being a bookworm, and a recluse or what:).. the way she finally came to see what the big deal about his eyes and smile was all about , and then decided that that shouldn't be enough to like someone.. yeh , i like her.

I like the simplicity in the story and the characters,.. enhances the mood of the story naturally..well written.

@Avi.. I liked your part too. Although the writer's Geet is slightly different from yours ,in that she is oblivious to Maan, your's isn't too far apart from her..

she did sound as simple and unassuming as the writer's Geet is.. and you should try your hand at writing more often:)..

Thank you for taking time out to read and comment. It's good to know that you're liking it so far. 😊
You're right, the young college goers who seem to be obnoxious aren't always such if you take a closer look at them and their life.
And you said it all, he is confident, outgoing but in front of her, nervous and shy. She is an introvert, a stay-by-herself person, but she is mature and sensible enough to know what's going to be enough..

Avi: should I thank you again? You're too kind, Avi! 🤗

Originally posted by: mayyo13

Experienced? Partially, yes. But let me tell you which part before you take it wrong. The speech part, the nervousness, the way to cope with the nervousness and all that. Nothing else. 😛