New MaanEet OS : My one mistake !!! (11/15)

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Posted: 12 years ago
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Hey guys

I have penned an OS long back but did not dare to post it coz i did not update Wrong Number till then .

I think i have updated Wrong number a day or two back

So i have now penned it now

Hope you guys will like it

This is again a contemporary and a short one consisting of only one part , I dont think that it could be extended to another part

Note : This is purely fictional and i have never come across any work with the same plot and theme . Any similarities is purely unintentional and accidental . If any queries / complaints you can pm me 😛

Here are my other works , you can read them if you are interested :-


2. In love with you ...forever (OS) - Completed

3. That's Another Love Story(SS) - Completed

4. Ms.Mechanic (OS) - Completed

5. Wrong Number (SS) - Ongoing

This is my sixth work . Hope you guys like it .

Please ignore errors and Happy reading ...

My one mistake !!!

Maan whistled opening his cupboard . He pulled out a neat and well ironed shirt and started wearing it .

His phone rung .

"Haan bol , Dev'''''.."

"Maan are you coming for the football practice today ????????"

"Yes buddy "

"Maan, inform Rahul Sir that I will be coming a little later , after an hour ''..Priya ke saath shopping pe hoon '' "

"Oh Priya !!!!!! The beautiful angelic '."

"Bhabhi hain teri '''''''''.. "

"I smell something burning''.."

"Your brain , idiot ''''''''' Inform the coach that I'll join you after an hour , bye " he told and cut the call .

Maan giggled and tossed his phone on his bed . He picked up his sport kit and flung the straps on his shoulders . He grabbed his phone and the keys of his one year old Apache . He wore his shoes and was about to lock the door when he heard his phone .

"Yes mom " Maan told

"Maan , breakfast kiya ????? "

"Haan kar liya '' kya baat hai , aapko meri fikar bhi ho rahi hai .i thought you were busy with dad .."

"Shut up "

"okay hands up ''''."

"Acha maan , you will have to pick up a family friend of ours now ''''"

"What no ways !!!!!!!! I have my football practice ''''''I cant sacrifice it "

"Maan, its just a practice session'''''''but that girl is here for an important task "

"Football is important for me in the same way "

"Maan ''''.." his mother, Ragini warned

"You are going to pick her from the railway station .She is travelling in Intercity express, train number xxx. Her train reaches Mumbai at 11.00 am . its 9.30 now . You will be right in time if you start within 20 mins . Aur haan , her name is Geet . She is from Amritsar and she will be wearing a blue salwar . She is going to Banglore via mumbai . I want you to pick her from the railway station and take her to our house . Serve her some refreshments and make her feel comfortable at our place . She has her flight to banglore by 3 pm . Drop her at the airport . I'm trusting you maan "

"Mom !!! I cant afford to lose even a single practice session .You know how important it is for me .I have my State level match after 15 days "

"Maan please , it's a request from me and ur dad ''''''that girl is the daughter of your father's late childhood friend . She is new to Mumbai .Cant you even afford few hours for your dad's friendship '''''"

Maan remained silent

"Are are you there''''.."

"Maan , Do it for me . "

"Fine , I'll do '.."

"Thanks Maan . It will be a great help to her if you drop her to the airport . Poor girl she is new to the city and more over She is '''''."

Maan cut the call before his mother could complete . He texted his friend that he would not be able to attend the practice session today due to some personal reasons and informed him that Dev will be reaching there an hour later .

He locked the doors and headed towards Chatrapathi Shivaji Railway station .

10.50 am

Maan reached the railway station and he wore his googles . He received an MMS and saw her picture . A girl with hazel brown eyes , a cute button like nose and pink lips . Maan shrugged off and was irritated . He had never missed any single practice and today he had to miss just because of one stupid unknown girl. The announcement was made and maan went towards the platform . He searched for a girl dressed in a blue salwar and made few mistakes in finding her too . Finally he saw a girl collecting her bags from the train . Her back was facing him . Her hair was neatly braided and maan guessed her to be that Preet or meet or geet or whatever . The girl turned and as his prediction she was the girl whom he had come to receive . Maan approached her and stood in front of her .

" Maan , son of Ragini Khurana " he told and paused

"My mom told to pick you up , lets go " he told and moved forward . Geet was struggling with her huge luggage and her hand bag but maan cared a damn . He went towards the parking lot and geet followed him . Maan started his bike and adjusted his shades .

" Baito " he told .

Geet sat behind him , placed her bag on her lap and held the rod behind her for support . Maan accelerated and they drove for an hour .

They finally reached maan's apartment . Maan pushed open the door and then sat on the couch . He saw that geet was still standing outside .

"Andar aayiye ji , baitiye ji '..kya mujhe iske liye invitation bhi deni padegi ?? " Maan told sarcastically .

Geet was totally confused . Maan took that she could not understand his sarcasm and told , " Come in and let your majesty's beautiful feet touch my hut " he mocked .

Geet frowned and came in . Maan held her hand and pulled her with him . He went in front of the washroom and stopped . Geet narrowed her eyes . Maan pushed open the poor and told , "Refresh yourself " and then he strode out of the room .

He entered the kitchen and made 2 cups of coffee . He stopped and told himself , " does she like coffee ??"

He replied to himself ," Even if she doesn't like , she has to drink ''she doesn't have a choice "

He came out of the kitchen and saw geet entering the drawing room . He gave her a steaming cup of coffee and told , " drink ''.even if u don't like " .

He saw geet staring at his lips and he rolled his eyes irritated .

"Behenji bhi aaj kal aisa bhi sochthi hain '''" he told himself and told her to sit in the opposite couch.

He took the T.V remote and started to watch a movie forgetting that he had a guest at his home .

After an hour .

Maan entered the kitchen and made some pasta . He pushed a plate to her . Geet made a face seeing the pasta .

"Kya hua ??? you don't like pasta ???? Listen behenji, I don't care if you like pasta or not !!! If you want eat it else bin it '.nahi nahi you have to eat it !!!!!!!! You cant waste food " he told and saw that she was again staring at his lips .

"You B**** !!!!!!! I' seeing form the beginning , you are always staring at my lips ''''. Wanna kiss me ??????? Come on , baby !! " he told nearing her . .

He held her shoulders roughly and told , " Why are u always troubling me ??? Tumhari wajahse I have missed my practice '''...You know how important it is for me ?????? How do you know, you are busy with your own problems and you want others to leave all their duties to come behind you and help you "

He saw that geet was again staring at his lips . He felt irritated in talking with her and pushed her away . Her head hit the wall and tears pooled in her hazel eyes dues to the pain . She rubbed her head and weeped silently . Maan felt bad for her but then shrugged off thinking that she deserved it and then started to enjoy his pasta .

After an hour

Maan came near her who was reading a book . He pulled the book out of her hand and told ,

" Behenji , when is your flight ???? " He saw geet confused

"I asked when do you have your flight "

She made and understanding face and then moved towards the handbag and gave her ticket to him

"3 pm " he saw the timing and returned the ticket to her .

" Muh se bol nahi sakthi ?? ticket hi dena hai kya ??? " he mocked

She tried to motion him something but maan ignored her and went into his room

He came back after 10 mins and forwarded her a paper

GET READY , WE HAVE TO LEAVE TO THE AIRPORT AFTER 15 MINS

She read and looked at him

"Your style " maan told and left into his room .

15 MINS LATER

Maan came out of his room and saw that she was all set . He wore his watch and told her " Not bad !! I have seen that girls take a long time to get ready , but you are too fast !! Oops''' tum behenji ho na , why do u actually need to get read . All you need is a salwar , a duppatta ,a pair of jumkhas and a shoe and you have everything " Maan mocked .

They headed towards his bike and they moved from the parking lot .

On his way Maan thought of asking her why she was going to Bangalore but then later shrugged off telling himself that it was not his business .

He recalled the vents in the past 3 hours and realized that he had been rude to her from the beginning but later assured himself that she deserved that . He dropped her infront of the airport . She got down from his bike and stood in front of him . She mouthed him a thank you but maan could not understand . She again tried to tell him but Maan stopped her and told , " Happy journey , bye '''" He paused and told , " I hope I'll never see you again " . He saw geet looking at his lips . he felt irritated and then zoomed off from the airport .Geet too headed to get her boarding pass .

Maan on his way heard his phone ring . He sa that it was his mom's call and attended the call .

"Maan ''.."

"Haan mom , I have dropped her at the airport "

"Good , did you give her some refreshments ''''''''..??"

"Yes mom "

"You treated her well na ???"

"Yes mom " he told but his heart told Really ,did you '''''??

" Poor girl , she is already deaf and dumb and on top she is now suffering from lung cancer . She is now going to Bangalore for her treatment . "

Think before you tell anything !!! Who knows your prediction might be wrong about a person !!!! The pain that you hurted a person remains in your heart forever and it cannot be washed away by any dettol / volini 😆


''''''''''''''''''''''''''''THE END ''''''''''''''''''''''''''''''

Hope you guys like it

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TanuDDian thumbnail
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Posted: 12 years ago
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nice os dear...very touching one... one who have physical challenges & suffering with some disease should go through a lot at time some they need some relax & refreshment... others who are near to them should understand & make them happy...
thanks for thz os...
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Nice os Niti continue..

Edited by Ravi. - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
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awsm...but plz cont. this one
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Loved It !!

Cont Soon !! :) !!
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Awesome Os
Loved it
Pls add me in ur pm list
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Originally posted by: Ravi.

Nice os Niti continue..



lusu pa ne ?

athan end nu potrukala aparam enna continue 😕 seriously u are 😳


niti nice os dear 😆
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Originally posted by: Ravi.

Nice os Niti continue..



paravalaiye decent comment ah kuduthiruka

P.S : dislike button please !!!!!!


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Posted: 12 years ago
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simply brilliant...pls try to continue this os...i wanna read more...pweeejjj...
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Originally posted by: mollycoddle

simply brilliant...pls try to continue this os...i wanna read more...pweeejjj...


nothing pops into my mind

I planned not to continue this one and hence ended it incompletely

I think the end was supposed to be ur own imagination

If everybody wants i can just give a small description about maan's regret , nothing more from my side to extend this OS
I did not plan this one to be a maaneet - one soul etc ... OS

I planned only a separate maan and separate geet and executed in the same way 😛

Welcome ur own imaginations 😆


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