MaaNeet scenes:Romantic Roller Coaster Ride.;)pg:1,3,5,

First Previous

Page

Next Last

Frequent Posters

nishi

@nishi_I-fian

Inactive

+ 2

Posted: 15 years ago

#11

gr8 job......i like it so much........nice concept too.....
The way u wrt dialogs , it seemes tht i'm reading one of wrten updt of a epi of ghsp.........

Quote

Nidz

@NIDIZ

Sparkler

+ 4

Posted: 15 years ago

#12

Originally posted by: geet06
gr8 job......i like it so much........nice concept too.....
The way u wrt dialogs , it seemes tht i'm reading one of wrten updt of a epi of ghsp.........

Thnx..Gosh I didn't thought it was that good.. Glad u lyked it..

Quote

Looks like you are new here. Register for free, learn and contribute.

Nidz

@NIDIZ

Sparkler

+ 4

Posted: 15 years ago

#13

Originally posted by: VJnLNMDJ
Cute scene, thanks !

VJ

Thnx for commenting dear..!

Quote

khadija_89

@khadija_89

Voyager

Posted: 15 years ago

#14

omg to good 👏

liked every think u writing

Quote

Nidz

@NIDIZ

Sparkler

+ 4

Posted: 15 years ago

#15

Originally posted by: khadija_89
omg to good 👏

liked every think u writing

Thnx..dear!
I'm not tat good though..

Quote

Nidz

@NIDIZ

Sparkler

+ 4

Posted: 15 years ago

#16

Hey guys Thnx for commenting on my previous scenes..I have written a new scene hope u guys lyk it.. Pls give u're feed bak..
Updates coming up..
~Hide n Seek~

Edited by NIDIZ - 15 years ago

Quote

Nidz

@NIDIZ

Sparkler

+ 4

Posted: 15 years ago

#17

use u're imagination while reading
One Bright sunny Morning Geet goes to Maan's outhouse for taking his sign on some documents..
*Knocks*Maan open the door..Alone with the wind her *hairstrap*flys..n Maan's eyes grooing her with a shock..
Geet ask him for inviting her inside n Maan bak to his *conscious*hun..!come in!Geet comes in n Maan closes the door.
Maan:Geet tum yeha..?
Geet:Maan..woh I mean sir..woh kuch important papers pe Aapkya sign chahiyeh tha toh..
Maan:hmm thik hai..
Maan sign's those papers..but suddenedly burning smell comes from his kitchen n Geet ask about wat kind of smell it is?he says it's just his soup ohmygosh..n he rushes towards the platform followed by Geet n Maan tries to picks up the vessel but it was hot n his finger got burned,Geet within a nano-sec takes his finger in her mouth & than an unknown feeling again hits Maan's soul..but he controlls his dill n uses his dimaag..
Geet says she'll cook the break fast if u don't mind n Maan agrees on it.Geet quickly makes a yummy Aloo paratha's for Maan along with soup!Geet also servers it on the table n calls Maan.Maan was about to sit n have his break fast just than *knock* Maan*angryly* asked who is it?
Replied Daadima with grace 'Mai hoo'.
Maan quickly gets up..n gets worried tat if Daadima sees Geet in here than!!
So he pulls Geet n hides her behind the curtains n says her not to come out till he says so..than he..goes near the door n open it..
Daadima asks him y did u took it so long,wat where u doing??
Maan replied woh Aaa..kuch nahi par Aap yeha kya kuch kam tha!!
Daadima ha woh..
(Just than Chandu enters n completes the sentences)
chandu:Ajj outhouse ki safai karni hai..aur pardeya(curtains)bhi laundry mai deyanaye hai..
Maan:*shocked*pardeya!!woh kyu..
Dadi:kyu matlab?!Maan Aap kabse ghar kya kamo mai interfer karnaye laggaye..??
Maan:yeh mera ghar hai..aur Aap meraye ghar mai meri marjee kya bina kuch nahi kar sakthi..
Dadi:Aap humpar hukum chala rahe hai.
Geet was hearing their conversation n than when Daadima & chandu were facing other side she slowly changed her place n went to Maan's bedroom..
Maan:yes!(coz he sees Geet gone inside)
dadi:yes!!toh abh Aap humpar huokum chalanaye ki khoshish kar rahe hai..humei Aapse yeh Ummid nahi thi..*folds her hand*
Maan:fine..go ahead n take those stupid curtains of u'res..
Chandu takes off the curtains n was about to go towards Maan's bedroom..just than Maan saw him n he comes infront of him n stops *ruko*
Maan:mera room kya pardeya manaye kal hi Dhonaye dallaye thai..
Dadi:*surprice*Aapnaye!!hmm toh thik hai..chandu u take these to laundry..chandu leaves
Maan:Daadima Aap ko kuch aur kam hai?
Dadi:nahi bas hum bhi ja hi rahe thai..
Maan:*sign of relief*
Daadima was going towards the door but stopped!
On the other side Geet was also coming out of Bedroom but hides again when she sees Daadima turning..Daadi saw the table with all tat cooked food..*shock*
Maan:kya howa..
Daadi:yeh khana.?
Maan:yeh woh.. break fast hai.
Daadi:woh toh humei bhi pata hai,ki yeh break fast served hai, par yeh kisnaye banayeh hai..?
Maan:Aaa..mai naye..
Daadima:Aapnaye!!smell toh achi arahi hai..Aapko cooking bhi yati hai yeh humei nahi patatha..
Maan:abh Aapki agiya ho toh mai Aapna break fast karloo..
Daadi:thik hai hum Aapse office mai milegaye..
Daadima finally leaves n Maan shouts Geet Geet..
Poor scared Geet comes out of his bedroom..
Maan:*pointing his finger*Ajj phele bhar, tumeri wajese manaye Daadimase jutha bhola..
Geet:sorry sir..
Maan:Aapna sorry,Aapnaye pas rakho!aur abh kadi khadi kya kar rahi ho..!abh jawo yehase..
Geet leaves..
Maan goes bak towards the table,sits down n eats a bit *calm's down n smile*..
Maan:in mind*Geet naye mera leya khana banaya aur manaye..damn!Aap phir se sorry khana padhega!

Edited by NIDIZ - 15 years ago

Quote

Mariam Ahmed

@sweet-and-cute

Inactive

Posted: 15 years ago

#18

awe!!!!!!!!!!!!11this is just awessome....👏...she is in his bedroom....😳....i am fainting..☺️...plz pm for the next part..i am waiting for your next part.........