JEET,NEW RN FIC updated 21.8.08

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Posted: 17 years ago
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Howrah Station,

Bohut bhid hai,sham ki waqt hai.In between this crowd,ek aadmi,ek chote bacche ka haath pakad kar coolie ke peeche almost

daud raha hai,aur un dono ko ek lady bhi follow kar rahi hai.

Lady- Raj tum zara deerhe nahin chal sakte??

Raj- mujhe koi saukh nahin hai rajdhani express banne ki,but coolie ke paas sab saman hai,agar iss bhid main idhar udhar ho gaya to?

After Sometimes,

Lady- auchhhhhhhhhh

Raj- ab kya hua???

Lady- oopsss! my leg.Kaun si platform par train diya hai??mujhse aur chala nahin jata

Raj- disgusting Naina,aisi juthe pahenti kyun ho jisme jaldi chal naa sako,high hills.

Naina- shut up,main chal nahin paa rahi hu,aur tum....

Raj- to kya karu utha kar le jau???train main beth kar dekhta hoon,ab chalo

Finally they found out their train,& comfortably placed in their seats.Raj saara samaan thik se arrange karta hai.

Raj- haa, kitna du aapko bhaiya??

Coolie- 40/-

Raj- kya?????40???sirf station ke bahaar se train tak,ab iske liye bhi 40 rupiye??bohut zyada hai.

Collie- dekho sahab petrol, gas ka bohut bhau badh gaya hai.

Raj- so what?tum thori naa ghadi par samaan laye ho, petrol ka to use hi nahin hua hai

Collie- arre gas ka daam badh gaya hai,aur kyun gareeb ki peth par laath mar rahe ho

Finally Raj coolie ko 35 rupees deta hai.

Raj- tum betho Naina,main paani lata hu,aur khane ka kuch lau??

Naina- nahin khana main bana kar layi hu,haa Chintu ke liye kuch lao,subah ke liye

Chintu- papa,chocolates,dairy milk lana,aur haa kuch kurkure ka packets.

Raj- Chintu, mummy ke paas rehna,idhar udhar mat jana.naina main aata hu

Naina- jaldi aana

Raj- train chorne main abhi waqt hai.

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sania_58 thumbnail
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Posted: 17 years ago
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PLZ comment,continue karu yaa nahin???????????
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Posted: 17 years ago
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continue this one is toooooooo good
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Posted: 17 years ago
#4
sounds interesting RN are married and having a kid plz continue this soon
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Posted: 17 years ago
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Too good!!!!!
Raj and Naina are married with a kid!!!!!🙂 🙂 🙂 🙂 😜 😜 😜 🥰 🥰 🥰 🥰 🥰 Great!!!!!🙂 🙂 👏🏻 👏🏻
They are going somewhere!!!!!!🙂 🙂 🙂
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Posted: 17 years ago
#6

start is well but ek baat kehna chaoongi ki start karne k baad cont jaroor karna.

Kyounki tumhara old fic bhi ud nahi ho raha hai jis ka hum sab wait kar rahe hain.

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Posted: 17 years ago
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very good..
awesome
fantastic
but miss madhumita...plzz update kijiye jaldi..😉
update was really good..this story seems to be very interesting/..
mujhe kid ka naam pasand aaya
nice start👏
👏👏

👏
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Posted: 17 years ago
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Chintu train main idhar udhar kar raha hai.

Naina- Chintu yeh hamara ghar nahin hai jo tu idhar udhar kar raha hai,train hai,chupchap aake beth

Chintu- off,mama,I am a big boy now

Naina- dekh sab log uth rahe hai sab ko problem ho raha hai,yaha aakar beth,mama ko pareshan mat kar,varna sabke samne datungi.

Chintu chupchap aakar Naina ke paas bethta hai.

Chintu- mama papa kidhar hai????

Naina- bahar hai

Chintu- main bula kar lau

Bol kar Chintu uth kar jane lagta hai.But Naina pakad leti hai,aur khic ke kaan pakarti hai.

Naina- kaha tha na maine chupchap bethne ko,ek bhi baat aaj kal tu sunta nahin

Chintu- auchhhhhhh,mama,dard ho raha hai,choro,plz sabke samne kaan mat pakro,mera insult mat karo,main papa ko bol dunga,aap mujhe maar rahe ho.

Naina- bol apne papa ko ja kar,khub pekhe gacho naa( kaam umar main bohut paak gaye ho)

Chintu dekhta hai uske mama ka mood bohut hi kharap hai,papa bhi nahin hai usko save karne ke liye,isliye woh chupchap beth jata hai.

Idhar Raj bahar aakar Chintu ke liye kurkure ka packets leta hai,ek dairy milk bhi leta hai,paani bharta hai,smoke karta hai.phir dekhta hai train ki time ho chuki hai,to woh train main uthta hai.

Uth kar dekhta hai Chintu muh phula kar Naina ke paas betha hai.

Raj- Chintu yeh le tera chocolate & kurkure ki packet

Naina- haa,khilao,jitna ho sake isse faltoo chizen khilao,baad main agar tabiyat kharap ho jaye,to mujhe mat bolna

Raj- arre baba main sirf de raha tha,abhi khan eke liye nahin bol raha tha,baad main kha lena,abhi apne mama ke bag main rakh do

Chintu- nahin papa,mama ke bag main mat rakho,aap apne paas rakho

Naina- main kha nahin jaungi tera chocolates

Naina apni bag se tiffin-box nikalti hai,khud tiffinbox ki dhakkan main khana leta hai,& Raj ko box main deta hai,Raj Chintu ko khila deta hai,aur khud bhi kha leta hai.

Raj- Naina tum baitho main tiffin-box dho ke lata hu.

Raj ke aate hi,

Chintu- papa main upar ki us sit main sohunga

Raj- no, Chintu,tum gir jayoge

Chintu- plz plz plz papa

Naina- ek baar bolne se tujhe sunai nahin deta

Chintu rone jaisa shakal bana leta hai

Raj- Naina tum bhi naa,hamesha daatte ho bechare ko,Chintu main tumhe upar bitha deta hu abhi,but sone ke waqt tum neeche aa jana.promise

Chintu- promise papa.

Raj Chintu ko goad main utha kar upar bitha deta hai,

Naina magazine le kar beth jaati hai,ab train main ek ek kar ke sab sone lagte hai.

Raj- Chintu neeche uthro,Naina tum upar so jao,main Chintu ko lekar neeche so jata hu,luggage bhi to dekhna hai

Naina- Hmmm

Naina upar ja kar so jati hai,Raj Chintu ko sulata hai, aur uske paas adjust ho kar so jata hai,aadhe raat ko jab AC ki bajah se thand badh jati hai,tab Raj Chintu ko ek shawl se cover kar deta hai,Chintu bhi Raj ko pakar ko so jata hai.

Subah Naina ki need khulti hai,neeche aakar dekhti hai Chintu Raj ko pakad kar so raha hai

Raj- Uth gaye???

Naina- hmm,iss baar bhi train main need nahin aaya.aur kitni der lagegi pauchne main??

Raj- train 1 hrs late chal raha hai,2hrs lagenge,tum fresh ho jao.

Naina fresh ho kar aati hai,uske baad Raj jata hai fresh hone. Aakar dekhta hai Naina khidki se bahar dekh rahi hai.

Raj- jab se meri posting hui hai tumhara mood off hai, kya hua hai???

Naina- Thank God,tumne dekha meri taraf,hum quarter main chal kar baat karenge,agar tab tumhare paas waqt ho to???

Raj- Naina tum aise kyun bol rahi ho??

Naina- plz Raj, baad main baat karenge

Raj chupchap beth jata hai.Thori der baad,

Raj Chintu ko uthta hai.

Raj- Chintu uth jaa,utarna parega,hum aa gaye hai

Chintu- no mujhe aur sona hai

Phir raj bohut muskil se usse uthta hai.Woh log Tezpur station pe utarte hai.

Raj idhar udhar dekh raha hai,phir usse police ki uniform main ek aadmi dikhta hai.

Raj- excuse me

Officer- haa jee,aap????

Raj- S.P RAJVEER SENGUPTA

The officer saluted him.

Thats all for today,waiting for u'r comments
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Posted: 17 years ago
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To humare Rajveer ji S.P. city hai.

par agar S.P. hain to train se aane ki kya jaroorat thi car se bhi aa sakte the na.

S.P. apna saaman le kar Railway Station par nahi ghoomta hai us k liye servent hote hain.

Neways update was good.

Naina aur Raj k beech me koi problem hai kya?

Naina bada ajeeb behave karti hai Raj aur Chintoo k saath.

update soon kyounki aap bahut der me ud karti hain.

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Posted: 17 years ago
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hey that part was gr8

but ye Naina Raj aur chintu se naraaj kyon hain

plz update soon

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