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Ashu25 thumbnail
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Posted: 8 years ago
Paaavam iI!!
Sach mein!
This house didnt have kids...zoo?!?! Now? Rofl!
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Posted: 8 years ago
Poor II
It is really hard to take care of four kids and two dogs at a time
But still she is doing great...
👏
She said this house has no kids when she came but how can this house has kids without any lady and a zoo really well not literally but chaos is like that only
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Posted: 8 years ago
Don't know how II does it. However, there is a certain kind of peace in this chaos. The earlier II was less sure of herself at home. This II is so confident of her place in MM. May be having children does cement a woman in the husband's home (in the Indian sub-continent I mean). I am absolutely looking forward to reading about the twins as they mature. I know and anticipate a long wait for it.

On a different note, I finally read Indradhanush in two reads. And what a treat it was. I do not know what you do professionally, but you write for fun and your writing and the art of story telling is far superior than the writings of many professionals that I have read. Thus I was wondering if you would eventually publish your work, I would gladly pay for your work. Your stories are so real to life, and the way you write flows so well that one wishes that they never end. The Pandits are as interesting as the
Bhalla's, but of course in a different way. The female protagonists are the modern version of women, but without the trappings of hyporacy and outward appearance that is so much part of our modern lives. They are authentic, accomplished professionally, but are not overbearing in their accomplishments. They are thus not overly confident in themselves which makes them such pleasant characters to read about.

Thank you for making time in your busy life to write such lovely pieces of fictions for us. Really grateful for entertaining us with such writings.
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Posted: 8 years ago
"Dad can I have my phone now?" Nivi whispered
"Lets give her an hour" he whispered back

🤣 evil co-conspirator !!!
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Posted: 8 years ago
Woman and/or wealth


Manya shoved his legs off the couch as soon as she got to it

"Hat" she said
He sat up and she sat by him

"Hey u" he muttered

II returned to pick up a kurta from her closet

"Hey can we have beer?" Manya asked as II passed by

"Sorry not until, umm... lets see next Saturday? Or Sunday? Dusshera kab hai?" she said thoughtfully

"DONT push it II" her husband's gaze warned her his eyes sparkling

"Mayyybe its Monday after" she said softly eyeing him back

THERE!!!
I JUST DID!
I "PUSHED" IT

She heard a soft exhalation

"U can have as much juice u want?" II smiled at both of them sweetly

"Eeew" Manya made a face

"And I wondered WHERE Nivi got that from" II remarked

"Not ME... he is the uncrowned king of alcohol" Manya leaned on her brother

"Wont u come down?" II asked generally


"I wanted a shower remember?" R&B reminded her

"Last I checked bathroom mein paani hai" she smiled back

PIGG

I AM NOT GOING TO BATHE U
LIKE U ARE NIVI

Mahavir showed up at the door wanting her attention

"Neeche aao" she ordered, generally again and walked away

"Kidhar gaya Nandu ko lekr?" Manya asked

"Umm.. just driving around the car lot in Mehrauli" he smiled

"So? does he have a girlfriend?" Manya whispered

'Umm... maybe... maybe not"

Manya punched him

"Ouch!" he exhaled

"Bataaa" she shouted

"Guys' code of honor" R&B placed his hand on his heart

"He not a "A GUY" hes Nandu"

"Nevertheless" he smiled

"Has he kissed?" Manya winked

"YOU... are Sam's spy... so NO... he hasnt" R&B leaned back

They watched Travel channel quietly for a while

"Its pretty cool dimpal" she sighed when he explained backpacking through Peru for her


"I mean you are so different than Sam & I" Manya muttered

"Duh" he chuckled

"Main woh nahi keh rahi genius" she punched him again

"I get it" he laughed under his breath

Nandu texted him "Uncle R Mami asked me what we did, I told her "just driving"

"Ofcourse" he texted back

"U think u would have gone away for so long if the Ma thing hadnt happened?" Manya asked

"I mean I was gone for undergrad" he reminded

"I know... remember how much she hated that?" she asked him eagerly

He nodded, and they both talked about how she would make paranthas for him when he returned from vacation, sitting on teh exact spot on the marble counter where she used to seat him when he was 4 or 5

"U were taller than her in your teens werent u?" Manya asked

"Ive been taller than ALL of u since I was 10" he chuckled, knocking on her head

"Whatever" she shrugged

"Its shocking to me... II insisted on a prenup" Manya said softly

Since HE was not the one suspicious of his wife's motives, he didnt think it was a big deal, he shrugged

"U like her now?" he asked quietly

Manya was quiet

"Its got to have changed something" he muttered

"I didnt HATE her" Manya said defensively

"But...??" he offered

"Umm... she is so different... guess I didnt picture a wife like her for you" she said

"Nothing to do with the wealth" he mocked

She punched him

"this is not my prosecution" she was hurt

"Ofcourse not" he said quietly

They were quiet again for a while

"U think I shud offer one to Makarand?" she asked abruptly

"Huh" he grunted

"Bolll" she shouted

"Umm... why do u ask?" he questioned

"Pata nahi... u know" Manya was quiet


"Umm..." she began teary eyed


"You are a total catch and any guy would be psyched to be married to u" he said proudly

"Except two men didnt think so, and umm... however many in Sydney did not know what a "catch" I was" she said

"U know I meant it differently" he said bluntly

"Yeah... I guess"

"U are a gem" he said firmly

She smiled and leaned back on the couch

"Did she offer or did u offer?" she asked

"Sorry?"

"Baat usne chhedi?" Manya asked

"Yeah..." he said thoughtfully

He texted for a minute or two abt work

"Toone fatafat maana?" she asked

He glared at her

"Oh sorry sorry.. I know... I mean were u pissed she didnt care for ur wealth?" she asked curiously

"U were right... we are not conventional" he agreed

"U think Marliese wud have married u without one?" Manya asked

"I DONT know" he said stiffly not wanting to talk abt M

"Umm.. u know.." Manya began

"I never wanted to marry her... I mean... she never wanted that either" he said swiftly

"Do u remind II of what she wanted?" Manya asked

"Wanted and got" he corrected her

He clenched his jaw

The 10s of blow ups over her financial crisis, the living on the edge she did, the gross lack of personal discipline when it came to saving and investing
The instantaneous refusal when it came to taking his money, be it for shopping, or grocery or paying the help

"To? bata?" Manya insisted

"No... I dont remind her" he said clamming up

"To tu tear up kar de na agreement?" Manya said naively

"Yeah that shud take care of it" he nodded like she was an idiot

"Kyon?" she asked baffled

"The lawyer has to void and destroy it" he said

"OHHH!!" "I am such an idiot... maybe thats why all the men in my life have an eye on my wealth" she went on self pity mode

"No... u think abt it more than u think abt urself" he said quietly
The man of few words dealing a brutally honest punch








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Posted: 8 years ago
Ocean
Thank you so so so much for the beautiful note
I was reading an article on The Atlantic on Trump
A psychologist's view of the man

The overwhelming theme of the artcile was Trump's narcissism
I started feeling I MUST be a narcissist too
For some reason I wondered, if I write these stories because I crave acceptance and appreciation, something that must be grossly lacking in my life


But I am wel loved and appreciated and surrounded by people that flatter me a lot.

So may be I am still a narcissist


I work in Sales, I used to be an Accountant too. No connection to writing
Never took a Lit class ever
Havent read all the classics as many of my readers have

I just write because I observe people. I LOVE to observe more than I love to write I should admit

Peoples, places and events unknowingly get etched into my memory and I draw on those

Thanks for liking the flawed female leads
I love them too

Just for ur compliment I must write a ID part tonight
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Posted: 8 years ago
Sibling Symphony

"In a certain way, isnt that true about II too?" Manya countered defensively

He exhaled

"I mean, you know, she thought more abt your wealth than abt the love she has for you?" Manya spoke confidently

"Possibly... but... but... she doesnt have low self esteem" he said

"I DONT have low self esteem" Manya was furious

"How do u explain the fact that every time you talk abt Makarand you cant stop mentioning how the other two men screwed you over?" he asked calmly

Manya sulked for a bit

"We are not talking abt me... we are talking abt ur wife" she said primly

"Are we?" he was getting a lil irritated to talk abt II

"She insisted on a prenup" Manya supplied

"Right... not because she thought lowly abt herself... because she thought so highly about herself that she didnt want others to think lowly of her" he said easing himself off the couch pointedly

Manya leaned back and stared at him quietly, processing that point...

Was it more ammunition for her to hate II ? Only time will tell
By elevating his wife in a sense, had R&B put Manya in a less desirable spot?

"Its not like I made up the things with my ex or Vik" she said sadly

"No... no... absolutely not" he agreed compassionately, exhaling, shoving his hands into his pockets "I told you u have nothing to worry" he reminded

"Do u think I shud ask Dad to disown me? U think Makarand will see me as ME then?" she asked confused

"U are not paying atention to anything Iam telling u are u?" he said quietly... breaking into a smile

"Do I sound like I am desperate to have what you have?" she asked... her eyes glistening


"NO" he denied it too quickly before the very same thought could over power him "Hes a great guy" he reiterated

"Would be still be great... if I (wasnt wealthy?)" she said, but he cut her off

"there you go again" he waved a finger

She slumped back on the couch

"If it al falls apart?" "then what?" she asked

"Quit it Manya" he ordered sternly

"Tu sabse chhota hai... ya main? she sulked

"YOU... are a dork" he bend down and kissed the top of her head

"You think so?" she asked breaking into a smile, geting up and giving him a hug

"Sam's the dork" she reminded him

"Well... she can be too" he offered generously

"KHOTEY" she cursed in Punjabi

"I am going to go take a shower. Go dress up and go down and work on learning Tamil" he winked

"Do u speak Tamil?" she asked nervously

He shook his head... "But I get it when she unloads on me" he chuckled
"And in bed" he completed the sentence in his mind

"Nivi is cute" Manya said thoughtfully staring at the TV

"She takes after her aunt" he flattered her

"Sirf main na? Sam nahi huh..." Manya sniffled and chuckled

"So what do Iyers do for Navaratri?" Manya asked

"Dont know... umm... well I do... from going to Vandita's and Iyers... they sing and chant" he explained

"Are u going to make her sing?" Manya asked teasingly

"I absolutely will... tonight" he vowed huskily


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Posted: 8 years ago
Manya!
I thought you are stumped
But no
You can take pre nup to someother level only!!
Kab sudhregi ????
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Posted: 8 years ago
N,
I have started re reading this tale.
I finished a thread the very first one last night.
Am now at their break up point
So nostalgic all this is!!
This path of reading and re reading...discussing...understanding...crying...laughing...I never did it !
No with any tv show or any novel..with movies yes!
Do you realise what you have created , N????
Such a delish this is!

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Posted: 8 years ago
What an amazing update. Dimpal nudges his shis sistervto reflect on her perception of his wife...Manny is not only thinking of II with a new respect but is wondering if she can glean a lesson or two from the prenup revelation. The Dude stood up for Sam, the patriarch his warrior princess and now reassuring Manny that she is a gem. Thus day we have heard and seen only the best and vicious side of her her possessive streak. Will we get to see the reasons she is pecieved a gem by her brother Nisha?

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