MB FF : On the Quest || Pg. 144 - Ch.50 & Note || - Page 96

Originally posted by: AryaDrayCoByrne

first commenter! yay! 🥳 (I don't know exactly but I will still celebrate)

you writing style has gone under a bit of change I have noticed but still gets to the reader. your parchi fans will love it. I myself don't quite understand it but that is because I have not got into the heart of the mahabharat and do not connect to it. however I do connect to castles! I saw this picture recently of this place with lots of red trees and it was not a castle but still the mention of it in your update brought that memory back.

now we are going on a castle adventure and can not wait to think about what the amber room will look like. Is it made from amber? or is that just the name?I I am sure that the wealth it contains is not a materialistic one. 😊

definitely do want to point out that paarth was right in what he said. after what happened to draupadi, it was not her who was questioned but him - to allow such a thing to happen.

Originally posted by: AryaDrayCoByrne

okay now I have come back to do a more detailed comment on all the updates I have read, bar the one I just commented on 😆

I am intrigued by the mahabharat, definitely, however I do not connect to it as some people have. Of course, you are aware of this but that is not going to get in the way of my reading. Also from the bits I have watched I do find myself drawn to both draupadi's suffering and karna's plight. I think they are my favourite characters.

The thing I like about your story is that you have done something different. The search for all the gems and stuff is intriguing. That is what has drawn and kept me in. The promise of adventure. I am a Lara Croft and Indiana Jones/ Apocalyptic saving style fiction kind of person - so these things definitely draw me in. However, you have also done a great job of showing the change in Panchali as she links back with the past - all in such short updates! That deserves a praise as you know how bad I am when it comes to the length of the updates. Her character graph I must say is the best and you can see the change in her - the second would be Paarth. Some of the others do not get much mention as the focus is on ParChi but I'm not complaining.

The villains have their moments I must say and the casino part was a very creative take on the dice game. I was smiling when I read it because it was such a nice modern connection back to the epic and also this time it was interesting to see the bad guy stake himself. ⭐️ I must say I noticed how hidimba (I think it was her) left when she was to be staked. That little bit there got my attention. 👏 Ulupi is an interesting character and I guess she has her reasons for trying to break up ParChi but to be honest, it is hard to know who Arjun originally loved in the epic since having multiple wives was an established norm while having multiple husbands were not. But we have had our discussion on this so I will not digress into that.

Now I shall move on the adventure. I am loving the way you make up the clues and the different artefacts and how you move to different locations. I also like how Vasusen is smart as well. I do wish for more of this but you are the writer and I am the reader. I must read what you write as the story and how it progresses is up to you. All the different places and trials so far have been really entertaining (the crme de la crme would be to add superpowers! 😛 either Panchi or Govind perhaps) and I look forwards to the castle.

I think if I continue any more I might digress into spam. Now that I am updated, I can read this more regularly and wish you the best on future updates 👍🏼

Originally posted by: Angela_Grokes

You actually are the first commenter, so celebrate!😆

@red - That is because you said that it is hard to understand the dialogues with the former style, so I mended it a bit, made it like yours.😳

@green - I remember that in one of the updates I mentioned that the Amber Room is actually made up to gold and precious jewels. The whole adventure is based on the real mystery of the Amber Room, though a little additions (like, the Diamond of Zeus) are made.

Keep reading.😃

Originally posted by: nadine_lopez_48

Sorry for the late reply😭

Loved the update!!! Continue writing as good as this ALWAYS.

Update soon! Also maybe a long special holi update😆

Originally posted by: AryaDrayCoByrne

okay so I think I may have skipped on that detail. you know what, I am going to search up on this amber room soon, give myself some context and appreciate your use of it in your ff.

definitely, I prefer being able to read who said what. it just is easier than having all the dialogue within the paragraph. thank you so much for taking that into consideration.

ah it was bhanumati, they left her out of star plus' MB didn't they?

all the characters being grey is the interesting part, it becomes multidimensional. I am also sure you will continue to do well and I will be checking them out when I can. 😊

Originally posted by: nadine_lopez_48

When will you update?!?!?!?!?!?!?!!!!

hmmm...very intriguing Watson!