Submerged! - ArShi FF:New note P.No 132

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chavvi16

@chavvi16

Stunner

Posted: 11 years ago

#31

nothing about dadi it seems
are they in this together
was that aki who khushi is taking care of
well CK sure helps

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Michelle

@-ChildOfChrist-

Dazzler

Posted: 11 years ago

#32

Lovely Character Sketch
Can't wait for the update!

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stg1

@stg1

Rocker

Posted: 11 years ago

#33

loved the start! and i like that u took me by surprise and the man khushi was looking after was not arnav but maybe akash or a yet unknown entity 😛 now i'm expecting more - clever plotting, evil plans at work, many twists, interesting character interactions, and to be surprised about who is 'good' and who is not! (no pressure btw 😆) liked the character sketches too, and that haunting poem at the beginning - i always equate asr with an iceberg, lets see who or what it refers to here! many congrats on ur first os, am looking forward to seeing where u take it 😃

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@addicted25

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Posted: 11 years ago

#34

WOW Amazing start, so I take it its Akaash who is sick, for one moment I thought it could have been Arnav, but he is our hero who come to the rescue. Is shyam up to his dirty tricks? Always wanted to know how the dynamics would have changed if his victim was younger and able to fight. One plea from us nris, please can we have dome rnglish translations too? Pretty please?

Please keep me in the loop for updates too. Thank you muuwhx

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mayurisb80

@mayurisb80

Voyager

Posted: 11 years ago

#35

I have to tell you that the prologue has me all interested...looking forward to read more...good luck ...

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InspiredSoul

@InspiredSoul

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Posted: 11 years ago

#36

Originally posted by: FLGirl
Nice start. I am intrigued. Wonder who the sick guy is..

Thank you! 😊

The sick guy ... I won't keep you guessing for long!

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InspiredSoul

@InspiredSoul

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Posted: 11 years ago

#37

Originally posted by: AKHUSHI
Wow! Totally different kinds plot. Very interesting. Loved it.

Thank you! 😊

I hope it still stays different and interesting for my readers till the very end!

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InspiredSoul

@InspiredSoul

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Posted: 11 years ago

#38

Originally posted by: mishti_17
Something different... Love it.. I almost thought its Arnav... Waiting for the next..

Thank you! For liking it, and waiting for it! 😊

Hope to keep you all guessing for at least a couple of parts! 😃

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InspiredSoul

@InspiredSoul

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Posted: 11 years ago

#39

Originally posted by: Ipoona
Inspired ... Babe ... I can't stop grinning 👏 👏. 👏 Talian !!! Start with a bang !! Love the idea,
The poem and the graphic ... The title ... Submerged ... What an intriguing start to the story with two of the most reviled characters of the show making their appearance at the very start ... And of course none other than our Arnav Singh Raizada ... For a minute you had me worried ... But the man in need is not him ... Inspired ... Brilliant completely engrossing start ... Can't wait to read more ...

Khushi sounds exactly like Khushi would ... Longwinded ... Sweetly chatty ... The iceberg has me really thinking ... Nothing is as it seems ... Love it inspired ... For your direct straightforward approach ... It's like bang bang bang ... I feel some molds are being broken ... 😃 ⭐️ ⭐️

Ipoona, my dear dear friend! You don't know what it means to have you comment on my very first story here! 🤗

I got you intrigued 😃 - so I must be doing something right! Hope to keep all of you interested till the end - all my fingers and toes crossed!

Just promise to kick my butt if my narrative starts getting long-winded! I so want this story to stay crisp and fast moving!