Submerged! - ArShi FF:New note P.No 132

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cute_sarun

@cute_sarun

Voyager

Posted: 11 years ago

#21

interesting prologue, the story seems quite different .please continue soon and can you please pm me when ever you'l update

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chavvi16

@chavvi16

Stunner

Posted: 11 years ago

#22

hmmm like it
so she is paid to look after
is it nk aki
or someone else
hope he hasnt been kept here against his will
why do i think that might be it
khushi toh khushi hi rahengi
no sach mein
lucknow express she is

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Michelle

@-ChildOfChrist-

Dazzler

Posted: 11 years ago

#23

Interesting start!
Continue soon!
At first I thought that it was Arnav that was sick
nice twist

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Michelle

@-ChildOfChrist-

Dazzler

Posted: 11 years ago

#24

please send me a PM whenever you update 😃

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Horizon

@Horizon

Dazzler

+ 2

Posted: 11 years ago

#25

Inspired, your "busy in a good way" brought me a good day (?)! Very interesting start, I do admit, like Ipoona, I too was worried a bit, then that phone call request saved me..

That picture on top.. couldn't take eyes off... the intrigue built around ... the poetry and the title everything brilliant... Sheeshmahal is one thing in the story that has as much a character as these two..stumped by it being introduced as the fulcrum.. auguring a great tale..

Khushi seemed to be so much Khushi here...that sweet, young independent girl

Your story already a super hit.. laage raho.. and bring the man to us pronto!!😊

Great start my friend!

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Param

@pup03

Sparkler

+ 4

Posted: 11 years ago

#26

interesting prologue.. looking forward to read more.. best wishes and happy writing 😊

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Nitu

@Angelic_Doll

Voyager

Posted: 11 years ago

#27

thnx for the pm wai8in for chap 1

Edited by Nitu01 - 11 years ago

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mishti_17

@mishti_17

Stunner

+ 7

Posted: 11 years ago

#28

Character sketch is interesting.. Waiting for the next update...

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div26

@div26

Rocker

+ 3

Posted: 11 years ago

#29

Amazing start IS 😊
Can't wait to know how it will unfold from here. Initially, I thought that Arnav is the one who is ill and she is taking care of him and I got scared, lol.. but brilliant start 👏
Will be waiting for the next one!