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cosmina

@cosmina

Explorer

Posted: 11 years ago

#31

Butterflies erupted into her stomach, and their wings seemed to be made of flames- every beat was accompanied by a burst of heat, followed by ticklish burning.

...and there were fire-breathing butterflies residing in her stomach, and that she was afraid that if she made a wrong move, everything would implode and crush her heart.

That was so beautiful!! what can a simple human like me,could say in front of those marvelous words?!

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amaypranay

@amaypranay

Rocker

+ 4

Posted: 11 years ago

#32

So nice to see a pm in my inbox from you, thx so much!

This was awesome!

All the best to you, and whenever you get some time please drop in.

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bmtdluver

@bmtdluver

Rocker

+ 3

Posted: 11 years ago

#33

Awesome sequel! I really enjoying reading your one shots (and your work in general). Arnav just was not going to let Khushi escape without saying and doing what he wanted. I liked the banter between the two and Khushi's thoughts about both of their actions. I hope to read more of your work soon!

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devishree

@devishree

Dazzler

Posted: 11 years ago

#34

just amazing and superb

u stole the show when arnav said what would u do if do it without chocolate

ah a kiss in process👏😉

i seriously need a sequel for this

may be a monologue from arnav plzz pretty plzz😉

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magss24

@magss24

Voyager

Posted: 11 years ago

#35

Tat was amazing. .. do u have any idea of continuing this...

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varshapan

@varshapan

Navigator

Posted: 11 years ago

#36

Hey Nafisa, welcome back.. I missed you so much that I had taken to revisiting MDJND hoping it's not finished yet. .. this was a lovely OS.. and delightfully light and romantic.

Hope to read more from you. .

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aquagal

@aquagal

Inactive

+ 6

Posted: 11 years ago

#37

I totally loved it. The confusion and Khushi's thoughts were so well written.
Khushi didn't know what to do, what to expect and how to behave. She was just trying to run away from him and avoid him. But boy he won't allow it. I loved that he left no confusion anymore in her mind over what that 'chocolate' incident meant and implied and well he found out without chocolate too. ☺️

Thank you so much for writing this and Congratulations on being the Deputy Head.
PS: Thanks Saiyyu & Happy B'day once again, if not for you & your b'day I don;t know if we would have got this sequel. 😛

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...pinky...

@...pinky...

Explorer

Posted: 11 years ago

#38

Welcome back! I hope you had a relaxing break. Excellent OS. Thank you for taking the time to write it!

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MoonlightAura

@MoonlightAura

Beginner

Posted: 11 years ago

#39

A delightful OS. Doesn't it remind you of a cheshire cat toying with a helpless mouse, the mouse who appears all brave but is a crumbling mess inside. What I like about your narration is segregation of feelings into so many components that a person undergoes in a mere minute. Thank you for this OS. Please pen down another FF. Has been a while and miss 'Mohabat Door Jaane Na De' terribly.

Happy Writing.

regards,

MoonlightAura