Hey!!
Sorry I didn't get to comment much since the last time but I just caught up with the rest of it now...the story is gliding by beautifully but I had a few observations/ feedback...hope you'll take it in the right spirit..
I felt that Arnav and Khushi needed a bit more of an emotional connect before they realised their love for each other...like they should have opened up a bit more, especially Arnav who still does not show enough trust in Khushi to tell her about his past...they should have bonded more before realising...i felt that for someone like Arnav, who run's away from relationships and love, it was too soon to give into his feelings for Khushi...Khushi too is a bit vulnerable as she feels Arnav can leave her anytime...so i think that they need to have that bonding and trust
Secondly, it surprises me for the lack of physical love between them...if they both love each other so much, why is there such a distance physically...no kisses even? I understand about getting too intimate because Khushi is not like that and Arav respects it...but even the most shyest couples that I know share kisses if nothing else...i know it makes me sound very brash...but I think that element is missing...there is ton's of attraction and desperation but in a real situation, in a modern couple, professing love without having any physical contact is a bit doubtful...I am sure you have something planned, but this is just my observation...
Looking forward to more of Akash-Payal equation and seriously your'e doing a great job...hope my words are taken with just a fellow reader's feedback and nothing else...cheers!
Ye Hai Mohabbatein
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