SanDhir FF : *Along Came 'She'* ~~THREAD 1 - Complete~~ Chapter 1-10

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Posted: 11 years ago

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CHAPTER1 :

I love how you add quotes befitting the update at the beginning of the chapter. It just increases the intrigue and makes it even more interesting. Coming to the first chapter now.

The flashback part made me so sad it almost got me all choked up. poor rd at such a young age he had to witness his parents death and that too on his b'day 😭 Could feel his pain and desperation through your writing. 😭

And then sanyuktas entry The contrast between his sadness and her happiness was well depicted I don't know if it was intentional or not. But I loved how she was all happy here and so positive it kinda showed that after his sadness she will come in as happiness. This part made me happy 😃

I adored the sanyu you showed. The hardworking one. Her parents pride. It was such a treat to read the entire familys happiness after their share of pain.

The way you linked RD and sanyu through their parents was awesome.! RD's parents were so good 😳 no wonder wo itna acha susheel ladka hai 😆

And snayu keeping that photo part was really cute and sweet. I have a feeling that somehow this photo will bring sandhir closer ;)

The way you introduced RD and his gang. I couldn't help but feel happy. No matter how snobbish and rude they were...I was happy that RD didn't go into a shell cause of his parents.. He had his friends and kind of a normal life. 😊 If only he left his obsession of finding the killer. I am scared for my baby 😕

And the cherry on the cake is how sanyu baby is attracted to him. Its so cute like she is a 4 year old having a crush 😳

And the ending was too good. Weee...R and S are together so sandhir are lab partners as always...this lab is goanna be interesting very interesting 😳

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CHAPTER 2

First lab and this girl fainted. That too straight into RD babas arms. What luck man.! Now she is just goanna keep falling onto him till he falls for her 😉 I'm waiting for that :D

Oh and I love that you write both of their point of views in important scenes. Its nice to see a scene from both their perspectives and feel the difference. *kudos* for that.

Till this chappy I was just hoping that ishita was a friend to him who had one sided feelings for him. Though I liked the entire gang on the whole still I didn't like her for obvious reasons.but turns out she is his gf. Kyun anu aisa kyun kiya? mera dil tod diya 😭 But still hoping that you did this for some special reason and also that you get #merasandhir together :P crazy pankhi I am you see. :D But I loved rd's backstory it filled the questions about him. and also it was nice to know how he survived. My genious RD 😳

I loved that he had so many friends and after seeing how they had been there for him in his toughest time I got to loving them as well. Even ishita :o .

the part where he opened the corpse thinking it was no big deal cause he had already seen his father die in his own hands was so sad. I feel for the guy. bechara use itna pain kyun de diya anu 😭

The next part was nice. Sanyu found new friends. She'll definitely need em :P

But even RD insulted sanyu. Its sad to see how he was become so cold But to be frank it was funny the way he taunted sanyu. Wah medicine mei bhi jokes le aayi tum. Great ho yaar 👏😆

And the end was as always too soon. Left you craving for more. When I read your chapters I just start reading and flow with the story pata bhi nahi chalta when they finish. You write so short you should think of increasing your length girl :P But I loved the contrast in them. How sanyu was only occupied with RD while RD was obsessed with his parents killer. Surely she is goanna get involved into this big time for him and get herself into trouble.

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TeekhiMishti

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Posted: 11 years ago

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CHAPTER 3

So chapter three begins with miss sanyukta being late for class. Lol sab badal gaya par is ladki ki late lateef hone ki adat nahi badly 😆 . P.s I forgot to mention I love the bond you have developed between kastu-sanyu. Its too cute.! The friendships you have portrayed are really beautiful. So the epi starts with sanyu staring at RD and him staring back. Wah a eyelock to begin a chappy it just couldn't get better 😳 bring them together already please. 😆 I'd love to see how this sanyu and RD look together. waiting impatiently for it 😉 The confrontation was heck steamy.! but definitely needed. sanyu couldn't just let them trample her everytime. but what she said to RD was so not fair. stupid girl should watch her mouth. Bechara he was reminded of it all again. He is totally justified in his actions. plus its hot when he manhandles her 😉 *sadist I am I know* I like how you have used parth as the sweet guy here. I truly like him and his interest and nice ness towards sanyu. that's a huge thing coming from someone like me who doesn't even prefer to have the character in the stories she reads. You've used him wonderfully and I am sure he is goanna be a great support in the coming story. much needed. :) The dramatic revelation where sanyu found out he was randhir shekhawat was beautiful. vardhans words. her stupid words everything dawned upon her at the same time. But the bestest part was the flashback. Best part of the chappy nahhh best part of the FF. I have always adored the idea of sandhir knowing each other from bachpan and then meeting in jawani and finding out about it. You have penned down my most favoritest fantasy in a fiction to absolute perfection. I so so loved that scene. It just couldn't have been better than that. It was everything funny, sweet,cute, naughty, it was just fabulous. I loved it to the core. the randhir shekhawat she met was such an awesome guy. Wow so now they have a little secret of their own to unravel. I am waiting for RD to know of it. I wish he remembers this meet and somehow is effected by the girl himself. It will be damn awesome if they start calling each other betaaj badshah and phoolan devi after that 🤣 If you don't plan on it. write that for me pretty please? 😆 It would make me damn happy that their past has linked them in such a way that it effects their present equation. That is something I've always craved to read in stories. thank you so very much for giving me that. 😳 #grateful

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Posted: 11 years ago

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CHAPTER 4:

Loved the conversation sanyu and kaustu shared. Their bond just keeps growing by the day and its turning even more sweet. :) You are doing a great job portraying the friendships. Making me fall in love with them in a way that I wish I was a part of their gang. especially RD's but then again I am not that intelligent to be a part 🤣 But I still love their gang dunno why it reminds me of friends. sorry for the comparision. But that show is the epitome of friendship for me and you are definitely portraying friendship on a similar level.

RDs b'day :( sad for him bechara. For the first time I liked ishita here. Liked that she was there for him in this time. acha kiya sanyu ke rd ko sambhal liya till she comes for her rd 😆

but on a serious note if I were not a crazy sandhir phankhi I would have definitely fallen for this RD-ishi pairing you are showing. they are so cute. I think I am falling for them right now as well. But I have a feeling theres more to it then what meets the eye. somethings definitely fishy 😕

Ok so rd finally finds a clue to lead to his parents killer? where is the folder 4? what next.! heck I am so hooked to this. can you like write all the parts and upload them at once? i'll go crazy with this wait and mystery 😆

I like randhirs chachu for some reason. He feels like the most positive and trustworthy person to me. hope I m not wrong 😛

the rd-ishi kiss. no words rd sirf sanyu ka hai. this never happened acc to me and I never read it. 🤣 *crazy I am I know :P*

Bechari sanyu I feel sad for her cause she had to witness that and finally she knows. bechari again 😭 the way RD confronted her I was scared phir yeh volcano phutega but sanyu came out of it without any scratches having defeating RD. a first for him. wopppieee shes making a difference in his life. I am excited. things are changing ;)

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Posted: 11 years ago

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CHAPTER 5:

Ishitas phone call made me doubt her even more. My doubt is on ishita,karan and smithas parents they were the only three who called their parents. why so? I feel one of them is the culprit, bechara RD is goanna get a shock of his life knowing one of his very own friends betrayed him and is indirectly cause of his parents death 😭 I want sanyu to be there with him at that time. the selfish phan gurl in me u see 😛

I loved my vardhan in this update. So sweet the way he saw through sanyus lies and understood her. But the most shocking part. THE RANDHIR SHEKHAWAT gave her the book? how come. hes developing a soft corner for her already isn't he 😉 and its even more awesome how she wasn't ready to take the book from parth and didn't hesitate once while taking it from RD. loved that change.

The leap of faith. awesome title. and aptly suited ;) I loved how she wasn't ready to take a leap of faith on a silly thing as a book from parth but she risked her life and took a leap of faith with rd. shows how much she trusts him already. 👏 and finally the sandhir journey begins. I am looking forward to more confrontations. more falls and catches and a lot more of thriller. and as always an awesome story written amazingly.

I so hate the eyes which thought RD has to die just like his parents 😡I am goanna kill those eyes 😡 bechara mera RD kahan in sab jhooto ke beech phas gaya. feel sad for him everyones in on it hiding the truth from him and keeping something from him. I liked his chachu in this sense. hope he truly helps rd cause that's what he really needs no matter how dangerous it is that is the only thing which can truly give him happiness.

And the last scene was epic. Sanyu na girne pe ph.d karegi before completing her degree. the different tareeke to fall. But it was really cute and sweet. RD's dialogues were funny. I love how hes always there for her but never takes credit. sweet they both are together want more of them. pretty please. and jaldiii haan?

Eagerly waiting for your next update :D Don't worry next one ke liye itna rant nahi karungi u can update without fear :P

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TeekhiMishti

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Posted: 11 years ago

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I was going to finish my rant thinking theres only 5 chapters...but weee to my happinesss theres another. I almost ooked through it thank god I did not. going to read now :D

p.s congrats on getting through. celebration mei kal aur ek update de dena ;) and party bhi :P next time you'll do better koi baat nahi..one day you will be randhir singh shekhawat ;)

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TeekhiMishti

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CHAPTER 6:

I just have three words to say to you.

I LOVE YOU 😳

I just wished for that revelation of the srk part in one of my comments and u had already even fulfilled it. This chapter was so so good. It was utter awesomeness. I loved it to the core.

Yeh ishita na din ba din meri hitlist mei aati ja rahi hai. some day I am goanna 🤬

I loved how sanyu chose to be herself instead of pretending to be something she was not that's exactly how everyone should be. And see that's what attracted RD baba afterall 😆 He was so smitten by her. hehe finally some development.

And the dance. How rd was just left ogling at her. proud of my sanyu. she is so talented.!

he had to take her didn't he. how could he leave her with anyone else be it his brother cum friend parth. That part was ekdum rocking. hero ki entry types.

And the press con was superbly penned down as well u depicted randhirs confidence in so less words yet so well it amazed me. and the way he told that he was nervous but didn't let it show awesome it was.

so was vardhan sirs counselling. there is definitely a lot of vardhan in randhir. I hope he is there to support rd as well. :)

And the ending. goshh even after writing so many words I have no words for the end I am speechless that's how unpredicatable and amazing the last part was. sanyu confessed :o I so didn't see that coming.!

Eager to know what happens next. update jaldi se na. please :P

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Posted: 11 years ago

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With this I finally end my rant

I am so sorry for spamming your ff with so many comments and such long ones

I just couldn't help it

you have written everything to perfection. The plot..the characterization..the backstory...I am just in love with this one...definitely one of my most fav ff;s on the forum...you have truly woven magic with your words...I love this story...

you have officially gained a phan and a stalker :D

Love,

ari.

thanks a lot for the awesome read. It was such a treat reading you story till now. waiting for it to unfold further :)

p.s u;ve written the medical details so intricately and with such finesse that even I thought u were a medical student until u specified otherwise. great job buddy 👏

Edited by --Ari-- - 11 years ago