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Posted: 11 years ago
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Stick to this length. 😊 Update was all in all sweet, every bit of it. 👏
P.S.- Regarding the mistakes, revise it thoroughly before you post. You'll get them all correct. 😊😳
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Originally posted by: nehamurat

Stick to this length. 😊 Update was all in all sweet, every bit of it. 👏

P.S.- Regarding the mistakes, revise it thoroughly before you post. You'll get them all correct. 😊😳


Neha, if I am not wrong u r the writer of 'Ab tum hi ho ' ...where it is????
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Thank you itna long update dene ke liye!
ye sketches ananya ne banaye h... haina na?? talented girl, aur ye veer h ki hamesha uspe chillata rehta h!😡

Pari is so sweet! I love veer aur ananya ki nok jhok bachon ki tarah ladte h! 😆

Loved jhanvi veer scenes!

update soon!!

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Posted: 11 years ago
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Originally posted by: darshika121


Neha, if I am not wrong u r the writer of 'Ab tum hi ho ' ...where it is????

Yeah I'm the writer of Ab Tum Hi Ho... I have the update ready, only the last scene is left. 😊
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Originally posted by: NehArabella

Yeah I'm the writer of Ab Tum Hi Ho... I have the update ready, only the last scene is left. 😊


its been almost 1 yr 😡😡😡
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Originally posted by: sammuratfanno1

Thank you itna long update dene ke liye!
ye sketches ananya ne banaye h... haina na?? talented girl, aur ye veer h ki hamesha uspe chillata rehta h!😡

Pari is so sweet! I love veer aur ananya ki nok jhok bachon ki tarah ladte h! 😆

Loved jhanvi veer scenes!

update soon!!


Veer ne shout nahi kiya fir se padh 😛 he is my good boy
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Not a year to be precise. 😆
But it's been too late, I know. I apologize. 😒
Edited by NehArabella - 11 years ago
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Well, I am pretty late but then I was so caught up...

Finally read this part... And all the comments along with it. And I felt as if all that I had to say has already been said. This is what happens when I get late. *sigh*

Yes the length was good. It was enjoyable.😊

So Ananya made the sketches... that is quite good. And veer now has high expectations. Hmm.

Pari actually apologized. Finally. That girl really needs some leash. I can never tolerate such impudent kids.

Nice flashback of Jhanavi.

What happened to Tanya and her husband??

You are again late with your update...!!! 😕 Do update soon.


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Posted: 10 years ago
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Chapter 10




Ananya came home drained out there was no one...she called her mom...nilaksi came out from the kitchen wiping her hands with a napkin.

Mamma di se bat hui kya? She asked casually.

Nahi beta this time also she didn't call me up...!!! nilakshi was concerned for her daughter.

Ye di ko hua kya hai shadi k baad to jese bhool hi gai hain...I will not spare her for this...saying so she smiled mischievously.

Nilakshi noticed a tinge of fakeness in her behavior but still she kept mum...her daughters were the dearest to her...and she couldn't see them sad but still everyone have their own life and they have the right to deal with it...she understood the fact that now Ananaya and Tanya both were mature...she didn't want to be a cranky mother but a friend to them.

Ananaya sprinted upstairs to her room...and sat on her bed...ananaya now buck up...u just have a couple of days...and so many things are piled up...thinking her mind she got inside the loo and came out all freshen up...!!

Hairs were dripping wet...water drops were resting on her luscious red lips...she was looking so beautiful that anyone could give his lifetime to stare her just once...her eyes were innocent...her face was flushed...after all today she saw a new side of him...his smile was so heavenly...just thinking this a smile crawled on her lips...eyes gleamed with happiness.

Jangli billi...why you blushing so much...?? he smirked knowing the reason behind it.

A red hue came rushing to her face...veer...oops sir u here...!! She bit her tongue.

Aaarrrgghhh I am irritated...stop being over-professional...I don't like it...saying so he came closer to her and held her wrist...these faces were inches apart...!!

So what you like then?? Huhhh she pouted.

He made a puppy face...don't call me sir...call me veer only...!! Their eyed got latched.

Once again she was lost in those chocolate orbs...so brown so deep so more like a chocolate...!!

Hmmm...she sang...her tune huskily.

Bas tumko dekhe , dekhte hi rahein...

Ruk jayein lamhe sabhi jate huye...

Kya tumko kah de or kya na kahein...

Tum hi samajh lo ai kash ki...!!

Bas ye tamnna hai dil jo apna hai ...

Usko mil jao...tum...!!!!

Her trance broke when Nilakshi called her for the dinner...yes it was another hallucination...she didn't know why it was happening why when she was determined about her decision...it was like something was there always to attract her towards him..No matter how hard she was trying...she was missing her equation with her Sadu Veer...oops Boss...!!

Coming mom...!! She replied in same tone.

She changed to casuals and rushed downstairs where her mom was waiting she took her meal in haste and retired back to her room...so much work was piled up for her to do in a short span..!!

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Singhaniya's

It was again a good morning for Singhania's...today Veer was also there with his family members on the dining table.

Veer beta...thank you so much...!! Shekhar chipped.

Thanks for what Papa??? Veer asked a bit puzzled.

For your support and presence of mind...agar tumne MD's ke sath deal na karne ki advice na di hoti toh aaj hamara kitna bada loss ho jata...thank you beta...!!!

Papa it was my duty ad responsibility as well...meri jagah agar bhai bhi hote to deal nahi hone dete...!! He exclaimed.

~~Flashback~~

Singhania's was the topmost jewelry industry in Mumbai and the whole country...they all were always sincere and honest with their work and material they used...they were another name of purity in case of gold...this year they were going to add some more to it...yes they were going to launch a new brand with some authentic designs a unique blend of modern and royal rajasthani designs.

and for that they had to mortgage their 30% of shares to some financial companies...the one shekar wanted to deal with was not good in veer's opinion and he adamant on his decision to not to go on with it...there was something not good...when he tried to find out he got all his doubts confirmed when the SEBI itself proved them to be fraud and this was the hot news in business world.

~~Flashback ends~~

Shekhar hugged his son with a proud smile on his face and the y both left for the office.

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People never realize their qualities and treasure of talent they have until they are forced to use that as their only way to fulfill their wishes...!!!

Same thing goes with Ananya this girl was extremely talented...so honest and focused on everything she decides to do...and these designs were the only way in which she could help him...bring that heavenly smile on his face which was so mesmerizing that she was not able to forget it...his change of expressions...those frowns...that captivating smile...that shine in those brown orbs...she just couldn't forget...she did not want to either...!!!

She was in the office came an hour earlier then usual as she had to finish this designing this as soon as possible...and the atmosphere here was calm...she got inside his cabin and arranged it...except keeping those orchids she used to keep to freshen up the place...!!

She came out of there and sat there on the stairs and took a glance around...her eyes stuck on a framed snap of some award function...where Veer was rewarded...nothing caught her attention other than that look on his face...!!

A proud look...a naughty smile and a glint of happiness in his eyes...she had a dreamy look in her eyes...a desire to see him smiling like that...to be a reason of his happiness..!!

Ananya...Ananaya ...her trance broke when Veer called her a bit louder this time...he was right in front of her...u look good when u smile...!! She blurted out...!!

What...?? He frowned. Go get to your work Ms. Saxena...!!

She walked away from there.

A sweet smile crawled on his lips unknowingly...the reason was not so known ...yet not unknown...!!!

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Shlok came back home after a good night sleep somewhere out...he just entered the main gate and saw that the watch man was not on duty...demn angry he shouted...'watchman'!!

An old man in the uniform came rushing to him...ji sahab...he was panting a bit.

Kahan the tum??? He asked angrily.

Sir vo beti ka phone aaya that oh zara 5 minute...

Ohhh to aapko aapki beti se batein karne k liye salary deta hu main haina...!!!

Sahib vo...

Aap jaiye yahan se vese bhi aap budhe ho gye hauin ab retire hone ki age hai...jaiye apna boria-bistar uthao or nikhlo muje kamchor logon ki zarurat nahi hai...!!! Saying so he pushed the old man lightly and he stumbled a bit.

Sahib essa mat kijiye mere biwi bacche bhukhe mar jayenge sahib...!! He pleaded.

Maine aapke baccho ko palne ka theka nahi liya hai jaiye kahin or kaam kijiye...!!! Saying so he went inside the mansion fidgeting with his phone.

He called up to some security guard agency for a new watchman to get appointed.

Hello Shersingh...I want a new watchman ro be appointed here soon...he hissed over the call angrily.

Ji sir..!!

Or haan iss bar koi 2 baccho ka baap nahi ek young watchman chaiye jo bahane na bnye or apne kaam se matlab rakhe...!!!

Ji sir...!!

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Tanya was lying on the floor groaning with unbearable pain and anger...she wanted to shout...she wanted to shout aloud...!!

This so called husband of her was mentally imbalanced personality who needs to be beaten so badly...he needed a treatment...a 440 watt shock to get his brain on its right place...but this guy was so hell dangerous...he could do anything without even thinking once about other's feelings..he was heartless...!!

She cursed her destiny one more time that she met to this monster...after their marriage he was good with her for some days and then God knows what happened that he got totally changed... her loving prince charming became the vicious beast...!!!

She was in pain...so unbearable...!!

He entered the room like a storm and screamed...Tanuuu...!!!

She could have jumped out of her skin anytime at that moment.

Shh..shlok...!! She stammered still lying there on the floor drained out.

Stand up now...and get me a strong coffee...and BE QUICK...!! He shouted.

But shlok...How can I? She stammered again. Sweat beads forming on her head.

Ooohhh so won't go right??? He smirked devilishly and got up.

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I will teach her a lesson...how she could deny me for such a li'l thing...!!!

He boiled the coffee powder wid a little amount of sugar and his black coffee was ready.

Here she was stunned by his insensitive sttitude...he proved her wrong yet again...it was almost one year of their wedding and everytime he did something she forgave him...gave him another chance... !!

She loved him like anything but je treated her like nothing...she still chose to hold on to him...to put some more efforts...but everytime she got this pain and scarce in return...!!

She was disappointed and angry that how she could she just give him many chances and cursed him yet again...!

He came back inside and sat on the bed relaxing himself.

Hey sweetheart...here is bad news for you...!!

She again got scared of him...!!

Ohhh God now what??? She thought.

Your Hubby dearest is going to London for a business trip baby and until then you will be alone here in the big home of ours...!! He said faking a sweet smile.

She was somewhat happy.

All of a sudden he gripped her hairs and she hissed in pain...he spilled the coffee on her delicate frame and it made another scar on her hand...it was burned...!!!

Shlokkk...!!! She groaned.

You are going to live in this room only...don't you dare to come out..I will lock you here only.

With that he got up and stormed out of the room and locked it.

She again fell down on the floor crying .

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Edited by darshika121 - 10 years ago
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Posted: 10 years ago
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hey readers...I am here again wid another chapter of my MURAT FIC
hope you guyz will like dis too...!!!

Spare me if there are any mistakes...!!

and please suggest me if I should continue with those hallucinations further...!!!

Your suggestions and criticism I would love to consider.

Love Drashu😳😳

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