Hey nice update. i love the way you are building up the story and the characters!
So Sumer has decided to use the time tested tool of emotional blackmail and at a time when its guaranteed to work! Oh Sumer if only you would suggest ladoo to him, it would be interesting to see how Arnav would react! He's so keen to ensure that Khushi stays with him that he might just say yes!
I loved the workings of Khushi's mind when Rishab asked her why she didn't call Arnav bhaiyya. That was very cutely captured! And Rishab has every right to hear warning bells!
I like the way Arnav was there in every frame even though he wasn't physically present. goes to show how well he has integrated into the fabric of this household & its members.
Can I say something? I hope you wont get offended. Your story is detailed and moves at a slighty slow pace. Which is great cos its building up beautifully.
Am so glad that it is paced out and you are developing each character and their thought processes - makes the journey more exciting and makes the wait that much sweeter. However that coupled with the slow pace of updates makes one loose the emotional connect with the story.
The story at its current pace with slightly more frequent updates would be great! I'd hate it if you change the way the story is developing cos thats perfect, but I do wish the updates were quicker cos I find I loose track esp since I don't ask for PMs. Then sometimes I don't feel like commenting cos I cant remember what I read earlier in the story :-( and don't want to write a simple "great update" comment :-)
Though in all fairness you did post two updates within 2-3 days of each other once i think.
I hope you didn't mind, but as a reader who enjoyed MKM I (esp the pace of the updates) and who is really enjoying MKM II, I thought I could take the liberty of making this comment.
If I have offended you, my apologies. 🤗
Edited by DMGFan-2b-not2b - 12 years ago
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