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@pup03

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Posted: 12 years ago

#221

beautiful !!! arnav is pain to see his khushi struggling.. oh god.. he cried like a baby talking to his di.. so arnav recollected she was not asking for payal, her sister but her amma's payal.. loved the update.. do update soon..

thanks for pm 😊

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Sonia

@sonia_92

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Posted: 12 years ago

#222

you've changed your writing style in this chapter, its different, but a good different, its interesting. I.really liked the phone conversation between Arnav and anjali, I think the emotions were apt. I really liked how you used the significance of the payal too.

love
Sonia

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Nisha

@dazzling_glory

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Posted: 12 years ago

#223

Beautifully written

Arnav finally realised that khushi wanted her mother's payal.

Hope that she will recover soon

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ItsPearl

@ItsPearl

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Posted: 12 years ago

#224

Hi guys...

I'm sorry I cannot update today as promised - there's some work that needs immediate attention. Also, I have a few things to get right in the next chapter which looks half-written and poorly constructed, so I think I'll need some time... I don't wanna post anything that I'm not happy with.

So update tomorrow... Pakka... By evening... I will try to update as soon as possible, maybe even earlier than tomorrow evening...!

Thank you for all the love...

Edited by -.Pearl.- - 12 years ago

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Sarah

@P4rveen12

Dazzler

Posted: 12 years ago

#225

Wow that was quite a intense and emotional update,

Arnav phone call to Anjali was so heart wrenching, poor Arnav.

I didn't click on when the nurse said Payal, I thought she was asking for her sister. But Arnav put his shatir dimaag in to use and realised she meant her mothers Payal.

Love the way Arnav entered the room Khushi was in and finally took the Payal to her,

Hope Khushi responds when Arnav puts the Payal on her.

Loved the update, brilliant read.

Eagerly waiting for the next part,

Continue soon and thanks for the PM xx

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soni_md

@soni_md

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Posted: 12 years ago

#226

Take your time, love. This story deserves all the time and patience we can give it, and then some 😊 Hope every thing's alright 😊

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LyssaPie

@LyssaPie

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Posted: 12 years ago

#227

This is sooo goood yet so sad i love it

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Shraya Biswas

@ShrayaBiswas

Inactive

Posted: 12 years ago

#228

Read the prologue! Loved it! Though the line 'unlawfully unwedded wife' left me in mystery! Will read the rest of the parts in a relaxed way later! :)
do expect my comments about them! :P

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ItsPearl

@ItsPearl

Dazzler

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Posted: 12 years ago

#229

Originally posted by: areeba_blossom
CRAZY!!! BAT SHIT CRAZY MAN!!

pardon my language.

*exhales*

Like earlier i said, impulsion is what kicks Arnav in the gut and makes him act, it is exactly what happened here. What clicked in the first stance is that she wanted her mother with her yet Arnav being Arnav looked around and grabbed the Payal that seemed to him was the one but it took him a while to dig in deep.

I love how you jotted that down.

His breakdown and realization were quite natural and I love the portrayal.

The emotions seem all tangled up and even the flow of energy between them is quite strong. Wonderfully written.

Thank you for the lovely comment, as usual! :P

We just love impulsive Arnav, don't we? He had done blunders being impulsive but the sanest of many things have followed his impulse-tantrum. He just needs to grow up for himself for once, letting go of his fears...

P.S. I read that 'pain' thing in your previous reply! Yeah, it did sound creepy! LOL

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ItsPearl

@ItsPearl

Dazzler

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Posted: 12 years ago

#230

Originally posted by: soho19
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I am super sleep-deprived, so this may not be as understandable as I want it to be, but woman, the construction was amazing. The way you move from small detail to larger, and expound on something tiny to show that his mind is completely outside itself. Brilliant. His confusion, utter lack of self-preservation, and the hatred and condemnation he feels, all come across so powerfully. The emotions, the lack of tears, the confusion behind their presence, and then the prayer, that someone come an save her. The respect, and yet, the warring emotion to keep her from harm, believing with all his heart that he is the sole cause of harm in her life.
I can't tell you what a beautiful update it was. The style was amazing, Stunning.

Darn! Every single time I read your comment, I just feel sooo awesome about myself! I shouldn't, right? But I do - but again, too much of the confidence that your comments shove inside my mind is not healthy!

Thank you so much, dear!