#1PolemicJackanapes: Complete [Note + Blog Link Pg154] 3Jan 2016

shree10

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Posted: 12 years ago

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Twiggy, Really enjoyed the update! It's interesting how your perspective changes when you become a parent! I find Shashi approach quite pragmatic though I wonder why he had to force her for Engg especially. But you can't explain every little thing in story. So I would ignore that bit.

Does Khushi really think that she wants to make a career out of writing. We have Chetan Bhagat as an example. But his maybe rare case?? Also he has fallback option. (Wife) It is altogether different case that his writing is criticized left and right but still.. makes money right?

So I fully empathize with Sashi and Garima.

She personally found him to be a goofy aimless brat => What?? You made Arnav goofy aimless brat?? Hawww..
So we get Payash in this update. Here too they are expecting pehle Aap/pehle Aap lucknow style??
And Khushi's predicament in the end!! Some days are so bad that you feel the whole universe is conspiring against your sanity! Isn't it??

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moomin4455

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Posted: 12 years ago

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I'm glad I finally checked my PM!

This is a wonderful beginning...Khushi and Arnav think the world of each other...but maybe Arnav is the only one that can see flaws in her writing because he is so close to her? Now I wonder what it will take for him to actually give his good opinion?

So Arnav hasn't told her he loves her, but Khushi knows exactly how they feel about each other? It is a conundrum she's facing...not sure what I would do about the creative writing course...

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moomin4455

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Posted: 12 years ago

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Just read the second chapter! I agree with Shashi I'm afraid and he speaks firm experience...though it breaks his heart to hurt his child but he has a point. I kind of agree with Arnav in the last chapter - if Khushi is good she can make it!

So PayPal and Akash I'm guessing? That's a woman after my own heart - the things I would do for cheesecake! 😆

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Sultan_Of_Swing

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Posted: 12 years ago

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I finally read the first two chapters. And to say I'm blown away would be a massive under statement. there is a reason why many of us believed you are capable of writing and this proves why.

I have so many things to say about the two chapters- starting with how in two chapters you have managed to etch out some realistic but interesting characters, how easily their conversation and the story telling flows, how intellectually stimulating you made the experience by throwing in the word play and crosswords and most importantly how the story says something about you as an author. every author carries their distinct style that is obvious in their stories and I cant already feel it with this story.

I'm not going to question the reason for the title, I'd rather wait for you to take me to the point where it justifies itself.

And before I sign off there a couple of lines that struck a chord-

'I want her to be able to lead a comfortable life, not just... I don't want her to see the days we have.'

"Talk to me Khushi. And don't start that unnecessary conversation where you say its nothing, then I assert something is the matter, and we spend half an hour in a pointless discussion at the end of which you give up and tell me everything. So cut the crap and spit it out, NOW."

I'm intrigued and already engaged, I look forward to this journey.

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Sultan_Of_Swing

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Posted: 12 years ago

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I finally read the first two chapters. And to say I'm blown away would be a massive under statement. there is a reason why many of us believed you are capable of writing and this proves why.

I have so many things to say about the two chapters- starting with how in two chapters you have managed to etch out some realistic but interesting characters, how easily their conversation and the story telling flows, how intellectually stimulating you made the experience by throwing in the word play and crosswords and most importantly how the story says something about you as an author. every author carries their distinct style that is obvious in their stories and I cant already feel it with this story.

I'm not going to question the reason for the title, I'd rather wait for you to take me to the point where it justifies itself.

And before I sign off there a couple of lines that struck a chord-

'I want her to be able to lead a comfortable life, not just... I don't want her to see the days we have.'

"Talk to me Khushi. And don't start that unnecessary conversation where you say its nothing, then I assert something is the matter, and we spend half an hour in a pointless discussion at the end of which you give up and tell me everything. So cut the crap and spit it out, NOW."

I'm intrigued and already engaged, I look forward to this journey.

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ShikhaKhushi

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Posted: 12 years ago

#76

I understand Shashi's point of view... It's actually like my dad's... Hurts us kids but totally justified... Ans Garima as a mother being torn between the two parties... So, Shashi knows about Arnav and seems to approve of him too? <3

Payash was cute!

Waiting for more eagerly!!!

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_disha_

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Posted: 12 years ago

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Fortunately and unfortunately at this point each of these characters are speaking the truth somewhere.

When i was younger and single i always felt the need to reach out and embrace my dreams..some came true some are still lying unattended and then after marriage and a child it made things easier to take in my parents point of views as well which earlier i felt stifling.

Dare i say it is the home truth.

So as we have Arnav and Khushi already together ... Payal and Akash are also a very much in love couple. It will be interesting to see how they keep up with the struggles of not only daily life but also keeping a healthy relationship.

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sman

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Posted: 12 years ago

#78

Very "real" update asi happens in our life..realistic...loved I..thxxx for the PMPM

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marleylerner

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Posted: 12 years ago

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Oho doctor-engineer siblings!! Not again!! 😆

You brought in the other characters so well.

The whole Shashi-Garima conversation brings out the parental dilemma so well- do you let kids decide for themselves or go with what you think is best for them. Parents never want their kids to go through the hardships they've faced but sometimes they don't realise that kids are willing to pay the price of struggle for their dreams. While Garima, Payal and Arnav seem to agree with Shashi's view, I feel he should let Khushi decide. She may become financially independent but her soul may be rendered a lot more poor. And given how she has been able to manage her financial independence so far, I'd say she's quite capable of taking care of herself no matter what she does in life. But never know, she maybe able to pull off both-like Arnav said she can write and get published anyways.

I loved the Akash-Payal bit so much. Super-cute. It has left me with an intense craving for cheesecake though. Which cannot be satisfied at this moment :(

Payal thinks Arnav is a "goofy aimless brat". Woah! can't wait to find out more about him. Missed Arnav and Khushi and yet loved reading this chapter. Everything about your characters brings out so much comfort in their relationships depicted so far. It just warms my heart.

Thanks so much for such a prompt update. Eagerly awaiting the next one! You've got me hooked so quickly 😊

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A_BA

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Posted: 12 years ago

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Thanks for the PM, and the quick update😊

I really enjoyed the conversation between Khushi's parents; it was very realistic. I can totally understand their viewpoint in wanting Khushi to have a good life, and for them, that means a good job with a stable income. Because of their past in poverty, I think it would be hard for them to see Khushi pursue her dreams, which has a bleak future in terms of job/income/opportunities. I really like how you have dealt with this thus far. From personal experience, I have noticed many parents just decide things for their kids and say, "We know best," but at least Garima and Shashi have a valid reason for their decision.

I must say the last part was a little sad, with the crossword confirming what she has just done in terms of forgoing the internship. However, I am a firm believer that even when some doors close, others can open up...hopefully Khushi will get a best of both words, please her parents and herself!

Looking forward to the next update already! Hopefully we get more of that Khushi and Arnav banter that was so great in the first chapter😊

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