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Mihika

@Legilimens.

Rocker

+ 5

Posted: 12 years ago

#31

Res😊

Unres..

Lovelyyy OS Shreya. I liked the concept. Your OS was emotional.. and well you penned it beautifully. Though there was less continuity in the story, your OS kept me hooked on to it till the last word.. And mind you, the OS was written brilliantly.

This OS... it didn't have many dialogues.. And that is what I liked about it.. Many dialogues sometimes spoil the essence of the main story. And many many dialogues in such kind of emotional one shots are definitely not needed. You gave this story your touch... and penned it brilliantly. You made me emotional, anyway. 😆

The ending, sorry but it was a bit abrupt. I wish you would have given it a proper ending. Not that I didn't like it, I did.. But I felt that. 🤔

Please don't call your write ups bakwaas. 😳 They aren't bakwaas. I told you before that you are a flawless writer and if you say you completed in one day, then I must say hats off to you... Because it's not easy to write an emotional OS in a short span of time.. 😊

Loved the OS..Keep writing more. 😊

Edited by tanha29 - 12 years ago

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-GoluGudiya-

@-GoluGudiya-

Rocker

+ 2

Posted: 12 years ago

#32

Shreya ... PHIR Se Rula Diya ... Tumhare OS ne mujhe kitni baar rulaya, count karna padega ... This topic already sounded heart-breaking and you made it heart-aching ... But on a serious note, this was just outstanding ... I really have no words for this OS

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Alefiya Magar

@alef_mgr

Voyager

+ 2

Posted: 12 years ago

#33

Yu made me cry yaar lovely os...!!! Sachii loved it yaar...!!!!! 😃 😊

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ajaved

@ajaved

Sparkler

+ 3

Posted: 12 years ago

#34

Amazing wrk as usual reali loved it :)

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Vishwa

@-Inferno-

Voyager

+ 2

Posted: 12 years ago

#35

OMG Shreya!
Okay to be honest I kind of avoided reading this knowing the emotional atyachar you will doing to me...and I don't like crying much either...
but I ended up landing here.
I thought that this dare would be hard because it's kind of difficult getting all those emotions put into words. But but...damn! That was so good! Like whaaat...how old are you again??!!
My favourite part was when he went to Taani and she just knew what had happened without asking. That was touching! I could just see what the scene would be like and...ufff...this was sad...
Intricately written and beautifully executed!