The not so perfect yet perfect gift( MN OS)

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Posted: 12 years ago
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hello friends

I have written an os.
I had read this story and had this idea in my mind.
I have just taken the concept and everything is mine.
NOTHING IS SIMILAR EXPECT FOR THE GIFT GIVING THING.

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love YASHFEEN😊
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Posted: 12 years ago
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The not so perfect yet perfect gift

It was a fine morning when a ray of sunlight made its way towards her face and broke her sleep. It was a peaceful morning but her day wasn't going to be so peaceful .She turned to her left to look at her beloved husband but to her surprise he was not there. It was not a usual practise so she looked at the watch. It was 10:30am and she was quite surprised to see the time as she never slept for so long may be she had spent a lot of time planning for today last night before sleeping. It was their marriage anniversary.

She quickly got up from bed and started tying her long ,brown ,beautiful hair which has always brought her a lot of compliments. Her husband loved them his hands always made way towards them.

There is hardly any girl on this beautiful planet who wouldn't be jealous of her hair.

After tying her hair neatly she made her way towards the dining room. She was about to open her fridge to only find a note on it

"Darling I have left for office. I wanted to wake you up but you were looking way too beautiful in your sleep so I left And Happy marriage anniversary."

The note bought a beautiful smile to her face but soon it vanished because she remembered that she needed a gift for him and for that gift she needed money.

They were not one of those rich families who could afford gifts every now and then but had to save the whole year for that special present for that someone special.

Quickly she headed towards the bedroom and opened their closet and opened her purse where she had been saving money. She took out her purse and sat on the bed while taking out the money . She just had 475 rupees. She checked it twice just to check that she wasn't wrong.S he had been saving money from the past 8 months. She saved them by bargaining with the shopkeepers just for the sake of this day. And what all she had was just 475 rupees which was just not enough for buying a perfect gift for his beloved husband.she became sad.

"No Nupur this is just not enough. I have to do something but what?"

She kept thinking for some time and then moved towards the dressing table .She looked at herself in the mirror and slowly let her hair open. She checked the length and the shine. She dint want to do this but for his sake she had to do it. She kept looking at herself for quite some time and then tears started flowing from them. But she managed herself and for the sake of her husband she moved towards the wash room and soon left her house for buying the present.

She looked pretty but her hair added to her beauty and made her different in the crowd which her NOT-SO-COSTLY dresses couldn't do.

She soon reached her destination.

She entered the shop and reached the woman sitting at the reception.

"I want t-o s-ell my H-A-I-R"

Nupur said while fumbling.

The receptionist looked at her and spoke

"Do you mind if I see them"

"Yes, of course." Nupur said while smiling weakly.

"1000 rupees , not a penny less not a penny more."

The receptionist said sternly.

Nupur was not quite happy with amount for her beautiful hair but she thought that it was better than nothing so she made her way towards the chair. While her hair was being taken away just to divert her mind she kept thinking about the gift she had to buy for him. She knew what she wanted but she liked thinking about it. She wanted a beautiful chain for the gold locket he wears. The locket, which was passed from his grandfather to his father and then to him. It was a beautiful locket but unfortunately with an ugly looking black thread.

"Done mam. "

The woman said loudly just to bring Nupur out from her thoughts.

"Thank you"

Nupur said it and then looked at herself in the mirror ,she had hardly seen herself when she realised that it was quite late and she had to leave as her husband would be there by 6 as usual and she had to do a lot.

She hurriedly moved towards the market to get the gift. She kept looking for the perfect chain for him in quite a few shops and finally she found one.

It was just the perfect one it was as if she had been looking for this only she quickly looked at the price tag to check if it was in her budget. And thankfully it was. It was for 1350 rupees. She quickly paid the amount and left for buying other things that she would cook for dinner.

She had a continuous smile on her face on her way back home because of the perfect gift she had bought for him.

Soon she had reached home and then was afraid of looking at herself in the mirror she finally gained courage and moved towards it. The sight in front of her shook her world. Her beautiful knee length hair was gone they were now reaching her ear and in addition to that they were unevenly cut. She just fell on the floor and hundreds of questions were there in her mind .

Was he going to love her like this even ?will he hug her every morning saying that she looked beautiful.

Tears started gushing down her cheeks she was very sad at the sight of her hair. According to her she looked like a school boy with short hair cut.

She cried for some time and then composed herself. She started working on them. She used curlers to curl them and then started preparing the dinner. She had cooked some of his favourite food and once she was done with the cooking she again started working on her hair. She removed the curlers and started brushing them after she thought they looked bearable she changed herself in her best attire and then applied a bit of makeup. She looked at herself in the mirror and all over again she started feeling distressed .She was eager to see him react .She was wanting him to come soon. Just when his thought came in her mind she looked towards the clock to see the time, it was 5:45pm.It was almost time for him to come back she quickly gave a look to herself in the mirror and then moved towards the living area just to check if everything looked perfect. The curtains ,the flowers the dining table and everything and after checking everything she left her door open and sat beside it like every day.

It was already time for him to reach and she was eagerly waiting for him.

Suddenly she could hear the voice of footsteps she knew it was him so she got up from her seat and stood straight.

He was there inside the living room. He was a handsome young man who seemed to have gained responsibility at a tender age. He was wearing a simple coat and was wearing a smile on his face for her wife even after a tiring day at work.

But as soon as he looked at her he froze in his place. He just kept looking at her with a shocked expression on his face.

Nupur dint take much time to notice it so she hurriedly moved towards him

"Mayank please say something why are you looking so shocked?"

she said with concern though she was quite aware of the situation but she wanted to see his reaction.

But Mayank dint utter a word instead he kept staring at her.

She went even closer to him and kept one of her hand on his face and softly spoke

"Mayank I know I look like a school boy but please Mayank at least react say something good or bad whatever it is I will bear it but at least break this silence."

She said while crying and fell on the floor.

"Mayank please they will grow fast don't behave like this I need you to speak."

She said crying out loudly.

Seeing her on the floor he too sat next to her and brought his bag near

"Nupur"

he said softly with all the love he could show.

Hearing his soothing voice she quickly looked at him.

He cupped her face and started speaking lovingly

"Nupur You look equally beautiful nothing can change my love for you. And definitely just your hair wouldn't make a difference. I love you Nupur with or without your hair. I am just worried about this."

Saying this he handed her a packet and she looked at him surprised and with love.

She quickly opened the gift and again tears started flowing from her eyes.

"Mayank now I know what made u freeze at your place."

She said while crying.

It was the perfect gift which seemed not so perfect at this point of time. It was a set which contained every necessary thing for her hair to look even more beautiful. It had everything from hair dryer to straightner from clips to shampoo and from rubber bands to hair serum. It was the kit she always wanted to enhance the beauty of her hair.

"Thanks a lot Mayank my hair would grow very fast and soon I would make use of them."

saying this she quickly rushed to bring his gift. And soon she was back she handed it to him

"Mayank this is the perfect gift for you. You will love it."

Mayank quickly opened it and got yet another shock of his life.

"Nupur its lov-e-l-y"

he said while stammering.

"Mayank please give me the locket"

she asked with happiness.

"Nupur just like you sacrificed your hair for me I gave it away for this happiness of yours."

He said while hiding his face.

Tears gushed down her cheeks and she hugged him tightly he too responded .They showered love to each other. This thing proved that they love each other and must have definitely increased their love for each other.And love was spread in their house along with tears.


hope u like it😳


love YASHFEEN😊

Edited by Bhatakti_atma - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
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omg its so touchy...sweet...
very very beautiful
hats off

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Posted: 12 years ago
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Very emotional yet sweet..
Liked your version of the story..
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Posted: 12 years ago
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It is emotional
keep rocking👍🏼
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Posted: 12 years ago
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aww that was really very touchy...
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Posted: 12 years ago
#7
Too gud yashfeen...
Although,I have heard the story ,but the way you wrote it...very touchy and emotional...I could actually feel mayur...very nice

Thanx,love
Neha
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Posted: 12 years ago
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wow wow wow wow wow its just wow
i am a speechless u made mi that
awww how sweet of them
how much they to love each other
it was amazing OS
Thanks for pm and sorry for late my bachha

love u keep rocking

Edited by deepa5 - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
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i thnk dis story is inspired by the gift of magi ryt???
but it was tooo touchy n emotional...n on top of it, it was MAYUR version...!!!!so it had 2 b d bst..!!!
luvly...n thnx 4 d pm..!!
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Very nice... Love ur writing... R u a writer? If no,then please start writing a book dear... 😊

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