ARSHI FF: ~PAWN~(BFTW3)# 6 Ch14 Pg122 25/04 EXT - Page 92

Originally posted by: manaskrmajumder

a tear escaped my eyes when khushi took the name of arnav feeling him without his touch...
i think it was the worst and best feeling at the same time for arnav after all that he has done to khushi...
loved this portion... will be waiting for the extension...
come soon and belated SUBHO NOBOBORSHO...

Originally posted by: basanti108

Hey apply, hope your well...erm before I comment I just wanted to say brace yoursel this might take a long time to read...I realised that I havent commented since chapter 9 since I stopped reading...I know its bad but every time I read the story, I kept thinking im missing another part to the story, as it kept confusing me so decided to stop it but when I got your PM about this a while ago I thought let me give it another try because I have read your other stories and they are absolutely amazing!! so enough of me babbling here my comments starting from chapter 10...

(one thing i'll be writing my comments as I read along..just like I did for the charmer and his lady - hope your like that comment and didn't bore you)

chapter 10

awww khushi such a child and has so much innocent in her...I dont understand why arnav can not see that??

Im guessing arnav and khushi did the 'deed' last night and how on earth did he just realised now?? He really doesn't care about her and is so selfish...woow she sensed his touch and didn't like, that actually the first time I have read that in a story...interesting...I guess people like khushi 'innocent' can tell the different between someone has a good heart or a nasty cholesterol blockage heart (sorry for my medical words...I really should be revising for my exams which are in three week - ill get there soon)

awww khushi so adorable..she just wants a hug from him and is afraid to tell him what a beast he is...its really bad that she doesnt realise how he treats her is not the way a girl/women should ever be treated but she was grown up on principals from her bauji that she need to keep her husband happy and also her in-laws...I think khushi going to make me cry at the rate she going at...she so innocent and doesnt deserve him...she only want one text from him 😔

Extension ch 10

Whats wrong with the family (excluding akash and shyam)...they are so mean and evil...even nani not nice...but the pack of the evil is anjali!!!

LOLL I would actually loved to see anjali and mami face when arnav fed khushi...how comical would that have looked...HAHAHA

I dont understand why does anjali hate khushi?? what did khushi do that so horrible?? also why is arnav crossing the limit when he is defending khushi (quite shocking but then surely and slowly khushi is making a place for herself in arnav heart)...

LOVE LOVE LOVE the reply arnav give to nani and also to anjali...they deserve it...you can tell that nani think she in charge when she clearly not and anjali wouldnt leave the money behind ..they are not nice people...but I dont understand why doesnt nani stand up for khushi surely she could see a daughter and innocent in her?? but I did notice why is anjali nice to arnav??it surely cant just be for money..unless she only has hatred toward khushi only

by the way I know I keep putting question marks but dont worry you dont need to answer them...I hope unless I have completly confused myself and you need to answer them

Chapter 11

I think arnav is as confuse with his feelings as I read my static notes from my lectures...LOLL he wants to hurt her and she is his enemy but he doesn't like that anjali or nani says anything about her...I guess even thought he is scolding her, he is only trying to protect her ...also I love the comment khushi said 'left or right' and arnav coming out with a cheeky side to him and said center - that part so adorable!!

Hmmm.. I think payel is living on mars!! Passion baby passion...really...I must say that line was soo funny and i know you havent wrote it but I can imagine payel saying it and has her thumb and index finger in an L-shape (like a director would do looking at the scenery)...so funny

OMG Payel is seeing akash!! well im guessing she seeing akash...but wooow what an underdog akash is..

Second OMG...Did arnav just shove her into position and try to do the deed...and didnt stop until her saw her tear even though she said she was sore 😭

Chapter 12

awww...khushi such a baby..wait a min what is her age in this story?? ...im glad to read that khushi smiling and laughing..she deserves happiness...oh no 😔 the beast started again...when will he stop and realise that she is in pain?? also he giving her a cold shoulder which she doesn't deserve...why cant he just spare 5 min of his time and understand her...I just hope he not leaving and having S** with someone else... thou at the back of my mind he is

WOOW payel is bold...she slept with her 'deewana' to see if the are compatible for life..interesting - i like the way the story is turning out...and omg payel just hit the nail on the head with khushi...if he doesnt get what he wants with his wife he will go somewhere else...I love the way you have created this character payel...she very sweet, honest and actually straight foreword...I think i should read further than comment...can't believe she just brushed off khushi when she was explaing how arnav treats her

I actually cant wait till everyone find out the truth about khushi and also the relationship between them too...I just hope khushi doesnt forgive too quickly and easily

arnav got everything wrong...this GG is evil (sorry but have I just missed a part of the story...where on earth did GG come from...anyways

OMG the extension...Im in tears...I thinkout of the whole story that extension just broke me into pieces...it was beautifully writing ok beautifully may not the word but I couldnt stop reading it till it ended...it was like my eyes were glued to the words of the alphabets! AMAZING that extenstion was truly amazing!! I can't praise it enough..woow the worst part for me which broke me into tears was that khushi went and slept on the same bed and hugged arnav and said that she loves him...khushi has a heart of gold!! and i feel so sorry for her...she has no one Brilliant update!!!

Chapter 13

khushi caused herself harm just so he doesnt go to other girls...im still in tears...the last chapter and this chapters are so well written its so heartbreaking

'samjhota' that one word...I cant describe it...it made me think of Kuch khuch hota hai and imagining what kajol went through...oh my

omg I HATE anjali...she pure evil!!! how could she say that about shyam??

EVEN arnav knows that shyam wouldnt do such things!!!

THANK GOD!!! nani is finally there for khushi!!! but is it too late??

Realisation of arnav!!! finally khushi suffering will lessen!!!

Chapter 14 (i know, we're finally there)

LOVED the way you put across arnav thoughts...shashi has a great impact on his life and yet he treated shashi daughter wrongly...and finally he understand the type of girl khushi is and her character...and there goes the tears again!! she held on to him...oh my

All in all...where do I start?... I just love the emotions you put foreword for khushi and arnav character...and instead of lots of emotions which normally all writers write you write a lot about the thought process that anav and khushi has which is amazing bec it gives an insight on how the characters come about and how in some way or another they do fit together like a piece of puzzle even though arnav character is so mean and horrid...Lovely story!! but a heartbreaking one...and I must say you must be the first writers who has reduced me into tears!!

please update soon and sorry about my babbling...I dont mean to..I do get carried away when I get interested in a story 😳 I actually cant wait to read more and see what the story unfolds 😊...P.S your a brilliant writer keep up the amazing work!! 😊

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OMG...when I posted this comment I just realised how long my comment is...I am actually really sorry...you dont have to read it if you dont want to...oh crap I do apologies😳

Originally posted by: oops-whoops

this really makes me melt towards arnav but nahhh not so easilyyy!!!!!!!!!!!!

pooor girl !!!!!!

now i hope he pampers her to the core i mean not that core kkk😛

Originally posted by: hmtxyz

I guess this is my first comment after reading the prologue and sending you the PM.

What can I say? Even though I am not fond of dark stories...your writing and creativity saw to it that I read all your updates, albiet as a silent reader.

Maybe subconsciously, I was waiting for some positivity..

But still, I am so sorry for commenting so late.

Thank you for this positivity. Maybe it doesn't exist in the real world. But I would be damned if I didn't hope and dream of it!

Great work!

Originally posted by: PhenoixTears

Time to repent Arnav, you did behave like a monster. Fantastic update Appy, it was just right on target and the way you wrote it, it felt like Arnav is someone right in front of me, regretting his mistakes. Very realistic update, loved it 😊

Originally posted by: sweetnoni

Reallyyy wow..superbb update yaar!! Mindblowing!! Like most of ure updates..even 2day u toched our harts!!

The way u showed arnav 2day was just superbb. Finaly he knows the truth about khushi being innocent. I just hope that now he will do everything to get her trust n love back. Curious to know how he is gonna do that;)

Like every1 else even im w8ing 4 the extension.
Soo pls continue soon bec im dying 2 know whats gonna happen next!!

Once again.. superbb update!!

Originally posted by: angel_prachi

Appy di sabse first I LOVE U didi .;i have no words fr this update touched my heart deeply i cried i feel all moments khoushi pain arnav regret it was a very emotionnel update lived every moment with nd sachhi abhi bhi dil nai bhara aissa feel huva ke ye part khatam hi na ho it was wonderfull hope arnav nknow give all the happyness nd love to khoushi nd khoushi forgive him fingers crossed..😭..
nd cant wait fr EXTENSION part di pllljjj jaldi jaldi ajana nd plllzz pm me to if possible i know bohot saara pms karne hote so np di ,,but my heart say today di i Salute u it was beautifful time u give us always with arshi stories..❤️

Originally posted by: AppyIndyPM

kamini kidhar hai tu? did you speak to sumu?

Originally posted by: angeldream14

awesome

its funny when someone breaks u beyond the point u can take but still u find poeace only with them

its like life is playing a cruel joke on u, even when u bleed u smile as u hv them close to u, there presence is enough

but isn't being alone is better then being with someone n still being alone