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Wow just wow, the update was just mind blowing and phenomenol, it was written so beautifully. Loved at the start how they both started of in the challenging mode, by taking there clothes of in turn. Khushi actually took the first step to touch and kiss him, poor Arnav was getting so sexually frustrated he had to come out with his dirty talking according to khushi. Wow loved how you wrote there love making, it was so passionate, intense and outstanding, written exceptionally well. Poor Arnav thought she was going to leave without tell him, he sounded so heart broken then, so glad khushi decided to stay. Finally he confessed his love, it's a shame khushi was asleep and the last paragraph was just so beautiful, loved the dialogues you used;
"Their breaths.. not only mingling together, but coming in the same rhythm too. As if they were following each other. & at that moment, he felt it. If she stopped breathing, his heartbeats would follow too. & the inevitable just tumbled out of his lips, "Khushi nahi rahi, toh Arnav ki saanse ruk jayengi!" He didn't know from when, but she had become his life for him. & as he felt her snuggling up to his body more, her hair mussed over his chest, something else left his lips, that shocked him more than everything else that had happened that night, "I love you, Red!"
Please continue soon and thanks for the PM xx
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