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Shivangi

@peraltagasm

Stunner

+ 3

Posted: 12 years ago

Heya guys! I just randomly thought of writing an OS on the current track.. Abhi kuch nahi bolungi.. Abhi bas read it and then tell me How was it! N yeah.. Utna achcha nahi hua hai jitna I expected it to be.. So joote, chappal, Rotten eggs and rotten tomatoes are welcome! But do comment!

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Gosh! He missed her.. He missed her real bad! She hadn't picked up his call since she had cut it when he called to tell her that He was in Goa.. He knew she was hurt.. And he also knew that he was wrong! It had been a day sice he was trying to talk to her.. but it seemed years to him..

He was there on the empty beach that morning.. in the calm and serene environment.. with only some silent figures moving around..

"I'm sorry Taani.. I miss you!" Rey said to himself.. or maybe to his heart.. coz he knew.. That she is there.. in his heart.. and she would listen..

He kept walking on the beach..

BG tune- Kuch Kam from the movie Dostana.. ( play the song if you have it)

* music*

Kuch Kum Roshan hai roshani
Kuch kum gili hai barishien
Kuch Kum Lehrati hai hawa
Kuch Kum hai dil mein khawishein
Tham sa gaya hai yeh waqt aise
Tere liye hi thehra ho jaiisee
hmmm hmmm hmmm..

Rey remembers the time.. When Taani held his hand and forcefully took him to the medical room to heal his wounds..

Kuch Kum Roshan hai roshani
Kuch kum gili hai barishien
Kuch Kum Lehrati hai hawa
Kuch Kum hai dil mein khawishein
Tham sa gaya hai yeh waqt aise
Tere liye hi thehra ho jaiisee

Hmmm hmmm hmmm..

Rey remebers how she carefully bandanged his wounds in the medical room.. and how he got lost into the deep caring warmth of her beautiful eyes..

* music*

He dialled her number again.. Hoping that she would pick up this time.. but.. " The number you have dialled is switched off.." It said.

" I'm Sorry.." He breathed again and looked at her picture on his phone..

Kyun meri saaans bhi kuch feeki si hai
Duriyon se hui nazdiki si hai
Kyun meri saaans bhi kuch feeki si hai
Duriyon se hui nazdiki si hai

Rey remebers the day when he confessed his feelings to her.. Her words still echoed in his mind.. " I love you Rey.. I love you!"

" I love you Taani..." He breathed.

Jaane kya Yeh baat hai
Har subha Abb raat hai

Kuch Kum Roshan hai roshani
Kuch kum gili hai barishien
Kuch Kum Lehrati hai hawa
Kuch Kum hai dil mein khawishein
Tham sa gaya hai yeh waqt aise
Tere liye hi thehra ho jaiisee

Hmmm hmmm hmmm..

* music*

He kept walking.. Until a soft hand slowly intertwined with his and held it firmly.. He tightened his grip on her soft hands and smiled..
Phool meheke nahi kuch gumsum say hai
Jaise roothe hue kuch yeh tumse hai
Phool meheke nahi kuch gumsum say hai
Jaise roothe hue kuch yeh tumse hai
She slowly cupped his face with one hand and slowly pulled him down to kiss his cheeks..

He closed his eyes.. feeling her soft lips againts his skin..

He slowly opened his eyes.. to look at her.. as she slowly loosened her grip on his hands and started walking towards the wavs.. Rey turned his face to look at her.. Only to find her fading figure going away from him..

" Taani..." He said in a broken voice and extended his hand as if calling her back..

Khusbooien Dhal gai.. saath tum Abb jo nahi

Kuch Kum Roshan hai roshani
Kuch kum gili hai barishien
Kuch Kum Lehrati hai hawa
Kuch Kum hai dil mein khawishein
Tham sa gaya hai yeh waqt aise
Tere liye hi thehra ho jaiisee
hmmm hmmm hmmm hmmm
hmmm hmmm hmmm hmmm

* music*

He stared at the waves.. as if accusing them.. of taking Taani away from him.. as if his glare would bring her back to him.. Her thoughts overpowered his mind again and he got lost in her thoughts until someone kept their hand on his shoulder and said.. " Rey?"..

Her voice.. Its her voice.. His heart said to him.. " How can she be here.. But is she really?!" Rey asked his heart.. and when he turned to look at the person.. He found himself getting drowned into the beautiful eyes of the love of his life..

" Taani..." He breathed as she slowly smiled at him..

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Okay.. So this was it.. Kaisa laga?! Please do comment.. Joote, chappal, rotten eggs and tomatoes are welcome.. Coz mujhe bilkul bhi satisfaction nahi mili isse.. Pata nahi aap logo ko kaisa laga ho.. Please do comment.. means a lot to me!

P.S.- Ho sakta hai mai aapke comments ka re-reply na kar pau.. Exam season chal raha hai mera.. Yeh OS post bhi maine bohot mushkil se kiya!

Thankyou! N do comment! Silent readers.. atleast hit the "LIKE" button if you like it!

Edited by Shivangi_Taarey - 12 years ago

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Sneha

@Mohit_monaya

Rocker

Posted: 12 years ago

it was really sweet... :) i really liked it... so instead of joote, chaapal, rotten eggs and tomatoes... *hug* :)

needed sumthin like dis after kal ka epi... thanks :)

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chandrima

@chand91

Rocker

Posted: 12 years ago

realy

kl k episod k bad aap k ds ne thori santi di

thnks 4 pm

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annie

@patie

Inactive

+ 2

Posted: 12 years ago

Uff dis ws damn beautiful shivangi
taani in rey's dream...such a wonderful thought 😳
very well wrriten luvd it...uff dats wat i call my original
passionate taarey...i want this to happen in d3
ssly palki should learn frm u 😆🤢

Edited by patie - 12 years ago

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asha rani.B.S

@Asha_Tacker

Rocker

+ 4

Posted: 12 years ago

it ws so beautiful dr.u described flngs of rey msng tani so wel.i so wish cv's shw smtg lk tis(bt ty wnt,i knw) & d sng selctin is so apt.

Edited by asharani261 - 12 years ago

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sonakshigupta

@sonakshigupta

Voyager

Posted: 12 years ago

It was beautiful shivangi...i dnt knw y u din feel it 2 b up 2 d mark...bt i felt really nyc aftr reading it...thnx 4 postin it n also thnx 4 d pm..wish ur xams werent goin on...so i cud demand 4 a early update...coz trust wen it came 2 an end i was really dissapointd dat y did it hve 2 end n dat too juz wen she turns up...damn!...anyways waitin 4 ur update n all d bst 4 ur xam :)

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ShivTRSS

@ShivTRSS

Dazzler

Posted: 12 years ago

Okay. Frankly Shivangi, muje bhi satisfaction nahi mila. Kyun pata he? Itana chhota? I would have loved to read more on this. But as u have got exams, chalo koi gal nahi.
Now, to the OS, it was beautiful. Thats all I can say. Very few times, I have read Rey's POV, in our ffs. And this is one of them. And the way he feels about Taani, is portrayed so amazingly. The love, guilt, pain, that incomplete feeling. Everything. So sweet os. Amazing, really. You can write really very well(UNDERSTATEMENT), so keep writing. And good luck for exams.