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badfaith4u

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Dazzler

Posted: 12 years ago

#51

Congrats on the new thread
I'm looking forward to Arnav earning her forgiveness

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Yellow.

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Posted: 12 years ago

#52

Congrats on new thread!!

awesome update!!

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vgedin

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Posted: 12 years ago

#53

Arre, first you were Travelling and I was waiting for an update. Now you update and I am travelling. I will catch up with the three naya updates as soon as I get back and then comment. But congrats ! Thread 6, yay!

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JerryTheMouse

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Dazzler

Posted: 12 years ago

#54

Updated res on page 3.

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Mrinalini

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Posted: 12 years ago

#55

Congrats on the New Thread!

Awesome update!

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AquaSandhya

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Posted: 12 years ago

#56

You really know how to pace your story telling yet sustain the reader's interest. Love the way you use symbolism to show the character progression. "Arnav walks along the beach with his head bowed" - the diction and narrative are both of great consequence. He is giving in to Khushi's desire - to earn her forgiveness. Incredible!

Love the way Arnav notices every little detail of Khushi, her laughter lines, her crinkling eyes, the way she holds her stomach, her long hair. He is vvv clearly attracted to her. Something like the Diwali scene coming up? Didn't she pack a saree?

Although he does have trust issues. "lies" - his thoughts when he remembers Khushi telling him that she doesn't want jewellery.

I feel that your greatest strength lies in your character sketch being along the lines of IPK. This gives you the time and space to develop the story line that captures the reader. If Arnav's arrogance, his anger, placing his family above all else are in tune with ASR, Khushi's innocence, her ability to forgive, her disdain for money or superficial luxuries are in line with our KKGSR.

Absolutely fantastic FF.