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LooneyLuna

@LooneyLuna

Dazzler

Posted: 12 years ago

#41

Ah I love the concept! I think expel tried to close a few in LLATW..par then the storyline was different.

I like the way you are approaching it..kind of opens a room for ASR to see his mistakes, may it be shyam or the proposal. The tiny changes can go such a long way in fully appreciating a story, and thats exactly how I felt when I read this.

And whats more you write very well too..bas add some GIFs to your authors notes (EXPEL will explain) and dude you will be a star yaaarz.

Stay Beautiful

Hitashi

ps. looking forward to more..whats next??

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binimoti

@binimoti

Dazzler

+ 4

Posted: 12 years ago

#42

Oh so nice thanks for closing the loops

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Lakshmi

@Chipmunks.

Voyager

Posted: 12 years ago

#43

The conversation about Shyam was very much needed. He should know how his one mistake changed their whole life. In both good and bad ways. I liked how Khushi saw it as a positive thing cuz if he hadnt leaked that video they wouldnt have been and we would have missed all those rabba ve's. If she saw all the positive things then he thought about the hurt and pain he gave her.
The proposal was so lovely. I also thought that Arnav had more likely ordered everyone that their would be a second marriage. Very lovely update :)

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laksh65

@laksh65

Rocker

+ 2

Posted: 12 years ago

#44

very beautiful os, loved it.

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Mahnoor

@Mojoo

Voyager

Posted: 12 years ago

#45

Loved ur 2 OS's which u have posted so far...Ur idea is amazing to close loops...I m looking forwrd to some more from ur side...keep writing...u r amazing...

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shutter

@shutter

Voyager

Posted: 12 years ago

#46

Just found this on the forum, n i must say it''s awesome!!!!!!!

loved the fact that u wrote about the much needed meeting of shyam n khushi!!!!!!

n the proposal was so beautiful!!!!!!!! arnav's thoughts, his guilt, his wanting to try n redeem himself was just aptly described...

loved it!!!

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preethi28

@preethi28

Navigator

Posted: 12 years ago

#47

I was asking Juhi for exactly this kind of thing -closing the loops. And while scrapping her I clicked the link to your profile on one of your scraps , found your blog and lo behold! closing the loops!😲

I just read the first one.

I always hated the way Arnav decided to marry Khushi a second time because of Dadi's interference and then decided to make it miserable.

After all those scenes where Khushi tells Arnav how important marriage is to her and especially after the scene during preeto's-wedding-track when Arnav saw Khushi lying to her friends about their wedding , lying to her mother about him being the "perfect husband" the CV"s still dished out such crap!😲

I loved the thought behind the first part .

It is written beautifully especially the part where Khushi tells Arnav about "their" rasams.😊

Off to read the second one.😃

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preethi28

@preethi28

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Posted: 12 years ago

#48

Now what do I do with myself!😕

I read the proposal thinking it to be the first part and then realized that Journey is the first one😆

Anyhoo another major blunder the Cv's made was never mention Shyam. He was the root cause of all evils and Arnav and Khushi never discussed his entry or the engagement after the kidnap .

It is to be expected that Arnav would guilty but why fear when Khushi is here?

She can convince anyone about anything!😊

It was a good idea, the runaway stumbling and catching😊