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Posted: 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Zee..!! Awesome Update! Thought it is a little confusing.. I mean is the metallic thing Sanaya saw related to the ghost and the accident?? I am so damn confused. But the update was amazing, I loved the way you showed the characterization of Abhinav. But few things are yet to be opened right! Anyways.. Thanks for the PM once again! And please continue soon to take me out of this confusion!
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Posted: 13 years ago
#83
I cannot believe that you announced this as ur last work! You're one of the AMAZING writers i have ever read on IF!

Plus about this story... i loved the way you declared what you have in mind and the clarity with which you're handing the entire story! Beautiful! I'm looking forward for more!
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Posted: 13 years ago
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I think there is a cut or sth on their car metal! which was probably made by Abhinav's Axe, when they hit him a few minutes ago :P
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Yo Zee babe!
Early morning i get up, and see a pm from u, title ch 2, n i jump between the pages, searching for ur reply, before reading the chapter...
And this time am not being lazy at all in replying :p
Rahi comment ke lamba hone ki baat, trust me, your my trigger...
And this ain't to flatter you, i'm being very honest, so just enjoy the compliments...
If you check my wall, i've announced my resignation from IF, but your pm is making me comment on every single chapter, something that i haven't done since quite long, due to hostel and lack of time...

Ok, reply back to ur reply first...
No, am not placing u any higher than what u deserve...
Dude, recently am off reading IF, it's become so monotonous, boring, and just a repetition, nothing new...
So this concept coming from you is totally innovative, and fun to read...

My 'HE' man, God! You didn't put him in this chapter, and am missing him so much already...
I don't know why, reading ur description of him, it feels, ki Mohit hai...
But when i think deeply, i have other guesses...
It could be Barun, given his soft chocolate brown eyes... Abhinav bi ho sakta hai, coz of his discomfort with Em...
Karan Godwani, Akshay Dogra, Kunal Karan Kapoor, Abhishek Sharma, n Hiten Tejwani i'm ruling out, i don't feel inmein se koi hai...
Karan Tacker he could be, just maybe..
But i've a stronger feeling my HE man is either Barun ya Abhinav... hopefully sooo...
Also becoz u say he was lucky girls didn't see him, kyunki they'll recognize him na when they meet the Sobti and Shukla... :p
And he was no ghost, we all know, right...
He's just supernatural... oops!
Unnatural i mean ;)
Yeah! I do like him already...
Pehle i'd thought ki Barun n Abhinav are slaves, and the HE man is that ruler...
But now if i think ki HE man Abhinav ya Barun hain, then woh ruler kaise ho sakte hain, coz they are two, and not one :p
God! Am so confused...
I just know am waiting for u to lift the veil off my HE man...

Now enough abt him... I need to stop...
Let's move on to others...
I agree am noticing the characters a bit too much...
But i missed the hint ur talking about...
I felt San was trying to bribe Em by letting her drive, maybe to snuggle off the cadburys in the mean time...

You really don't need to worry about the way you're going with characters...
Trust me on that, all the characters are worth loving, the way you're describing them...

Yes! The Sobti and Shukla guy have a depth about their character already...
When i don't know their side, still i can predict they're not here to make life perfect...

Now coming to the chapter...
I know what you're doing...
Making people fall for San, given her easy going nature...
Abhinav's character, i am honestly loving the entry you're giving to ur characters...
Each one of them different, suiting their personalities...

Ok, now this ain't an accusation, but try understanding my point...
Firstly... You say Em didn't give her galaxy to San, whereas San gave away her brand new car for light fun...
This puts Em in a lil grey light, not in the bad sense, bt as in how San loves her so much to trust her, bt Em doesn't trust San...
Well! I beg to differ here...
I don't think that the brand new skoda was San's life, how much ever she loved it...
But the fact tht the galaxy had Em's life, makes it way more important... so i don't think she's wrong in not giving it to San...
Secondly... By shedding light on the friction between Em and Abhinav, it feels (according to San) that Em is being the tough one, by not letting the tension go, even when Abhinav was being so decent and trying to lighten the atmosphere...
San's point of view shows that Abhinav was trying to make ammends on their first appearance, but Em was blocking him, by already disliking him...
No doubt i like San for her jovial nature, but am with Em in this..
Coz San's naivety, and ability to trust easily may land her in trouble easily, while Em is being precautious...
So as a conclusion, am looking for the mystery behing how Em's mind work...

Now, Abhinav's equation with the sisters...
Em, i guess Abhinav is the HE man because he and Em instantly have a connection, of unease and friction maybe, but connection all the same...
It could be die to the fact that Em had almost hit into him, and she has a sense of deja vu seeing him now, and that's whats keeping her on guard from liking him...
With San, after initial discomfort, San formed a bond with him, of acquaintances, given her nature to find good in everything...
Abhinav also responds to her initiative in order to cover himself, but he knows that Em was not easy to convince...
San tries her best to let go of all tension from there, and succeeds, but just artificially, because the real mystery is still there...

Barun has already made an entry in the end of this chapter...
I simply can't wait to know the details about him...
Abhinav's reluctance to let them in the house makes me wonder what could actually be there...

Anyways, without racking my brain any more, i'll wait for the next chapter...
Hopefully it has my HE man too

Love you loads...
pooja

Ps - i never realized tht i wrote so long, but there was so much to say, lol...
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Posted: 13 years ago
#86
Ok this cannot be vour last work here dammit! Why are you saying like that Zee?? :(
I love your way of story telling.It is very percise an calculated and i feel like reading an actual printed book. trust me that is the biggest praise i can give!

Oh man! I wanted to see Sobti..:/But i think Sobti is the one the girls were about to hit with the car you know. It'l make sense about the next chapter's name. You become good friends through crazy incidents like this right?
BTW i have no idea what Sanaya saw. Me love the fact that she is tomboyish and is interested in cars. I know this is just a character but i am more like Em i guess. I love books!

Next update!!!

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Posted: 13 years ago
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You are such a brilliant writer!
And I am so bloody hooked to this story!
I love it!
Abhinav seems cute!
And I can't wait till you introduce Barun!
And every chapter is a cliff-hanger and I love that!
Keeps me intrigued! And I like being curious! 😉
Please update soon! Thanks for the PM.
And yes...I will be updating Supernatural soon!!! 😃
Love you!

Manal <3

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Posted: 13 years ago
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😊 hello once again Z 🤗 Firstly bring me some pie 🤣 😎 *dean style* . Ummm kia kahun 😃 🤣 U 've pinned it once again 👏 But Where's Barun 🤔 use introduce nai kia . Chal koi baat nai 😊. Bring me pie 🤣 hehehe . Ummm u'll c Cass in 7th seasn and in S8 🤔.
Keep updating 🤗
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Posted: 13 years ago
#89
Thank You! Thank You! for such lovely reviews, see you have me here because of them, i work this way, i update quick if i know my readers are eager to read more...Doing all replies here :) At a go 😳
Not updating now though, it would be Wednesday morning, be here 😳

It amuses me how nearly all of you are looking for something...something unnatural to happen, maybe i did a bad thing by leaving the second chap on a cliffhanger 😳

@Nivriti- Thanks dear :) Let me give you a teeny weeny hint, think from Sanaya's point of view, a girl who barely notices what's going around her, who thinks the world is a happy place to be, with no such thing as bad. Sanaya who gets excited for the smallest of things and amused by the funniest of things. What did she possibly see? I am happy you like Abhinav in this chapter that was my intention, there is Lots (not few) more to him :)

@Varshini- Thank You for your kind words, actually it's time to let studies take the front seat 😆 That's why this will be my last :)
I am glad i am able to present clarity in my work, for that was one of my fears you know, because of the mystery element all of this can just end up being maha confusing 😆 Your prediction- Hmm sorry Remember it was a young boy, and Abhinav has black copper eyes, dont be discouraged though, try again 😳

@Pooja- Your review is nearly as long as the chapter itself! 😲 I LOVE YOU 🤗😆 I updated early morning, was infront of my laptop like an owl editing the chap 😆 You know me well, i dont like flattery, i prefer readers discuss the chapters with me :)
I am glad that this series acts as a relaxation and a means of entertainment for you, i guess i know how it feels to be stuck between masses of work and knowing that you have a place where you know you can chill and relax later :)
I did want this FF to be unique, it was to be my last, so i experimented. I am glad it paid well :) Imagine my horror, it was that nobody would turn up to read 🤣 I was being silly but that's how i am before posting my work :P 😆

Now coming to your He man, the one who made his appearance in the first chap- well i would say you are on the right track :D the one who is mentioned in the Summary, well keep guessing :P I think you are waiting for the He in the first chap, or are you equally excited for the He in the summary? But you are confused both could be the same, you answered that though...how can one be both? To take you out of the confusion, Both the 'He' mentioned are two different people :)

Now regarding San and Madhura, nope San wasn't bribing her, Don't forget Em was scared to drive, it's not her forte. San never attempted to get her hands on the box later. San was up for a little adventure that's all.
still i can predict they're not here to make life perfect...
BANG On right..
You know them well, yes fall for San plleeeassee 😆
Regarding the point you have put forward, you misunderstand me hun, though you got the characters right :) It doesn't demean one sister in comparison to the other, Neither is it an intended means to show any lack of affection or love from Em's side, the girls are loving affectionate sisters. But they are not the picture perfect sketch of sisters. Em by nature is reserved when it comes to certain matters, for her right reasons. While Sanaya is selfless, she believes in fairytales, of loving her sister infinitely, irrevocably forever. She doesn't place her car of much importance as you rightly said unlike Em who thinks her life resides in her phone. So definitely she is Not wrong if she doesn't wanna hand it over to San.
The equation between the three and the friction, you are very much right. Well Done ⭐️
Abhinav's equation- I am not giving you an insight to his mind in my reply. You are forgetting Abhinav has black copper eyes. There is nothing in the house, you will know in the next chap why he bid them a quick goodbye. Though keep guessing you might actually guess it right, you are good at this, you understand the characters really well :)
ermm why do u think Sobti made an entry by the end? hehe
Eager to hear more from you particularly after the next chapter gets posted 😳

@Gayu- Ah Gayu, don't worry am here for now, this series is gonna be a long journey, let's worry abt the last part later 😳
An actual printed book? I am honored :) You are right and wrong, work your way :P and I think my chapter titles are going well, which is an achievement am bad at titles 😆 Glad you like San and Em and get their characters very well perceived :) Thanks for reading 🤗

@tehzeeb- thank you :)

@Manal- Haha Thank You ! 😳 Yes when one mystery solves many others rise, you will see that's how the story will flow :) Thanks for reading and yup waiting for Supernatural nxt update! Make it sooonn ! :DD 🤗

@DevilzAngel aka Sonu- Heya! 🤗 Don't do that i have been addicted to SPN, dont want the fever back 😆 Thanks! Barun will make his entry next chap as i said, wanna give equal space to everyone :P

@Juhi- Hiiee! 🤗 Thanks :) Glad you liked it!

Edited by TheWandmaker - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
#90
Hiii
Awesome update
Loved it
I'm kinda confused
But can't wait 4 more
Con soon
Thanks 4 da pm

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