ArHi SS: The Holiday: UPDATED; night no.1 part 2

First Previous

Page

Next Last

Frequent Posters

Divyanshi Vineet Malaviya

@babydevil

Voyager

+ 4

Posted: 12 years ago

#301

It is awesome !

I loved it

But isn't khushi being tooo kiddish !!

I mean taking his phones battery and making him miss business can make him and his business suffere a good great loss !

And then not understanding arnav's anger !
Made me feel like khushi is 5 !!

But all over i loved the update !!
It was mindblowing & superb !
Update soon
Love
Diva

Quote

Nidsubh007

@Nidsubh007

Rocker

+ 7

Posted: 12 years ago

#302

Just when I thought they were going to make up it falls apart! Hope they don't get into too big of a fight.

Quote

Looks like you are new here. Register for free, learn and contribute.

TeriKhamoshiyan

@TeriKhamoshiyan

Rocker

+ 4

Posted: 12 years ago

#303

awsome update..luved how khushi felt bad at first in the car then hugged himand said sorry and then realized that he still didn't say sorry and flipped out that was funny...luved ur update plz update soon..luv reading ur story, very eager for ur next updaate!!

Quote

Param

@pup03

Sparkler

+ 4

Posted: 12 years ago

#304

wow lovely !!! god half of their time is fighting and other half saying sorry to each other.. when will they get time to love... ARSHI, unique couple... love them... thanks for pm dear 😊

Quote

Vithagan2304

@Vithagan2304

Dazzler

Posted: 12 years ago

#305

wow tat was an amazing update, jus loved it:) feeling pity for our cute khushi:(

Quote

ipkknd_gbdfan

@ipkknd_gbdfan

Navigator

Posted: 12 years ago

#306

I liked the long update :D

And you are not rubbish at the description part...I won't deny that you include few descriptions, but you basically cover all the necessary ones so that the readers have a picture of what you are yapping about! And sometimes, the beauty lies in the vagueness and simplicity of the writing instead of the intricate metaphoric descriptions :D For example, you don't bore us with the "saw love in each other's eyes" crap (that many writers use in their stories...and I still enjoy them). Instead, you chose to go the comical way. So there's nothing wrong with your writing!

Since it is a weekend, and I don't have much time, I will reserve this spot for a longer comment...however, I do have many reserved spots that I can never seem to go back to, so I may or may not be back to comment on this long update. :D