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Posted: 12 years ago

Originally posted by: Amor.

awesomesuperb update👏


thank you di...luv u...😊
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Posted: 12 years ago

Originally posted by: sweetsanyo


Ridzzi di, iss stry se muje bhot lagav h- dhramveer ki jhalkiyaan always makes me drown back to dose hapy days'

Ananya n sia k bina update thoda suna suna tha'but kranti ki love story was gud.

Veer's sis is waiting for his intro ceremony'me too.

Agni- uff! Apna attitude kahin bhi nhi chodd sakta..

Kranti ki mom ke saath jo hoa, I abhorred it'muje bilkul nhi psnd vo jaisen.. :P

Mahal k saare scn were amazing to visualize, and your simple and superb description just add to it..mastt scn was wen princes were welcomed.

Maharani nivitri k expressions were best.. super like.

Why I feel veer koi masti karne wala h in intro ceremony??? 'kuch naughty-ish smell aa rhi h' hahhaaa'

Really waiting for next meet of ananya n veer'.dil mata hi nhi jabtak inhe na padh lo :D


thank you rashmi...well anu n sia k bagair update soona hi lagega, jaan jo h humare hero's ki...😉...but don't worry next part main entry tho nahi but scene tho hoga hi...
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Posted: 12 years ago

Originally posted by: shruja

thanks for update n pm
sorry for late comment
awesome update!!


don't be sry...it's ok and thank you di...
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Originally posted by: Asyalover

great going plz pm me too


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CELEBRATION, PREDICTIONS AND!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!😉




THE PALACE OF ARYANAGA (VEER'S PRIVATE ROOM):-


With the steady steps the cool breez made its way in the big room from the huge opening which seems like a window making their curtains play with them and spread itself all over in room. A huge round bed was nicely placed in mid of the room with white transparent curtains around tied like a tent, with plain white velvety bed-sheets and pillow's, he was standing infront of the huge oval shaped mirror getting ready for the ceremony.


He picked up the bracelet with rubies and diamonds and put it on his wrist, ''ready?'', a questioning voice came from behind diverting his attention from his process making him turn around, ''almost'', veer smilingly replied to his brother standing at the door frame, ''why are you standing there, come inside'', veer invited his brother while turning around and concentrating on his previous work. Dharma entered scanning his room with a curious interest, ''is this ceremonies are too important to attend?'', veer finally asked breaking the unwanted silence between them, dharma smiled while stepping towards him, ''I am seeing it since bua has told about the ceremony, you are not interested'', dharma asked standing beside his younger brother taking the support of huge mirror folding his hands against his chest, ''no, it's just...that...i mean...ok leave it'', unable to explain the reason for his unwillingness for the ceremonies which were going to take place on the day veer thought to leave the topic, for a moment dharma was quietly looking at his brother and then decided to quit the topic right there as he knew very well his reasons, ''where is kanha?'', veer asked instantly realizing that his chubby friend is nowhere to be seen since they have arrived to their respective chambers.


''I think in guest room'', dharma guessed, ''poor guy can't have anything until all the ceremonies will got over'', dharma chuckled and veer too joined him, ''let's go, I am ready'', veer informed and both stepped out from his room towards the guest room for their chubby friend who was now on the verge of death because of hunger.


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DAULATPUR (JAIMAL'S HOUSE):-


Twenty, twenty one, twenty two, twenty three, sitting on the back of arjun in a concentration position mohan was continuously counting the number of push-ups arjun was doing, ''we have to leave for aryanagar today itself'', jaimal informed while entering holding some parcels in his hands wrapped in a cotton jute bag followed by neelanjan (daimaa), mohan's and arjung's attention got broke by the sudden arrival of their father and they both stood up with a questioning expression looking at each other, ''today????? But why pitaji??????, we were suppose to leave after 7 days so what's the urgency for such a hurry??????'', finally standing up on his feet's arjun asked out of curiousness, ''well we can't wait any more, you know everything what had happened years ago'', daimaa said who was standing beside jaimal and after a brief pause she continued ,''we have heard that the prince's have reached at aryanagar, we don't have time, we have to help bhimsen as it would be very difficult once the prince's will become the king'', daimaa completed to which arjun nodded while wiping the sweat from his forehead pondering on her words, ''I was unable to help him before because that time I was alone but now you two are there as my strength, my army, I don't need anyone else,'' jaimal said with the burning memories in his eyes and with a bit of proud for his two children's.


''where is ananya????????'', finally jaimal asked seeing that she was nowhere to be seen since morning, ''she had leaved in morning without informing anyone about her whereabouts'', daimaa answered:-''mohan go and inform her about leaving today and ask her to come as soon as possible'', jaimal said finally turning towards the mohan who was silently standing beside arjun till now. Mohan silently nodded and walked out from there.


As mohan left from there jaimal again turned towards arjun and speak up:-''arjun do all the preparation for leaving today and inform maya also to be ready with everyone till evening'':-arjun nodded and jaimal left with daimaa.


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THE ARYANAGAR PALACE (THE HALL AREA):-


The merged voices of priest were ecoing in the hall area of the palace with mantras. Seven priests were sitting infront of the holy fire continuously pouring the ghee to the fire with the long golden spoon while chanting the mantras, just beside them on the right side of the holy fire king aryasen and queen padmavati was sitting folding their palms in prayer accompanying by nivrati, jaisen and kaushalya behind them. Dharma, veer and agni was sitting just beside their parents, infront of the seven priests, hands joined in prayer and head bowed down with kanha behind them and just beside them infront of the king and queen, the silver plates were kept with rose and petals of different flower accompanied by the different types of the sweets added by the cloths and the things which all the prince were going to give to the commoners and with roli, the sacred thread and the mango leaves which was using by the king and all prince as a spoon.


Finally as the ceremony reached to its end everyone bowed down and stood up still joining their hands, veer carefully moved near her brother scanning the whole area which was filled with so many people related to palace and asked, ''finished or yet anything left????????'', dharam looked at him and lightly smiled:-''almost, why????????'':-he curiously asked to which veer shake his head in negative and again concentrated on the ceremony.


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ARYANAGAR PALACE (KINGS CONFRONTATION PLACE WITH COMMONERS):-


Sakshi was trying her best to control her laughter seeing the anger fleshed face of the person next to her, he didn't want to stay there for a moment not even to step but sakshi was too obstinate that she somehow manages to convince him to accompany her till here and he wasn't able to deny on her plea and gave up and now he was unwillingly standing beside her with red face, ''will you stop laughing?'', kranti asked coldly glaring at her and she somehow subsided her silent laughter, ''oh kranti thank you so much you are so sweet'' , she finally showed her gratitude while complementing him but it was not enough for him, he again looked at her and said in low voice greeting his teeth, ''now you are happy????'' ,and turned his face to other side not wanting to face her glares, ''oh come on kranti there are many other revolutionaries too, only you are not here so stop behaving like if someone has attacked on your dignity'' ,sakshi ironically snapped, she had never understood that why he was like that, only he was not victimized of jaisen cruelty, she and many others are also there but she was never able to came up to know the reason for his cold behavior towards everyone. On her retort kranti faced her with some unknown emotion and then leaved that place within a second moving towards the other direction.


For few moments sakshi kept on looking in the direction where he had moved, she knew that somewhere there is some feelings in him for her but she too can't do anything, she had always considered him as a friend, she herself didn't knew that how and when he took their relation in other direction, sighing she turned her face to scan the huge crowd to find some known face to accompany her as it was really very boring and awkward to stand alone in huge crowd but after a moment her cheeks got a deeper shade of red and she lowered her eyes with shyness. A little far sanjaya was moving towards the stairs with some palace guards, sanjaya and sakshi were in a relationship from last two years, no one knows about it till the day her mother caught them red handed. It was almost impossible for them to be together, she was a shudra and he was Brahman, it was fully impossible to marry in other cast but finally after so many arguments and queries everything got to normal but their families were still not ready for their relation until kranti stepped in and handled the situation, god knows that what he had said to their families that they agreed to their relation. Whenever she used to ask him he use to deny or change the topic but he never came up with the truth.


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Half of the day had been passed away and the half afternoon was also passing and sun was making its way to the evening, with the huge crowd gathered for the introduction ceremony. There was a huge stage with the pillars made to the shelter of the outer palace which was only made for the ceremonies like this where the royals can directly interact with the commoners. There was a huge stairs directly leading to the big open veranda leading to the throne of the king and the respective others royal chairs for the family members of the king. The garlands were nicely and neatly rounded around the huge pillars to give it a decent look apart from other decorative stuffs and the long maroon-white curtains were elegantly tide in mid of the pillars, half open from above and loosely open at bottom. On the side lines of the stairs big huge dhols were placed with the players who were going to mercilessly beat them with the fat long stick in their hands on the arrival of royals.


In the huge veranda from the stairs people who belong to the royalty were standing dividing in two. Palace ministry was on the right side folding their hands in front accompanied by senapati charu sinha and on the other side was occupied by the not so important people of palace. And the royal guards were standing at every 20 feet's holding the long wooden stick with a rectangular dagger attached on it.


''ATTENTION!!!!!!!!!!!!!'', the man standing on the right side entrance of long passageway which was directly attached to the exit of the palace shouted, dressed in white dhoti and long kurta's and the turban bigger than his head with long mustaches he continued, ''your majesty is arriving with his family'', as the announcement for the arrival of royals made everyone turned their heads towards the exit of the palace and the entrance of the outer palace stage.


''MAHARAJ KI JAI''

''MAHARANI KI JAI''


As the king aryasen stepped out from the palace and moved towards the throne with his wife beside and family following behind him, everyone including the royals standing in veranda with commoners hooted in praise of royals to show their honor for them.


Sakshi was excitedly fixing her gaze only on the younger prince, who was behind the king beside his elder brother smilingly pacing up with them. How she wished to go to him and tell him that she is his sister but then she remembers the truth of her and his life that if she will tell him than she will risk her life and more over his also and with the thought her temporary happiness subsided and the huge smile on her face vanished. And with teary eyes she lowered her eyes wiping the twinkling of her happiness on seeing her brother after so many years.


As the royals helped themselves on the throne senapati charu sinha stepped forward with a huge smile on his face and said while bowing down ,''his highness your country men have planned a performance for your entertainment, if you allow so they will'', he finished to which aryasen slightly nodded with a soft smile.


As the senapati gave the approval, the dancers entered roundly turning around and the crowd moved to side clearing the ground in a circle infront of the stage for the dancers and one by one all the dancers occupied the whole circle, men's on left in pure white dress and colorful turbans and the girls on right in almost different colors and then they begun.


Dhol Bajne Laga ganv sajne laga
Koi laut ke aya hai
sang apne wo rang kitne laya hai
gaye re humra manva, hum jhum jhum nache
nache re humra manva, hum jhum jhum nache


Hiding her face by her veil sakshi too entered in between the dancers while turning around and matched with them while singing for her brother and splashing hand full color everywhere.


Aane waley na ab jaana kabhi chod ke
Padte hai paiyaan kabhi haath kabhi jod ke
Jaane na denge tujhe ab dil tod ke
Apna kunwar aya, rajeshwar aya
Sang apne wo rang kitne laya hai
gaye re humra manva, hum jhum jhum nache
nache re humra manva, hum jhum jhum nache


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DAULATPUR, OUTSIDE JAIMAL'S HOUSE:-


Mohan was standing near his horse setting up his sword in his belt when a soft sweet voice stuck to his ears making him close his eyes in frustration, ''mohan'', he irritatingly turned around only to find meera standing behind him keeping her both hands at her back and flawly moving her body from left to right then right to left, ''when will you stop chasing me??????'', mohan asked sardonically turning around concentrating on his previous work.


''the day you will marry'', meera excitedly replied with dreamy smile ,''in you dreams'', mohan snapped without turning around and meera stepped closer to him and held his hand in her palms ,''marry me and I will stop chasing you'', she said blinking her eye lashes at him getting more closer to him, she knew that he didn't like when she get this much closer to him and when she held his hand like this but she likes to tease him and love to see when his nose flared up in anger and gets deeper shade of red with anger.


''does it anywhere written on my face that I am a fool??????'', mohan asked fakely smiling at her to which she happily nodded controlling her laughter, mohan pushed her a little back yanking his hand from her grip while retorting, ''have you ever seen your face in mirror??????'', he asked furiously to which she asked while pouting, ''why, didn't I look beautiful??????'', mohan gazed at her for a moment then replied while smirking, ''beautiful, huh in your dreams, you are not even worth to be called as witch'', he said and climbed down on his horse and kicked on his belly and his horse ran towards the exit. Meera's heart was broken by his answer and mouth hung open on the insult while shrinking her eyes and flaring up her nose in anger she shouted at his retreating figure:-''if I looks like a witch then what about you????????, monster'':-she kept on standing there until he was out of her sight and then she broke into piles of laughter and ran inside.


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ARYANAGAR, DHARAM'S PRIVATE ROOM:-


All the four prince were resting in dharam's private room, veer was completely lying hanging down his head from the bed, dharma too was lying beside him keeping his chin on the soft round pillow, agni was leaning on the couch tightly closing his eyes and kanha too was sitting on the couch next to him happily enjoying the apple in his hand. The introduction ceremony had gone smoothly without any hindrance and as it ended they have performed all the rituals and duties related to them but as the ceremony ended and their elders moved to the assembly hall, all three (veer, kanha and agni) forced dharma to go to nivrati and ask that now they can leave or not and when he denied all three of them pushed him as he was the elder one among all. Finally getting the permission all of them hurried towards their chambers and as dharam's chamber was near everyone thought to rest there as it would be great instead of going so long for their private rooms.


''you know some magadhians were about to arrive aryanagar after seven days'', finally agni spoke up breaking the tired silence between them. Listening him veer shot up his head in questioning expression, ''who?'', on the voice agni opened his eyes and making himself comfortable on the couch replied, ''magadhians, one of our kingdoms political friend, once they were use to be our rivals'', he informed and everyone concentrated and this time it was dharma who put up the question yawning ,''and how did you knew it?'', agni faced him and expressionlessly replied, ''maa, choti maa and bua was talking about something for the preparation to welcome them'', he casually replied and again leaned back resting his head on the back of the couch.


Veer looked at his elder brother and in a fake amazement he said in low voice which was only audible to his brother, ''wow he is also habitual of listening women's chatters too inspite of us'', and winked at him, dharma playfully slapped on his head, ''stop it veer'', and both shared a light laugh. Agni was knowing it very well that veer had said something about him and both were enjoying on it but he neither opened his eyes nor uttered a word and choose to keep quiet as he have something very good for them in future, ''you guys know, the king has a daughter, I am talking about the princess of magadh'', this time it was kanha who spoke up making everyone to turn their attention towards him and all three spoke up together with an questioning expression, ''PRINCESS!!!!!!!!!''


(A girl elegantly dressed in pink-purple attire with heavy matching jewelry was running behind a white rabbit in a lush garden with cool breez playing around with her hairs).


Others were quiet and silent while he continued, ''yes princess, well I don't know more but I have heard that she is one of the most beautiful princess in whole bharat varsh''.


(She tried but again that rabbit escaped from her grip and a light smile played on her rosy lips while her eyes twinkled and again she ran behind him jingling her anklets).

''oh ho kanha, I thought you are only interested in food and sleep'', veer mocked and everyone chuckled on his reaction but then dharma asked to agni diverting his attention from kanha who was now poutingly glaring at veer, ''is she also coming with the king and queen?'', on his question veer again shot up his head and looked at the two persons infront of him who was smiling on his question , ''is she also coming?'', veer imitated finally turning towards his brother with an teasing expression, ''I didn't mean that, I...i...was asking ju...just like that'', dharma clarified himself before everyone burst into laughter and he helplessly hide his face in pillow, ''well I have heard that she is also coming with...'', giving a pause he thought for a second and replied, ''with her two princess, I am sorry with her friends'', agni answered to which dharma looked up glaring at him, ''you should have told it without laughing at me'' ,as dharma again said everyone again burst into laughter, they knew that dharma is a kind of shy person compared to his younger brothers when it comes to a girl, veer is not shy but not too much bold also, he is a kind of casual and agni didn't even like to interact with them accept his family. As he finished everyone subsided their laughter and made themselves quiet, after a pause of moment veer quizzically smiled as he remembered something, ''you know what, today I met someone st...strange'', veer completed and everyone curiously looked at him, ''strange?'', dharma questioningly asked to which veer thoughtfully continued, ''remember after the ceremony when we were distributing the cloths and coins to commoners, I saw a saint standing at the corner so I myself just went to him with the things and...


Veer moved carefully holding the blanket and cloths towards the man standing in the corner in a roughly khadi white dhoti and dark brown blanket which was almost torn from many sides, with long beard and smoky eyes holding a wooden stick which was shaped like a half moon at the top and a spherical shaped utensil made of bronze, veer moved towards him and smilingly presented him the materials in his hand while asking, ''why are you standing here baba, away from the line?'', that saint smiled while denying to take that things while saying, ''I don't need any of them, I am here for something'', that saint smilingly said, ''for what?'', veer quizzically questioned him and that saint simply smiled, ''everyone in this world has came for a purpose, a day will come when you will loose your faith in everyone, even in yourself then only she will hold you, she will be like everyone but unique, not different yet different from others, beautiful, clever, incredible probably not from the status from where you are right now but remember one thing, never misjudge her, she will hold you and lead you till you destiny, one mistake and everything will be finished, you have to face a lot and the time has begun'', that saint completed and veer was taken aback with his words and again confusedly asked, ''about whom are you talking baba?'', the man smiled and signaled him, ''someone is calling you'', at his signal veer turned only to find no one around, he again turned towards the saint and to his utter surprise no one was there.


''what how is that possible? And about whom he was talking about?'', dharma questioned shocked on his brothers tale, ''I don't know that saint vanished as soon as I turned and I didn't knew where'', veer confessed releasing a deep sigh, ''well she, perhaps that saint must be talking about your life partner'', kanha thoughtfully replied stretching himself on couch, ''keep your fat mouth shut'', veer ordered shooting daggers at him, kanha turned his face on other side hiding his chuckles from him where as agni saw him with amused expression and went outside without saying anything.


As he left dharma turned his face to his younger brother, ''what did that saint had said, you have to face a lot means?'' he confusedly yet curiously questioned his brother to which veer shrugged dragging the side pillow under his chin.


After sometime kanha yawningly moved to his chamber and dharma too kept the pillow under his head and drifted to sleep while veer kept on lying in same position, ''life partner'' ,a word escaped from his mouth before he himself turned at his back and closed his eyes to remove all the tiredness of the hectic day.


(Too many horses were running making the sand settle around them, a bloodied man was tied from his both hands with a long rope and the other end of the rope was in the hands of the rider of the horse infront. Soon the rider left the rope and turned the horse on the other side preventing himself from any damage from the huge rock on his way making that bloodied man bang on the rock. The man was almost half dead and his breath was getting heavy by every passing second, the rider came towards the man, he was covered from top to bottom in black with a turban hiding his face from the other end of the turban.


That man looked at him and with heavy breaths he pleaded joining his hand but the rider kept his foot on his chest and pressed it so hard that the man craved for the breath and then everything turned black).

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Edited by ridzzi - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
awesome updt waiting for veer-anya meeting
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Nice up dear plz carry on nd thanks 4 pm
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ye jo last mei HE h ..kahin vo humari she-man tho nhi...humari superstr shera- ananya...

haye! finally n veeranya scn...i mean, thoda thoda, superficial veeranya scn...but di...
the way u explain evry scn- my god, wid so much patince di, di write so many detailing...it comes so natrually in mind...

veer ka room ka scn- curtain flying n den ceremony- maharoon curtains...- ye tho trademark curtains h dv k...

mahroon..lovly color, one of my fav.

den- kranti n sakshi scn- god they are a lovly pair...
kranti is really handsome character di...i quite like him ...too gud...

jaimal n daimaa n mohan..- hmm.. anu' family...
dey knw a lot abt aryanagar...gud too gud...

tabhi tho shera will help veer...

di, vo baba kahaan h...unke charan kahan h.- god the way he explained ananay's character to veer- veer tho already loving her- oye hoye! life partnre k darshan ho gye veer babu-

vo dosari baat h ki khwabo mei hi hoe h...

pooja scn...ws vry well writen very nicely depicted...
d waty u stress on visuals..i just lov it...poora ka pora sama bandh jata h aapke wrds mei..

n den, mohan n meera...ahaan!!...witch n monster...
aisa na karo mohan. tumhari dewani h bhai vo...kadar kro


Edited by sweetsanyo - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
hi
the up is good
so celebration of the prince introduction is going
all the youth prince who reached home after so many days their introduction ceremony is going
the commners who are eager to see their future prince came there and tried to entertain the kings and their sons
so a new beautifull princess is going toa rrive in the palace
soon
plz cont soon and pm me
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wow nice part...fantastically written.
cont soon dear.

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