SS: Part 5 My Avenging Angel (Jealous Khushi)

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Marybarton

@Marybarton

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Posted: 13 years ago

#71

Make some changes. Grammatical errors mostly fixed now 😳

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Inaya Haya

@lilmzsunshine

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Posted: 13 years ago

#72

Oh you have me hooked Mary!

I'll admit that chap 3 got me a bit ... nonplussed, with the invention of Khushi becoming Darya ... but you've turned it all around so well.

I love that you maintained their identities, true selves, despite the dressing of princess, Fashion mogul, titles, associations, etc.

And mostly, I love your depiction of how she would LOVE to hate him, but hate him she can't. And what you're showing of him ... spot on. His giving up to such an extent that he can't even loath himself ... just moving on day by day just surviving till it's all over.

Ah - and now she wants a reaction out of him ... lovely.

I wish this was a book - and I could read it over and over.

Nice job!

-S

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Marybarton

@Marybarton

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Posted: 13 years ago

#73

Originally posted by: melovemayur
I feel so sorry for Arnav! Khushi is seriously being bossy!!

Mayb Arnav deesrves this,but still my heart goes out for him..Poor thing!!

Pls Update soon!

bossy Khushi 😉 is sexy Khushi to him, remember?

Edited by Marybarton - 13 years ago

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bismillah5985

@bismillah5985

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Posted: 13 years ago

#74

First of all i would say WOW! i jst read all 5 parts together and its AWSOME love th way khushi is getin frustrated, jealus, and angry on arnav but i must say i feel very sory 4 him hope 2 c loads of arhi moments n 2nd PLZZZ PLZZZ PLZZZ PLZZZ continu sooon very soon plzzz

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Marybarton

@Marybarton

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Posted: 13 years ago

#75

Originally posted by: Psychedelic
Khushi might have a new identity but her innate personality is still the same! Princess or not.. She cant stand being ignored by Arnav. All their interactions have always been a verbal battle! A defeated Arnav is not what she wants right? I hope she catches him and plays Doctor to him! She went to the parking lot right? I'm sure the car will have a first aid kit :P

You are good! I am glad you found her to be the same. I think they are still the same, I did not really change them.

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sweetoooo

@sweetoooo

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Posted: 13 years ago

#76

eagerly waiting for the next part!!!!!!

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tina

@cpervaiz

Voyager

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Posted: 13 years ago

#77

just read it in one go,

can't believe i didn't find this wonderful story before

really loved khushi but now it's enough

can't stand gloomy arnav just like khushi

i don't want either of them leaving their spirit of scaubbling with eachother

can't wait to read more.

can u plz add me to ur buddy list:)😊 i promise to comment on each and every time😉

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AngelTeen

@AngelTeen

Stunner

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Posted: 13 years ago

#78

Bandagement coming soon, I guess? ;) :D

Ah...Khushi bandaging Arnav! They have made playing Doctor-Doctor so romantic and sensuous!

Update soon! :)

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Marybarton

@Marybarton

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Posted: 13 years ago

#79

Originally posted by: cpervaiz
just read it in one go,
can't believe i didn't find this wonderful story before
really loved khushi but now it's enough
can't stand gloomy arnav just like khushi
i don't want either of them leaving their spirit of scaubbling with eachother
can't wait to read more.
can u plz add me to ur buddy list:)😊 i promise to comment on each and every time😉

thank you, I will hold you to your promise and add you 😉