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Posted: 13 years ago

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Edited by Gurti_Rocks - 13 years ago

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Zubi

@misssmily

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Posted: 13 years ago

#32

Wow me super exited 2 updts in one go !!!! Thanx a tone dear !

Will read them and then comment !
And do expect lentghy comment from me, i was just waiting for the story to really start to give long comment, count on me to analyse each part in detail and give you my peace of critic !

Now me going to read ( first will eat then will reas ^^ )

Thanx again !

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gbhat

@gbhat

Dazzler

Posted: 13 years ago

#33

great update. waiting for ur next update . pls update fast and pm me.

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Marvee Khan

@marvee-khan

Explorer

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Posted: 13 years ago

#34

Oh my Lord!!! This just keeps getting better and better; I love the mystery that surrounds Maan; can't wait for some naughtiness to come through😳

Cheers,

-Marvee

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Zubi

@misssmily

Voyager

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Posted: 13 years ago

#35

First of all : fantastic !! 👏 both parts were really good especially the 3rd part it was exellent !

So here is my analyses: 😊

The thrid part was just mindblowing loved geet and her dad's dialogue ! 👏 Very well written i must say ! So Geet's dad is being suspicious... before readng that part i wasn't that afraid of "the maan u portrayed" but now... i have mixed feelings... U built so much mistery around maan's character in this part, really well done 👏. With this updt u made it clear that maan has some motives, he is not here by chance... So will b patiently waiting to know his motivation ! It was really smart of you to tell us that from geet's dad point of view... it added fear around maan character... With this part the title of ur ff start to make sense ! Because after readin part 1 and part 2 i was like : well maan seems too sweet compared to the title and little intro of ur ff 😛

On the other hand :we saw how nave and innocent geet is... 😕she didn't think once abt how he knew everything abt her... she assumed he was a nice guy... and here i want to say : hope u don't plan her to stay like this, i don't want her to b a poor nave girl ( just a request ^^ )

Noticed one more thing : For now, i didn't find anything from what i can say that maan loves geet... for now it's just a mere attraction... hope that's what u thought when u wrote it bcoz this is what is looks like 😳

Now comming to the part 4 :

Hmmm nice part... not much to say abt this part apart from the fact that i felt something ^^ 😆
Actually when maan and geet were in the jeep, when geet said to maan things her dad told her abt him, i felt like he was saying : Oh to tumare dad ne mera pata lagaya...hmm...

Ok great parts, me eager to know maan's motives ! And to finish my peace of critic : maan's character seems to supress geet's one... don't know if u got want i wanted to say...😉

With all my support and love ! 😊
Zubi !

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awesomepooja

@awesomepooja

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Posted: 13 years ago

#36

Hey buddy.
Its growing more intresting wid each update. Maan seems quiet mysterious.
Cont soon.

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Shalve

@Shalve

Voyager

Posted: 13 years ago

#37

interesting...do add me to yr pm list

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589498

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Posted: 13 years ago

#38

Edited by Gurti_Rocks - 13 years ago

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589498

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Posted: 13 years ago

#39

Edited by Gurti_Rocks - 13 years ago

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Zubi

@misssmily

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Posted: 13 years ago

#40

Ohhh ooohhh oohhh yeah kia chapters ki barish ho rahi 😆

Me going to read then will comment ! 😊

i WANT TO KISS UR HAND FOR GIVING 4 UPDTS BACK TO BACK 🤣
U must b tired ! Ok dear Shaba khair ! 😊

Me too going to sleep, have work tomorrow will read part 6 tomorrow and will comment on part 5 and 6 tomorrow... but yaar one thing... am really doubting maan's intentions... 😲

Thx again !

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