Originally posted by: -Aliya-
DO NOT MISTAKE THIS COMMENT FOR A NEW CHAPTER 😆 however long it may look ;P
This comment= the length of my chapter. Anybody could mistake it for a new Chapter...😆
Comment for Chapter 15:
Your always getting us on our thinking-toes (toes?! did i just say toes? the more i'm writing toes the weirder the word is starting to look..ignore this i'm having weird moods) So yes the note at the beginning of the chaper notifies us that there is something thats holds great importance in Riddhima's life that we need to catch in this chapter and instantly i said to myself 'i won't recognise it or find it in this chapter' when i am asked to do something like that i think too much and end up missing the obvious hehe. anyway i shall try to find this important thing in R's life by reading further on..
Really? Well I never saw it this way..but if I am able to make you guys think. Ah...It is quite a good feeling. This was the first chapter I probably asked something. And it wasn't anything tough. I was hoping almost everyone will be able to figure it out :)
I would have loved to add something to the topic of this chapter: lies. but you have summed it up SO well Priyanka, theres nothing else i could add that could explain white lies or bad lies any better. i am going to quote the few words you sufficiently used to sum up the topic of lies because i loved how ya did it so much hehe
"Good lie to save us from something bad and bad lie to save us from something good."
thanks :) Well isn't this correct. I mean lies can be categorically put into good and bad. And in both the cases there's a good for someone and bad for someone. It's how this cycle works :)
I think the clarity of your explanation is due to how you used opposites to explain it: a bad lie to take you away from good and a good lie to take you away from bad. you mention that the way the good and bad lies work are ironic and i love how you made the above sentence ironic in the same manner, to emphasise the irony of the workings of lies. I also have to add that your use of clipped, cut, short sentences have such a huge effect - it makes us feel the sharpness of R's harsh reality. unfortunately i'm not as refined at explaining things; do ya understand what i just blabbed out in words, Pri?
For me it's quite ironic. It's like the only explanation people come up with when they get caught. "Oh I thought it would be good not to tell you. Oh it was for your own good"...we hear as explanations but people forget that hiding hurts more than a lie. And whether it's a good one or bad, there's always a negative impact on one of them.
Thanks once again :) Italics and clipped short sentences says a lot. It's like you can feel what actually is going through the mind of the characters :)
"People say they lied for your own good. People say they lied for their own good."
I love the play on words here..in this whole chapter actually. This sentence is almost repeated with just that one word difference which makes all the difference in the whole sentence. Your use of words and how you structure your sentences are brilliant Pri and i felt these qualities of your writing were especially evident to me in this chapter.
Ah..this line was an instant one. And it's true..isn't? I don't think there's any reasons except this when people speak lies. It's either for their own good or for others.
Ah i never thought of it in that way. The generally comfortable life i live has never made me question the difference between belief and trust, well a easy life would generally make us see belief and trust as basically the same thing because in a easy life we believe the people we trust. Its always been that simple to people who have others in their life who they trust and can believe without any damage or doubt. Isn't it odd how, we, living the relatively easier life do not generally realise the stark difference between belief and trust and how it affects so much of who we call our trustworthy ones and who we choose to believe. (As Riddhima says, its not only our trustworthy friends we believ, we believe other people too sometimes forced to even.) While Riddhima who has had such a difficult life but this hardship has made her see the difference in trust and belief that many people who live the easier life fail to learn.
Trust and believe aren't exactly similar. And do you know there's a difference between believe and belief too. Though minor but we don't really take it into consideration. We use trust and believe as synonyms of others but there's a difference and that's what I wrote here. R's never said "NO" to believing. When she was sold to A, she believed, When she was told she's going to die she believed but she didn't Trust those guys. The same way, as her father she not only believed but trusted her father. We trust our family and we can do anything for them without asking. The same goes with R, she trusted father but A, Malik and HIM...she believed their words but never TRUSTED them.
Life takes you through different trials and shows you different colors. R's life been through so much at such a young age that we can only imagine. She may be small age wise but intellectually she's mature than people of her age.
Riddhima thought she had that trust AND belief with her father but she was found to be wrong about the wonderful things she presumed and hopefully dreamt into HER image of her father. She seemed to weave a lot of good things about her father in her hopes of those weaved dreams coming true. This made me tag Riddhima as a more brighter/optimistic person when she was with her father because she had more hope in her to keep believing that these good things that she thought/dreamt/hoped, did exist in people when it was clear that her father was a brute..but she kept hope and believed him, trusted him!
HOPE...it's a very strong word. Hope ..it's what took her through all these years. She knew her father doesn't love her like others. BUT she had a HOPE. And it was this hope that helped her in surviving all those years. Imagine a small girl having no other to share her sorrows with. Her only parent, father never gave her the love she craved for. Alone and with a HOPE that one day..he'll be the father she always wanted to see and get love from.
Hope makes a person optimistic for sure...I don't know whether you remember this particular scene or not but when A bought her home first time and she was taken to her room. She looked at herself and tried smiling..in the hope that maybe she'll be able to survive this like previous times but she couldn't. Because the HOPE she always had from her father was shattered. Hope make the person optimistic but when HOPE breaks, it hurts much more.
However this is also a huge naivety she had. While NOW Riddhima may not be as hopeful enough to find the good even in bad people (seemingly bad people in Armaan's case) she has lost the naivety of hoping good from endless evil...even if it seems like she's grown into a more darker and lonelier person through the knowledge of who to hope goodness from, its part of her learning process and progress towards going from a darker person to a brighter. "Darkness to Light." (darkness and light is a HUGE theme in your FF and I quoted this from Dee's comment)
Her only HOPE was to see her father and get LOVE from him. Her only HOPE shattered when she was taken by HIM. And this broke that optimistic R we saw in the earlier parts.
But TIME, heals all wounds. In her case, it didn't healed but she understood that HOPING never brings positive results. Her surroundings, her circumstances played an important part in her thoughts about HOPE. She knows there's no HOPE and that's the reason why she isn't trusting A or any other person for that matter.
The good she always wanted to see in her father was brutally butchered by him when he gave her to HIM and this has made her the way she's now..Not trusting anyone or seeing good in others.
She has learnt to not believe the lies she used to tell herself that so and so person is worthy of her trust and belief.
I will not at all blame her for expecting Armaan to be one of those liars who she shouldn't anchor her hopes upon when really he is worthy of her trust now, because she's gone through so many various types of punishment that she now knows that "teasing and giving false hope to the victim before presenting the punishment to them" is one of those types of horrifyingly hope-crushing, sinister punishments.
Totally. In case of A another important factor that is going to go against him are their previous encounters. R knows that he was the one who bought her from HIM. He punished her and even told her things that according to her a "GOOD" soul never do. And this is going to make it difficult for her to TRUST him.
Even though this lack of trust and therefore refusal to believe him may make saving Riddhima a frustratingly longer process for Armaan, its worth it to both of them and to us to see trust growing between them before love. I love how you are going the opposite way around with trust developing before love.
TRUST is what will bring them closer to other. LOVE before trust, I won't say is impossible but in their situations it would have not been possible. Both falling in love before trusting the other makes no sense to me :)
This is kinda going off topic and includes me rattling on about my bookwormish personality but I recently read a romance book which was a sequel to the first one. The first book consisted of a love triangle in which the two fall in love through an accidental affair. The sequel of the book is all about how they cope with finding it within each other to trust the other. You know what they all say: when two persons fall in love through an affair it makes trusting each other difficult because if the two fell in love through an affair how do the two know their partner won't stray again and have another affair? its a very common issue - unfortunately - which is why i think trust before love is something different but simpler and usually results in a steadier relationship..
And my knowledge is NIL in this department. I have hardly read 3-5 fictional books till now...😳 but like you mentioned, trust is very important in a relationship. If there's no TRUST, the relationship won't survive for long. In love affairs, it's the opposite. People fall in love and trust comes after that. But relationship do develop and they are life-longs if the partners TRUST and are committed to each other. Trusting may take some time but if you really want this relationship to work...TRUST your partner..that's what I believe :)
Sheesh this comment is massive and i still haven't got through the whole chapter. Apologies if i'm hogging the page..well actually no i kinda take a fraction of that apology back because i'm behind with commenting now so i owe this long comment-converted-to-essay to Priyanka 😆
Don't be apologetic please ..you are embarrassing me. Like I have mentioned before I always look forward to the feedback and yours are few of those that I always look forward to the most. And the longer the better :)
As Minaz noted, i did enjoy reading the interaction between A and R. Although its quite a trivial interaction, it holds great importance and i could feel the turn taken at this point of the FF. This chapter is the volta (english vocab for the turn) and there is that huge rush of hope felt through the words and even Riddhima feels it that something new is beginning here. And i loved that feeling after the gloom of R's POV.
"His touch wasn't what I had experienced before. Not rough like before. And Not painful like before. It was different. ...just different."
^^this particular part caught my attention. She doesn't know what this 'different' is. This new touch. its so foreign to her because she's been at loss of the touch of love and care, it made my heart pain for her (she's a fictional character but your writing holds enough strength to make me feel for her so much)
This particular scene holds so much importance in both their life's. She never got the love or the feeling of being love or cared from others. R always developed her own ways of feeling happy or smiling but never in her life before she had someone care for her.
When A wiped those tears from her cheeks, it's wasn't like rough or the way she was expecting. This new feeling she experienced was something she hadn't experienced before and that's why she said..she felt different. She felt alienated towards that feeling and so this statement from hers :)
Blue Eyes ...As Dee mentioned, the monikers R has given the characters does make a huge difference to how we view the characters but it could be argued that these nicknames are making us biased and gain a narrow-perspective in only interpreting, what Riddhima sees in those characters, from the nicknames she has given them. She may not realise it but the name she has given Armaan is her hint to him being her guardian angel to peace. The color blue is associated with water, ocean and hence the idea of peace and soothingness being tagged along with the color blue. I love how much you have made me see the nickname Blue Eyes differently - at first glance Blue Eyes gave a sense of dark, strange danger but now its been shown a different light to being seen as peaceful..wonderful transition of how we now see Armaan, Priyanka!
although Blue Eyes gives the sense of peace to come to Riddhima through Armaan, blue - water, ocean - also brings the thought of the symbolism of water. Water is something we see on the surface unless we choose to dive deeper and a lot of unknown things can be discovered under water. this metaphor can be connected with Armaan (Blue Eyes) only being seen by Riddhima from the surface; she hasn't delved deep enough to see the unknown person/thoughts swimming underneath this surface of Armaan. she will delve deeper when she trusts him.
The above two paragraphs...Oh I love you for this...You have brought in a very new dimension to Blue eyes. It was beyond my thinking.
Her only reason for not calling him by his name is because she's able to connect to him by his name. His BLUE EYES, for her tells her the person she thinks he is. It's like she has made an image of him in her mind and by calling him BLUE EYES she's able to justify to this image. Are you able to get what I am trying to say Aliya?
But the angle that you have brought to BLUE EYES ..OH I wish I was able to think this deeply. You have told this so beautifully...Blue like water. Water is like a mystery..we say it's colorless but when we look at the ocean it's blue..it's tasteless but it's the one of the most essential thing for the survival. It's deep and hold so much inside it that we are always left wondering WHAT MORE?
Water can dissolve almost anything within it. And if I try connecting it the way you have connected water with Blue eyes..I'll say..A hold a lot of mystery inside himself. A for R is the only person who can help her in her survival.
A holds so much inside himself that when the truth will be out, I am sure R will think what more and A will dissolve all her pain and suffering and will give a new meaning to her life.
And Thank you for this because this helped me sooo much in writing the next Chapter... I'll tell you in Chapter 17 comment when I reply there...😊
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