An Escape Into Paradise: Discontinued. - Page 44

Originally posted by: ..Maitree..

Ok. Today is ending,btw. 🤔

Originally posted by: Castle-Beckett

Okay, so I have way too many reserves to edit, and I'm really choked for time on doing that! I will be wound up with work real soon, so I'm aiming at finishing how much ever I can!

So I thought I'll be posting long comments on the entire story of all FFs I read, rather than separate chapters, because I haven't kept track of where any of my reserves are, nor of how many things I have to comment on! Chal I know it's a lot of work, so I won't pester you. And the fact that you edited makes me happy.:) But iss chapter se, I want nice indidvidual comments. And also, can you please write something like, "Read it" or some other chunna phrase at your reses. Just don't like the "res" sitting there!🤔 But don't worry, do it when you have time.

So I'm so sorry, but there's little I can do about this!

Anyway, coming to the story -

The Title - Its by me Bow, kiddo, bow! 😆

Anyway, just the fact that I've named this story, I feel like its very close to me! But there's another reason too - its just written in such an amazing way <3

Stop gloating! But yeah, you suggested the title makes you more close to the FF and me so I guess I understand what you mean! <3 <3

The story - Well I'm the only one, or one of the people anyway, who knows the story.I am so angry about that. No suspense at all. But being the blabbermouth I am, I knew I was going to blurt it now or then, so well, tough luck.. But even so, the chapters till now have simply taken my breath away..! Thankyou😳! It was surprising to know that Riddhima still held that kind of respect for her father, who was honestly just such an asshole! LMAO, everyone hates Shashank! Let me tell you, you're gonna hate him more in the coming parts!😆 But anyhow, that just shows who's the bigger person, doesn't it?

From the way you showed their past, it was very clear that they don't do much of the talking, its more of their hearts conversing, and that's what I like best about this story.. The feelings are expressed so well, even without words between the protagonists! That's what I wanted to show. Riddhima has been described to be this chatterbox here, but when with Armaan, she doesn't need to say much. It's like he sees the person behind all the talking and that's what I said in the first update that Armaan saw the real her. The one who is scared and may not be always smiling, instead she is just normal!! Glad I could get the point to you!😃

Like the installment of the previous chapter - there were absolutely no dialogues.. Just their actions communicating their love towards each other.. The whole Armaan giving Riddhima the keys to the house, it just touched my heart. It wasn't something I had read for the first time, of course.. It was just the way you explained it which stood out for me.. I am a sucker for fairytales, so yeah, it may be cliched but I sure do try to make it somewhat more interesting!😆We didn't need to read about the two of them talking to each other to see what they felt for each other.. We could totally imagine what they were feeling.. Riddhima: Abandoned or rather ditched by her father, but she was yet elated, just because of that one person who helped her get through this testing time. And Armaan: A little nervous since now he has another person's responsibility to shoulder, but at the same time, he's on a high to feel that feeling of being needed someone, of someone belonging to him, just him, and no one else. That must feel really special. And I'm repeating this - I just adored the way you wrote all this down.. And that's precisely why AEIP stands out to this extent - its so different from LOL, in the sense that, AEIP is way deeper in the sense of emotions and feelings, whilst LOL is more of the frivolous, funny, and friends first kind of story, and somehow there's a clear distinction between both the protagonists and LOL and AEIP respectively, and for that - Hats off! That is something I'm not that sure of. Like I said in the introductory post, keeping that distinction is not possible for me, at least that is what I think. One, both the girls have pasts, the guy trying to bring them out of it. Somehow I feel like Ekta Kapoor, repeating stuff over and over. And something else that hampers is that I feel biased one or a few times. You know, you think of something great and are confused on which story to put it in! End of the day, I love both the stories because they are mine, but I don't think I'm doing a good job at that. That's my criticism on my work, readers judge better so I don't know. But happy to know, that at least you feel it's different!

Its not easy to manage that, because at the back of your mind, the other story is still reeling in your mind! So it really is a very huge task!

And now, coming to the way of how you showed them both falling in love - Armaan realizing it when she was talking to the librarian, doing her usual chapad-chapad! That was simple and sweet, and its true - sometimes, you don't need big confrontations and huge bomb-shells to make you realize that you love someone! It could happen when he/she is just eating cotton candy in a funny way and you feel like you would want to watch them do that forever, or when they choke up on water and you find it cute, or they just scowl at your lameness or your attempts at annoying them, and you still think they look pretty/handsome! Just so you know, I've never fallen in love that way, I'm just giving examples!

We've already talked on that. It's like you've been in love!! Dhany ho Love guru!!

Another aspect I loved - They haven't said those 3 magic words! They've confessed through their actions - Armaan holding her hand to give her strength whilst her father gave her a hard time, he shouldering all her responsibility from there-on, Riddhima shouldering his responsibility by taking the keys which he gave her and opening the door to their house, accepting him as the one who she wants to spend her life with.. It was these small gestures which confessed their feelings for each other, so kudos to you for portraying that so darn well <3 I absolutely adore that aspect of the story! Filmy much right? When I wrote that post, I laughed so much, because the converation was so petty and Riddhima left the house!! But I am not a violent person isliye try as I could, I couldn't write a bhaari bharkam confrontation!! At least my incapability turned into something you liked!!

And whoever says 'I Love You' first, I'm just waiting to see how they'll say it, through those normal ways of saying it in conversation, or by doing something special.. Seeing the way this story is, I would prefer the former <3 Like I said earlier, I have no idea how to show that, because the two way process you suggested isn't quite my cup of tea. But yeah, whenever it may be, it will be simple, straight forward and light hearted. Over the T isn't my idea, atleast for this story!!

I'm also wondering whether they'll get married, or be in a live-in relationship, and also the 'ahem-ahem' moment :P I bet it will be as simple and sweet as the story till now has been <3 ROFLMFAOO!! I'm not saying anything, you know too much for your own good!:) But yeah, what do you think it will be?? And the "ahem ahem" moment is nowhere in sight. They haven't even confessed yet, freaking cupcakes!!:D

I love this story, and I love you for giving us such a great read <3

Thanks a tonne <3

P.S. I know my comment is nowhere close to the awesomeness and beauty of the story till now, but I hope you like it anyway.. Its not much, but I've tried my best to let you know how I feel about this story.. I hope you can read between the lines :) Love you! Your comment was awesome. Only some comments bring a smile on my face and needless to say yours did. I haven't received many to count, but when I do, it makes my day! I swear.

Yeah, but my comments on AWOTB are longer! I feel so proud of myself!! B)

Shrutika <3

Originally posted by: Ankita.M

Neha I miss you :( like you're gayab :O

Originally posted by: SurrealFantasy

LMAO😆

Yeah, School just got nasty this week!! :/ I missed you too! <3

Originally posted by: Ankita.M

Sighs :( whats up with school ?

Did the entire week go good ? You seemed really stressed about it ?

Originally posted by: SurrealFantasy

It was alright I guess! Lost the declamations :/ but didn't embarass myself on stage, so that part was good.😆 Gave in two lab reports, took a Precalc, Adv. Bio and AP Chem test, French Quiz And Physics Quiz, :O and then all the chunna munna HW! :(

All this in the last two days! Sigh. But now I'm almost free for the weekend! Almost being the important word!!😆

Originally posted by: Ankita.M

Aww, but you did well nevertheless so its okay , the effort is what counts 😳

Damn I can totally understand about the assignments, I am going through the same shit. I took a 6 day leave and now the office and the classes are after me to kill me 😆

Pssht update soon though I miss both your ffs

hey the part was just like ur if name...

surreal fantasy...

loved it...

aww... AR were so... umm... out of the world...

no words to describe them...

awsoem...