She is such a Tease-AR story NEW NOTE on page 112

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Pooja

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Posted: 14 years ago

#21

wow
so cute
luvd it
i can already feel the excitement in their hearts

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Posted: 14 years ago

#22

oooh i can feel the heat already! cont soon!

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Pritha Das

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Posted: 14 years ago

#23

I am loving this FF.. 😊firstly it has such a superb concept and a mindblowing writer..and then it is on Kash 😍 ..this is too much..can't wait for the next part..PLEASE UPDATE ASAP... 😃

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aditi

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Posted: 14 years ago

#24

hey dear.. just read ur story...

it was awsome...

2 pyaar karnewaale aur zaalim duniyawaale...lolz...

loved it

cont soon

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Maria Ahmed

@Maria151994

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Posted: 14 years ago

#25

hey loved the ff

so arman and riddhima are already together

gr8

continuee soon and plz if you can pm me too

lov

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Priyanka

@..KaJenDelena..

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Posted: 14 years ago

#26

RES <3

I am so glad you have turned writer lOl. Well edit sometime soon, hopefully ;)

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Heyaaa Kash_Arsh, naam to batoa! lOl... unless you dont want to ;)

Firstly I am sooo glad you have started writing, it doesnt seem fun or exciting, but trust me its bloody addictive, take it from someone who used to be buffled to understand why would anyone wanna write, that is until I wrote something myself ahaaha enough of my blah blah blahs.

You write really well for someone who has just started. Ofcourse there is always room for improvement. ;) But your story is really adorable and cute! <3 The emotions that Armaan and Ridhimma feel towards each other can be felt. Espically Ridhimmas hestiation and her nervousness. Its jumps out of the page.

I really like how you just went straight to the main point, like you presented the happy parts of their journey, I mean like you started the story after their confession and now the fun parts begin! lOl I dont even make sense.

Loved the part and especially this line " It was simple. I Love You Ridhimma, I love you Armaan... but to them it was the whole world". That was really cute, sweet and adorable. <3

Please write longer parts and hope you dont mind me saying, since you have asked for constructive critism, you can better your writing by eg. Instead of just saying "Armaan and Ridhimma missed each other alot" You can exagerrate it to make it more enticing eg. " The whole world seemed to cripple and fade as their eyes met after months of pining and craving each other" I hope you dont mind and i am NOT saying look at me I can write blah blah and I am defiantely NOT saying i am the better writer coz i am not. Please dont mind I am just trying to help. ;)

I really did love the updates and hope you can update longer ones. Will be waiting for them. Until Next time ciaoo <3 ;)

Edited by ..KaJenDelena.. - 14 years ago

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sheethal

@akshad

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Posted: 14 years ago

#27

loved it...

add me in ur pm list...

continue soon..

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RITIKA

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Posted: 14 years ago

#28

awesum plzzz add me 2 ur pm list ...

ritika

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divan_arshi

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Posted: 14 years ago

#29

Originally posted by: salinashah

Hey honey...its not fare.common itna motivate kiya ab kuch to part badhao lolll

bas itne se parts main kiya hoga hamara...do increse it heheh...and we will loved ur work darling😉😉😉...and love uuu as a friend ok heheh i m straight dont get me wrong loll...now update asap.or wanna eat tomatos from me hehee...do upd fast love u salina

hahaha salina u r scha cutiepie 😃 thanks dear for all the support...well i dont knw yaar..i m new and i just wrote this chapter.. n neither i have any story in mind.. i hav few scenes in mind only..my wild imagination u see..😆