As I promised...longer commenting time (I feel like a sports reporter today...so heads up some up-coming play by play commentary-ing-ness!) Firstly: kya title hai...very dangerous and sexy all together...can't wait for the ahem ahem
Prologue: Her target taking notice of her...hmm?! So does that mean she was already latoo for MSK and all the angry we see later on is just her female hormones on over-drive?!😆 So she is exactly how all women are when it comes to dangerous man...mystery solved! I deserve a cookie!!!! *reaches in jar for one* WHOA!!! This was only the prologue...so much dhamaka in one section...me so excited!!!! I hope we get more latkes and jhatkes and patakas as well!!!
Chapter 1: Gunshots?! YAY!!!Bandoks get me so excited...and what a masala-dar beginning...the drama begins! Woot! WOOT!!! Epilepsy attack...the image of that would be worthwhile seeing!😆 Ek badmaash gangsta is her "idol"/"inspiration"...yeh kya ho raha hai...double whammy!!!! I need to pull out my inner Sherlock holmes and solve this mystery too! Holy skittles what a hottie...such an assassin like actions...seriously you write intense scenes very nicely...SAMEERA!!!🤣 Just kidding I saw the post stating we should by no means call you that...what's my punishment?!😃
Chapter 2: HEY!! I'm back!! *waves from screen* well I already read this part too...but I just needed to make sure you were still paying attention!!!😆
Kya aadmi hai...a khoobsurat abla naari and he ain't noticing...bewakoof bakra...actually he's a sher...so silly sher!🤪 Lung cancer line is epic...coke spurted out of my nose...and by coke I mean the soda...don't get any crazy ideas...not that kind of girl!😆 His so harsh and me so hot from it...damn! He's radiating out so much sex appeal...making me stiff still reading it! Kya personality maar tha hai! I love how the first thing she wants to do if she survives is call him up and give him a piece of her mind...def the sherni of the keyboard! The vulgarity of her mouth...ultimate potty mouth...me likes! Exactly like me!😆 You are the queen of cliff-hangers...thank god I read 6 chapters in...or else I would have hunted you down with a bandook and forced you to update...which reminds chapter 7 kitta hai?!😈
Chapter 3: Read your note first...you're a lazy ass...me too!!! Twin-twin...could be possible!😆
OMFG!!! The first paragraph: bollywood is-style...and then the zoombie style! If only the zulfein and duppates flew in the proper angle in real life too!!!😆 AHHH! He stepped on her......not a good start buddy! Love story ho toh aisi bilkul bhi na ho...but still totally didn't expect that! "Dirty murder piss worthy water": 👏👏👏 (BRAVO!!!) awesome line. Love the zeal in her and his arrogant attitude...he's such a bad ass! Did she just challenge a gangster...bewakoof bachi! 😲Okay which Indian goondas use the word "lass"...I thought it was funny!🤣 Oh man...hungry dogs, wet clothes and curves, hungry gazes...very good description...I was really hoping for some dishum dishum...but WHOA you took it so a whole different level!! Shoot! Heyya! Did not see that one comin'! Good one!!! But me a little tearful!😭😭😭 Such a ruthless man...but the cold hearted side of me fainted a bit with the "goodbye beautiful" line!!!😍
Chapter 4: CONGRATZ on being a rockerz!! YAY!!!🥳🥳🥳
Okay the sister comparison with her freaked me out a bit...he sees his sister in her and then he's groping her in part 5/6...🤢! SO GLAD...I read your note (jail line was hilarious...you redefine EPIC 🤣)...or I was going to wash my eyes with soap!!!😡 But thank god he was comparing the "faith"...good thing I read it over again! and your note too!!!!😆 My eyes!!!!!!! MY EYES!!! LORD have MERCY!!! AHHH!!!!!🥺 "Pumping into her shattered body"...OMG! OMG! OMG!!! I need to look at some Ian somerhalder pics if I wanna sleep tonight (i was thinking this exact line when I read these a few days back!) Very graphic...and mission accomplished...cruel for sure! No wonder he's so...HIM! This was so thrilling..him bashing away in a full action scene...I was hoping he pull out his inner Rajnikant...but nah...that would be way too comedic! The staring scene, MY EYES, bashing him into the window- NICE! NICE! NICE!!! *fist bump through the screen*!!!😃 The possessiveness at the end was so awww...my heart melted...a full 2 and half cups!😆
Chapter 5: Your opening note: I'm not surprised that he shot her...he fits the character...plus this isn't some gisse pisse Bollywood kahani where the hero can magical beat up an outnumbered bunch of goons and save his damsel in distress...it makes sense...totally Alias style! You're are very own JJ Abrams! Such thriller endings and twists our his novelty...but now yours!!! BTW: I can't wait to read your other FF...so excited!!! 🐷 ( i don't why I used a pig here, but poor piggy is like the less used icon...so I thought I show him your pretty face)! Oh man..he was in his tai chi mode...wish I was right there glazing on his inhumane perfectly chiseled chest/abs/biceps...honestly he's like a god! 😍😍 OMG!!! How intense...the poker bit...this was a bit filmy...but loved it! My heart wrenched when he said sleep now! And he slept with her...awww! Love story in the making!!!!!❤️ and me likes the "upcoming"...👍🏼 (this thumb is too small...a WAY bigger thumbs up...actually all 4 of my thumbs are pointing up for YOU!..BTW: this is a very comedic sight...my mom is giving me crazy looks...hopefully I don't get committed for being so crazy!)
Chapter 6: Where's the new title montage?! I've gone blind!!!!! NOOO!!!😕 (need a site...imgur is the best darling!) NACH!🤣 OMG!! Your Geet is the best eva...so comical even in the worst case scenarios...the sanjay dutt scene...hahahahahahaha!!! She rocks...haven't laughed this hard in a long time...well that's not true...haven't laughed this hard seeing words on a screen!!! Love you!!!! Now she's imagining Maan as the maid...OMG! Gangsta Maan wearing an apron and one of those dusty, granny-like hats, with a dust-stick and heels...😆😆😆!!!! Okay my imagination is on over-drive! And he's groping her in his sleep...I wonder where where his hand drifted till it found his destination?!😉 She pinched his nipples and then the screams...loved it! Morning breathe part...so realistic! OMG! He's so cold...mistress compare-compare game and then he called her flat...*air slap*...she should totally have slapped him..and hard..but maybe not on his facial "cheek"!😆 200 yr old BAA!!!!🤣 (good one!) Now you deserve a cookie! HE's GONE!!! WHAT?!!! I wonder if he'll be her secret admirer!!!! AHHH!! So excited for the next part...please update and SOON!!!!!!!!!!!!!
BTW: You're a fantastic writer...I meant to say that although out this long ass post...hope you understand from the emoticons and over usage of exclamation points! 😆
You're a star writer!!!!⭐️ (11/10 stars)...I would give you 100...but my fingers hurt clicking and my eyes hurt counting...sorry!😆
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