UDVHRANT THE SHATTERED.. part 1 pg 4 - Page 2

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Posted: 14 years ago
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loved the characterization...
so maan is with negative shade...
devtara nice ppl...
well eager to read the updates
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Posted: 14 years ago
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INTERESTING...FLIRTY MAAN UUUMMM VERY GOOD HEHEHEHEHEEE UPDATE SOON...
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Posted: 14 years ago
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interesting concept
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Posted: 14 years ago
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part 1 will be updated soon...



pictures for various characters...

maan -

geet -


dev -


tara -


aman -



could not upload the picture... he he he😆

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Posted: 14 years ago
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Part 1

It was one fine morning in the village of hosiarpur . Birds chirruping , lovely and sweet smelling wind was flowing , the crops in the field was flowing in the tunes to the wind. Near the field many huge trees were planted. Some boys were looking at one of the trees . just then two cars halted seeing the group of boys .the driver came out and asked something to them but they were too involved looking up at the tree to hear what he was asking. From the car three children came out. Two boys and a girl.

One who looked elder maintained a distance from the group , while the younger one went upto them and tried to talk with them. But they just ignored him and eyed the girl and as one advanced toward her…. One of the boys held his shoulder and said…..

Abe manu…. Marne ka irada hi kya??? Agar usne dekh liya to teri aakh phod degi…..

But the former one just ignored him and advanced toward her. Just as he extended one hand towards her……

THUD!!!!!!

All turned around to see a girl jumping from the tree to which the boys were looking …. She was wearing a salwar with the dupatta covering her face leaving the eyes….. till that time every one had came out of the car

As she walked there was a dominating air with her. All the boys were silent, some were tensed while some were smiling….. she walked upto manu and raised one eyebrow as to ask what were you doing????

To which he just smiled and nodded nothing……

Manu – mil gaya???? To which the girl handed them a lot of coconut tied in a rope along with the sickle…..

Manu – uff!!!! Yaar….. ek lane ko kah atha…. Panch kyun layi????? And to this she pointed at the group…. …

Manu – ok….. ok……. The girl raised an eyebrow towards the people who got up from the car……

Manu – kya pata????

Girl – toh dekh……

Manu approached the driver….

Manu – kya hua????

Driver – yeh address jante ho???? And gave him a paper... by that time the girl approached the girl from the car who now had fallen on the ground and extended her a hand…. But the latter looked amazed….

Girl – neeche hin baithne ka irada hai kya????? ……. The girl who was down(lets assume g1) grabbed her hand and then got up……

G1 – thanks…… to this the mysterious girl(mg) just blinked once…..

Manu approached the mg with the address . she just looked at the address and then her whole group looked at the address and then to the people and then back at the address……

Manu – kyun aaye honge yahan……

Dikhade????? – another boy asked…..

Mg just nooded……

Just then a girl came running to her…..

Girl – oye….. sun…… rani …

All of them turned to see her running to the mg and kept a hand on her shoulder due to which her duppatta slid down from her face but before it could come off she put a hand on her side cheek and again put it safely around her face…..

Rani – hmmm?????

Girl – tujhe sab wahan dhund rahein hain…… aur manu tujhe masi bularahein hain ….puch rahein hain narial laya ki nahin ??????

mAnu showed her the coconuts …….

Girl – yeh log kaun hai?????

Anu flashed the address to her and she ran away and along with her many boys too ran to the village….

Rani just eyed to the people and to manu…. To which he nooded….

Manu – aap log galat raste se aaye hain….. yeh kachi sadak hai….. doosri sadak se jayea ….. warna aapki gaadi ka khabara ho jayega……. Phir gaun main pooch lena ki mohinder handa ka ghar kaunsa hai….. koi bhi aapko le jaayega unke ghar…… aur haan gaadi bahar mat rakhna warna aapki gaadi jayegi kaam se………

Manu –(to rani) chal…. Hamein jana hai…….

Boy – suno….. as they both were walking away the boy who had tried to talk with them called….

Rani – hmmm…

Boy – tum isi gaun main rehti ho?????

Rani – just nooded her head

G1 – kya hum phir milenge????

Rani – jarur milenge…….

Itna confidence…… the boy said who was standing near the bonnet of the car and he came forward

Rani – ji han…..

Boy 1 – kaise?????

Rani – she just looked at him and said nothing

B1 – waise I am maan singh khurana…… he said with a smirk and held his hand out for a shake….

Rani – toh main kya karun????? As she gave a forcefull Namaste that looked more like a scalp for maan…….

Boy – hi I am dev…….

Rani – she just bent her head in acknowledgment and started to walk…..

G1 – suno…….

Rani – sham ko baat karenge….. tum jao…. Tumhara intezaar who log kar rahe honge…..

Her voice held little emotion….. and she walked away without turning back……

Maan – attitude…… dekhte hain kitne dino tak…….

Dev – bro…. aap yahan bhi suru ho gaye?????

Maan just rolled hos eyes and went to sit in the car…..

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Posted: 14 years ago
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loved the update...
seems interesting...
but just got to know maan...is rani geet...
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Posted: 14 years ago
#17
Do con & pm me
Update soon
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Posted: 14 years ago
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👏👏👏awesome...
nice start...
plz do cont soon...
tanx 4r pm

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