FF(MANEET): DIL MIL GAYE Thrd1 upd prt 21 pg 141) - Page 22

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hey when ru updating it's been nearly 2 days with no update plz update soon
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Sorry frnds for the late update. Here is d nxt part of my OS. Looking forward to ur valuable comments
PART 8
Geet is enjoying Maan's company.
Geet: Maan dieting pe ho kya? Tum kuch kha khun nahi rahe?

Maan: Ab kya karu geet, aunty mere liye ye dish banakar laayi thi magar mere naam pe tho koi aur hi paet pooja kar raha hai tho ye bandha aakhir kar bhi kya sakta hai?

Geet: Tumhare kehne ka ye matlab to nahi ke maine tumhare hisse ka pura khana kha liya aur tumhe pucchha tak nahi?

Maan: maine aisa tho nahi kaha geet, haan lekin agar tumhe aisa lagta hai tho yahi sach hoga, aakhirkar humhari geet kabhi galat ho hi nahi sakti (smiles)

Geet: (with her mouth wide open) Maan ab kehne ko reh bhi kya gaya hai sabkuch tho tumne keh diya, haan abhi bus ek hi kasar reh gayi hai

Maan: wo kya geet?

Geet: Tumne abhi tak mujhe mothi nahi kaha, chalo dosti ka itna tho khayal rakha

Maan: Nekhi aur puch puch

Geet: Maan tumne mujhse mothi kaha, main kis angle se tumhe fat lagti hoon.

Maan: Geet bathe tho tum kiye ja rahi ho aur ilzaam mujhpar laga rahi ho. Main tho humesha ki tarah tumhara saaath de raha hoon.

Geet: Achhaji ise saath dena kehte hai, rukho ab tumhe maza chakati hoon.

Saying this she takes a scale that was lying besides her and proceeds to hit maan. Maan noticing this gets up and starts moving here and there in the room. Geet is also following maan.

Geet: Maan aaj tho main tumhe kisi bhi haalat mein chodne nahi wali. Tumne, tumne mujhe mothi kaha

Maan: Geet meri itni himmat kaha ke main tumhare saamne ye sacchaai bayan karu.

Geet: What!!! Ab tho tumhari khair nahi maan.

Both are running in the room. Suddenly both of them lose their balance and they fall on the bed. Geet is lying on top of maan.

Both of them are laughing when suddenly their eyes meet. Maneet eyelock. Geet places her hand on Maan's face and gently caresses it. Maan also notices the sudden change in geet and for a moment gets lost in her mesmerizing eyes. He places his hands on her waist. Geet also senses the love and passion in Maan's eyes and she starts responding. Both of them start approaching each other. They were about to seal their distance with a kiss when Maan's mobile started to ring.

Geet immediately gets up and was unable to face maan. Maan attended the call and realizing that geet might be feeling uncomfortable decided to control the situation.

Maan: Are ye lo tumhare assignments tho lagbhag pure ho gaye bus ye ek aakhri kaam bakhi hai.

Geet still feeling embarrassed

Maan: Hmm' chalo ye bhi kar dete hai. Aakhir duniya mein aisa koi bhi kaam nahi jo Maan singh khurana nahi kar sakta. Ab in assignments ko hi le lo pata nahi pichle do dino se koi kya kaam kaam kar raha tha. Ab kya kare humhare dost din bar din kamchor hote ja rahe hai. Agar main aaj nahi aata tab tho ye assignments pending ka pending hi reh jaata. Bhai kya zamana aa gaya hai college koi aur jaata hai marks kisi aur ko milnewale hai aur howework humhe karna pad raha hai.

Geet: Maan tum tho aise keh rahe ho jaise ke ye saara ka saara kaam tumhi ne khatm kiya hai, main tho jaise ghar par baitkar makhiya maar rahi thi kyun?

Maan: (happy) Are nahi ji, makhiya maarne ka kaam tho humara hai. Khair ise chodho geet ye lo tumhara assignment complete ho gaya. Ab tho khush ho na.

Geet: thanks maan

Maan: Geet ,adi ka phone aaya tha mujhe ek important meeting ke liye jaana hoga main tumse badme milta hoon.

Geet: (goes and hugs maan) Thanks maan . Thanks for being there whenever I need u.

Maan: Geet ek baat humesha yaad rakhna. Tumhe jab kabhi bhi meri zarurat ho tho bus ek ishaara kar dena tum mujhe humesha apne paas paoogi. Saying so he places a soft kiss on her forehead. Achha geet tho ab main chalta hoon apna khayal rakhna.

Geet: (Smiles) Bye Maan (thinking) najane ye kaisa ehsaas hai. Maan ke saamne aate hi muskurane ka dil karta hai aur uske jaate hi aisa lagta hai jaise mano mere zindagi ka koi anmol hissa mujhse dur ja raha ho.

Maan enters his car. He notices the cassette in which he had recorded his confession. He removes the gift paper and throws it outside and places the cassette in his car.

Maan: (self talk) Geet meri bus yahi dua hai ke tumhe tumhari mohabbat jald hi mil jaaye.

Meanwhile

Yash: (self talk) Sach mein kal Pari (Meera) ke saath date mein itna maza aaya. I should say that yesterday was the most beautiful day of my life. Lekin main bhi ek number ka bhudhu hoon Pari ko ek bhi mulakat mein maine koi bhi gift nahi diya. Kehte hai girls ko flowers bahut pasand aate hai. Ek kaam karta hoon aaj usse uske favourite flowers gift karta hoon. Haan ye thik rahega issi bahane us se ek aur mulakat ho jaayegi.

Yash purchases the flowers and goes to meet Meera.

Meera opens the door. It is her best friend Pari.

Pari: O meera , main tujhe bata nahi sakti ke main aaj kitni khush hoon.

Meera: Are pari bata tho sahi aakhir baat kya hai

Pari: Maine tujhe ek modeling contract ke bare mein bataya than a wo mujhe mil gaya hai

Meera: o wow Pari. Its amazing news yaar. Chal bata Party kab de rahi hai.

Yash: Party tho main dunga

Meera and Pari shocked to see Yash. The door was left open and Yash had witnessed the entire drama

Meera: Yash tum

Yash: Haan main. Kya baat hai Pari O sorry I mean Meera aaj mujhe dekhkar tum khush nahi lag rahi.

Meera: Yash wo meri baat to sunlo

Yash: Itne dino se Baat hi tho sunta aa raha hoon aaj pehli baar bolne ka mauka mila hai.

Pari: Yash tumhe ek badi misunderstanding hui hai

Yash: Thik kaha tumne mujhe sach mein misunderstanding hui thi jo main tumhe Meera aur isse Pari samaj baitha. Main tum dono se bus ek sawal karna chahunga is puri duniya mein bekakoof banana ke liye tumhe main hi mila tha? Tumhe kisi ke jazbaato ke saath khelne ka agar itna hi shaukh tha tho tumne ye khel kisi aur ke saath kyun nahi khela, Main hi kyun?

Meera: Tum galat samaj rahe ho Yash, main tumhe kissi bhi tarah se hurt karna nahi chahti thi.

Yash: Hurt karna nahi chahti thi lekin mere feelings ka mazak udana chahti thi. Agar tumhe mujhse milne mein koi interest tha hi nahi tho tumne us contest mein participate kiya hi kyun, aur jab tum wo contest jeeth gayi tho apne badle apni is best friend ko kyun bhej diya?

Meera: Wo Yash main bahut hi nervous ho gayi thi. Jab tumne mujhse ye puchha ke main kaise dikhthi hoon tab mujhe ye laga ke kahi mere looks ki wajah se tum mujhse milne se inkaar na kar do aur is liye'

Yash: Tum tho bade daave karti thi na ke tum mujhe bahut acchhe se pechchanti ho. Tum ne mere nature ko bus itna hi pechchana. Miss Meera main aapko ye baat saaf saaf batadu ke kisi bhi insaan ki sahi pehchaan uski seerat se hoti hai aur na ki uski surat se. Khair, aap dono ka tho jee behel gaya hoga apne is purane khilone se, ab aap bor ho gayi hongi mere saath ye khel khelte hue.Don't worry main khud hi aapke raste se hath jaata hoon aap shaukh se apne agle shikhar ko dundh liyejiye lexin agar ho sake to agli baar us insaan ke jazbaato ke saath khelne se pehle ek baar sochiyega zaroor. Goodbye Miss Meera , bhagwan ne agar chaha tho humhari mulakat ab kabhie bhi nahi hogi.

Saying so Yash leaves. Meera in tears.

Evening

Maan has just finished his meeting and is about to leave. A small boy approaches him with a bouquet of flowers.

Boy: Sahab ye aakhri phool hai aap khared lijiye na.

Maan: Main in phoolo ka kya karunga, nahi mujhe ye phool nahi kharedna

Boy: Khared lijiyena saahab waise bhi aap kitne handsome lagte ho aapki koi na koi girlfriend to zaroor hogi unhi ko de dijiyega.

Maan: meri koi girlfriend nahi hai.

Boy: Le lijiyena saahab, aur waise bhi log kehte hain ke chotu ne jab bhi dil se kisi ko phool diye hai us insaan ki saari tamanna puri hui hai. Aur waise bhi ye aakhri phool hai agar aapka kuch bhala nahi hota tho kumse kum mera tho bhala kar dijiye

Maan: Tum baate badi ache karte ho. Lau flowers mujhe de do.

Maan purchases the flowers.

Boy: dekhna saahab aaj aapki saari uljane sulaj jaayegi.

Maan (smiles) sits in the car and goes

Geet: Are yaar ye meri khatara scooty aaj tho bilkul bhi start nahi ho rahi upar se ye aisi jagah aakar bandh ho gayi hai jaha pe dur dur tak koi nazar bhi nahi aa raha.

Maan notices some girl struggling with her bike. On watching closely he realizes that the girl is none other than geet. He immediately stops his car and approaches geet.

Maan: Kya hua geet Scooty ne phir se daga de di?

Geet: O maan , thank god tum aa gaye. Ab meri scooty ko start karne mein meri madat karo.

Maan: Geet mere paas isse better solution hai. Ek kaam karte hai main tumhe tumhare ghar drop kar deta hoon aur adi se kehkar tumhari scooty ek ache mechanic ko dikhakar usse thik karke tumhare ghar pouchha deta hoon. Kyun thik hai na?

Geet: I guess u r right.

Maan: tho chalo tumhe tumhare ghar drop kar deta hoon.

Geet sits in the car and notices the flowers.

Geet: Ye phool kiske liye kharede hai?

Maan: Wo ek bachha zidd kar raha tha isliye maine khared liye. Vaise ye phool mujhse zyaada tumhare paas acchhe lagenge.

Geet: Thanks maan.

Maan gets a call.

Maan: (on the phone) Ok rathore saahab main abhi wo file collect kar leta hoon.

Call ends

Maan: Geet mujhe ek urgent file collect karna hai. Kuch 5-10 minute ka kaam hai. Rathore saahab ka ghar raste mein hi hai tho main soch raha tha ke pehle waha se file pick kar lu aur phir tumhe tumhare ghar chod du. I hope u don't mind geet.

Geet: Its perfectly alright maan. Aur waise bhi maan saahab ki ghadi mein baithne ka mauka roz thodi na milta hai.

Maan: Thanks geet

Maan stops the car in front of Rathore villa.

Maan: Geet main bus yu gaya aur yu aaya. Koi bhi problem ho tho mujhe call kar lena.

Maan leaves. Geet is feeling bored sitting alone in the car. She suddenly notices a cassette and puts it in the tape.

A voice: Geet''

Geet : Ye tho maan ki aawaz hai. Lekin wo tho file collect karne ke liye gaya hai.

She then realizes that the voice was coming from the cassette that she had just played in the tape

PRECAP: Is there any need for me to give a precap, but still if it brings a smile on your faces then here it is finally it is time to reveal MAAN'S CONFESSION.

PART 9: PAGE40
Edited by piya- - 14 years ago
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Posted: 14 years ago
eagerly waiting for

the next part quickly post it
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Posted: 14 years ago
nice update .. but why did u leave us like this ... abee confession sunnay ke liye aur kitna wait kerna paray gaa 😭
continue super soon
love
Sana
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Posted: 14 years ago

a big no to precap... only update required

Edited by maansee - 14 years ago
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Posted: 14 years ago
plz update soon am dying to read the next part.
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Posted: 14 years ago
First of all Piya! thanks for the PM...

Now the Update... loved it always... and I feel that Meera did wrong with Yash and so he reacted this way...hope they clear out this misunderstanding...
Geet had such feelings which she can't understand and hope she gets to know Maan's dil ki baat as the precap hints... wonder how will she react...
Maan so sweet and caring as always
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Posted: 14 years ago
Wow again a super duper update that was...!!!
Really cant waot for the next part...u know while reading i cud easily analyse real maan and geet in that...wow...
U know u have left me speechless again...!!!
Ur really a superbb writer...ur thoughts, ideas and the way u express them in ur writing is jst fabulous...!!!

Really cant wait for maan's confession...and m sure it will also be the best ever confession,,,,,!!!

Well yash will also have her real meera i guess now...

Continue soon...well m using mobile web ryt nw so cant insert emoctions...!!!

But it was truly awesome...please try continuing soon...!!!
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Posted: 14 years ago
nice update i loved it...plz update soon am waiting 4 next part n thanks 4 the pm:):)

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