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good start...nice story plot...
so Geet is engaged to someone else...but still cant keep her hands and thoughts off Maan...
hey as u asked for it...here is the segment where u need to change...it has got 'WE'...
"Let's go," they both said in unison and we parted into another frantic run to reach the hotel before this erroneous weather desired to show its true self.
so Geet is engaged to someone else...but still cant keep her hands and thoughts off Maan...
hey as u asked for it...here is the segment where u need to change...it has got 'WE'...
"Let's go," they both said in unison and we parted into another frantic run to reach the hotel before this erroneous weather desired to show its true self.
All of them kept close watch of each other to make sure no one parted from the group. The hotel lights where amplifying as we got closer and they were going to be safe in the warm and toasty haven, our room."...
go through it...I hope I was helpful...
Cricket
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