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Posted: 14 years ago
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OMG what an update.......

simply superb........so now we will see Geet's Love......yiiippppeee......though it is flashback but still at least some happy moments....

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Posted: 14 years ago
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when is this going to end 😭
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Posted: 14 years ago
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***REMORSES***
part 65
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Maan picks a diary up. Dated way way back... He shivered to open... What if.. What if they are too much for him to Handel. Too much for him to bare... He opens the first page...

"do you know... I have seen maan after, almost 3 years. He is very grown up now. Oh... How could I say how much I love him... Look at the back wall. You will see his picture. Doesn't he look cute!"

Maan turns round... & there was he. A 14 years old boy. Young! Naughty... Arrogant. He was pulling kesars ear! ... Another tear dropped from his eyes... Kesar!... He looks back at his loves words...

"I must say... Kesar is very naughty as well! But he is the only best friend I have! But I was happy... Very happy. That maan came first... FIRST! ... Ow... I just love him..."

Those words somewhere started to kill him.. Somewhere it was giving him tremendous happiness... Somewhere he wished he was that small boy again..... Very small... Where he could rewright his life again....

"I had to hide to look at him! Uff... I wonder when I don't have to hide to see him.... & give him a bear hug to say how much I love him!"

Maan "no! No you don't have to hide to say how much you love me... Because I love you to... I love you more then anything! More then all of this! I love you!" maan couldn't stop crying... This was only the first page of the first diary! How on earth he will through each one of them to see his love... Her love... There love...

"I have made a gift for him! I know he won't like it. He is so rich. Why would he? & anyway dadi have told me he won't like this type of filthy gift. It hurts! I didn't tell Kesar! Or maam & pappa! It will hurt them more! But you can have it... Here!" there was a small envelope. Right underneath. It was small... How old was geet then he thought... 9! 10! Her Tinny finger... He could feel them!.. & there was... A bracket... Made with fresh flowers... But now.. Dead... But it's still there. He was scared of touching it. Very. What if he destroys it! Something he is very good at... His voice shakly answers "I love it! It's most expensive gift for me. I love it!"

Maan turns to the next page... There was no date... Only first... 2nd... 3rd.. Etc! Written in top if each... Xhe cried hugging the diary...

"kesar came today. He brought this gift for me! Liar! He told me it's from maan! Of course I knew it wasn't! I know his choice! & why would he buy me a gift? Ha... Bolo! Bolo!... I asked him that to. & I cought him! I knew he couldn't lie to me! Silly! Ae kesar bhi na!"

Maan laughs at her note... Laughs in his pain! This love... How could he ever give her enough to make up? How could he ever do anything to repent! Not even all the worlds love won't be enough against hers...

"ae kesar bhi na! But I loved his gift! It's not normal for a poor girl to have expensive gift! Can you imagine what everyone will say! Specially this expensive gift! I gave it back! If it was my maan... I would have taken it... But it's not! It's kesar! Budu!"


Tears wasn't stopping! She would have accepted anything from him! Anything... Even not caring about the world! Why would they say! What would ...

"look below the previous photo! ... Funny na!" maan looks at it carefully... She have edit it! There was a different girl! But she stuck her photo within! Maan smiles... "I was so bored & was thinking how lucky is the girl! So I decided to do this!... It's a dream! I know! I know! I could never be there! But no harm in dreaming! :)!"

Maan "it's not dream jaan! I am all yours! I am all yours!" his voice was fading way... Barely could speak... This is his geet. That's his geet... The thought what he have done to her started to eat him within... Steered to kill him...

"oh you don't know what happen today. I seen him! I seen him again... I was in his room! But... But... He thought I am a servant! ;( .. He threw all the clots at me.. But I didn't mind. Atleast he threw the cloths at me! :)"

Maans eyes widens... Servant! He remember that day! That was the first time he ever found out... She was geet! After three long years... But he still hated her... He pushed her out of the room! Saying... S... Maans voice was shaking. He cried again.. "I am sorry! I am sorry!"

"he called me a filth. I didn't mind. I know I was. I fell on the floor & broke my hand. His force was to strong! I did not cry yet it was painful... It took papas 3 months wages to plaster my hand. I felt very guilty... Kesar even came & shouted at me. Told me not to come round his ever... Shouting at me... Bro does not love you. He broker my hand... But do you know what I have said. I was very proud as well...
"per unhe to haque hai na!" (he have the right)


Maan couldn't take it anymore. He hide his face in shame... His heart screamed for her... His heart cried for her. The remorse... It was only the beginning... It will hunt him every second. Every minute. Every day. He cried... & cried... The tears wasn't enough at all. He felt his heart would die any minute soon with the rapid heart beats... He will die.. Every word.. Every word... Only told him how much he meant for her... How much she loved him.... He cried louder'.



next- still no geet'😭 more of geets love...

-Prev- next- Part 66





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Edited by FIRESafiReFIRE - 14 years ago
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Congrats for new thread , Awesome update............i am feeling bad for geet she lost everything in her life i hope she wont let go maan from her life ...😭😭😭😭😭😭
Loved the way you described maans feelings & thoughts when he did not see geet............poor maan....


aww now maan going to know she love him only wow please dont separate them for long now let him find her ...
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thank you for this part dear
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Posted: 14 years ago
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nice part !!!
loved it !!!!!!!
waiting for it....
Edited by ramahesh - 14 years ago
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Posted: 14 years ago
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congrats for the new thread
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Congrats on the new thread....
Awesome part..... loved it
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Congrats 4r new thread... Y r u doing dis to Maan y u giving him liltle hope... Shoria is dead nd u know she'll take her wrath on Maan U know dat so y???

Owe u killed shoria i was hoping dat he will get married wid rajji but chalo chado.
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Congo for the new thread....luvd da upadte.....
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Omg the diary... I cried... There are so much ...
Oh I want to know more of geet now & past

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