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Posted: 14 years ago
Aw-Kay! My extended weekend came to an end today morning and I had finished reading your flick, as per my declaration. 😃

I and your story are like chalk and cheese respectively. In the past, I have read a lot cheeky fan fictions and I was scared to read yours, honestly. 😳 But your language and skill compelled me to read, you know? So bang on, do me the honor of adding me to your PM list, you did not notify me this time, there. 🥱

I feel Mayank's character is growing perennially which is your FF's highlight. He's cool and I like the whole thing bout him - he's again too much fiction but bits of the story reflect the amount of realism his character holds. Nupur, somehow doesn't ring much with me. I shall look forward to your development of her character, though. =]

Also, the central idea of your story makes sense to me which is another reason why I decided to continue reading. It's fictional and the opposites-attract is totally clichd, but you could say there differences come to bind em in your flick, and they've gotten a few essential things in common - like the suffering and agony thing and also the struggle thing. I dunno how to explain, it appeals to me.

I shall wind up my never-asked-for review. Thanks so much.

Period.

-Kankshita
Edited by -Kanky- - 14 years ago
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Posted: 14 years ago
beautiful update naina...loved it lots...cant wait to read wat happens next...
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Posted: 14 years ago
It was an awesome part.❤️
loved d way u characterised nd lead pair.
beautifully writen.👏
Please add me to ur PM list.
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Posted: 14 years ago
Awesome chappie Naina. You have a nice flow to your words. And falling for you is such a perfect song for this story. Its feel good and i am enjoying reading this honey. :))

Update soon. And am sorry for the late reply.

Love,
Akansha
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Posted: 14 years ago
Naina plz update ur ff soon
we r waiting for ur update...
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Posted: 14 years ago
hey its been ages...when will u update?
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Posted: 14 years ago
amazing ff to say the least...extraordinary in all sense..plzz pm me 4m now on dear..do continue soon..😳
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Posted: 14 years ago
Note*
Ok, so I know that I am updating after a reallly longg time, BUT you guys MUST know how difficult it was for me to update this part! I wanted to update last week, and I wrote the whole part but my laptop got beeped* up for some reason and the whole chapter got erased. That left me super mad. Anddd THEN when I tried updating a couple days ago, the same thing happened when I was up 4 pages on microsoft word. So now, today I used my sister's laptop and finally I'm here giving you guys the update! And just so you know... I had written a chapter that was completely different from this one when I wrote last week and now I have changed it to this... But i hope you enjoy this!😕 Even though I have a feeling it's kinda short but you have no idea how mad I am because of the chapter getting deleted TWICE!
PS- Thank You for all your comments and support! You guys are cool B-)
Chapter 6
Mayank sighed watching her sleep in his arms. The sun had just started to spread its colors into the room, slowly scattering its light through the curtains.

He gently caressed her hair. And looking at her skin glow with the sun's effect he began pondering over the last few days. Nupur had been acting rather strange lately and he could not point out to any particular incident that could possibly give an explanation for her strange behavior.


He gently moved his fingers through her hair with a very concerned look on his face. For some reason, he had a fear in his heart. A fear that he might be losing her. And he didn't even know what he could do to fix it. He didn't even know what was wrong. He felt distressed and stupid all at the same time. "Distressed" for the obvious reason being that Nupur had started distancing herself. And "stupid" for thinking that he was overreacting and thinking about the situation too much.


He let out a deep breath. Maybe I am thinking too much. He thought to himself. Everything is fine between the two of us. We'll be all right. He said consoling himself. And placing a soft kiss on her forehead after moving his hands through her hair once again, he got out of bed.


Making his way to the shower he continued to convince himself that everything was perfectly alright and that he was getting all worked up for no reason.


But once in the shower he couldn't help but think back to the day when the strangeness started. It was just a few days ago. Everything was very normal. But then something happened and he just couldn't figure out what it was that was bothering her.

He now remembered the day she started acting strangely.


Nupur was breathing heavily with her forehead showing signs of sweat beads slowly being formed. With shaky hands, she took out the keys to the house from her purse and swallowed the lump in her throat while desperately trying to unlock the door. She looked completely dishelved and the eyes that were trying very hard to control the tears didn't help her look better either.

She didnt know what to do or say. She was confused and distressed. All she could really think right now was to curl up in a ball and cry in Mayank's arms. She just couldn't deal with what she just found out and thinking about Mayank, she sighed before biting back a painful moan. Mayank. I cant possibly talk to Mayank, she thought. She was sure that if she told Mayank what she knew now, there would only be one solution that he would give. And she was in no state to accept what she knew he so dearly would want.

I can't tell Mayank. And suddenly becoming extremely happy about his absence from the house at the moment she finally rushed in, clutching the purse to herself. What she overlooked, was Mayank's car parked in the driveway already. She was so preoccupied with so many things on her mind, she didn't notice that the one day she would have been happy to not find Mayank waiting for her at home, was the day he was already there.

Holding her purse close to herself, she walked towards the bedroom with shaky feet.


She looked down and her hair fell over her face. She was so lost in her thoughts that she didn't even look up front and as a result, she bumped into a hard frame. She screamed out in complete shock and horror, not expecting anybody right at the bedroom door. Mayank held on to her shoulders, trying to balance her while laughing at her horrified look. "It's just me! Calm down!" he said holding back his laughter now. Only Nupur knew that it was JUST him she didn't want to face right now.

Keeping her hand on her chest, she breathed out. "You scared me!" she exclaimed. Suddenly realizing that her purse was no longer in her hand, she looked around horrified. Mayank looked at her confused.

Then finally realizing that the purse was lying on the floor, she hurriedly picked it up and clutching it to herself walked past Mayank into the room.

"How come you're home early today?" she said fixing the curtains while still holding her purse closely to herself. "I was missing you, baby", he said gently hugging her from behind. "Yeah, right", she said moving towards the bed.

"What? I was!" he exclaimed giving her neck open mouthed kisses. "Mayank, please, not now", she said trying to get out of his hold. He just groaned and slowly grabbed her purse out of her hands and threw it on the bed.

She gasped as she realized that he'd just thrown her purse away. "Mayank!" she yelled at him. Mayank stopped what he was doing right then and there. Because he knew this was the "actually angry" yell. She quickly picked up her purse from the bed and gave him an angry glare. Her face softened as she saw how confused and sorry he looked.


She cupped his cheek, "Sorry, look, I'm not feeling well. I just want to take a nice warm shower and then we'll.. we'll...ta---talk", she said trying very hard to smile up at him. Mayank nodded. "Is everything okay?" he asked concerned as he finally took notice of the differnence in her voice and expression. "Yeah", she said trying to look normal. "Are you sure, jaan?" he asked again, not satisfied by her half hearted response. Nupur nodded again now literally biting back the tears and loud sobs at his love filled addresses to her. Not being able to hold back any longer, she buried her face in his chest. "Nupur?" he asked gently moving his fingers through her hair. She managed not to break down in his arms. Because she knew that if she made that mistake, she'd have to pay heavily for it. "I'll be alright. I promise", she said holding on to his shirt. Mayank looked at her, not satisfied at all but decided to drop it for the time being and simply nodded at her as she took the purse and walked into the bathroom.

Finally finishing his shower after reminicing about that day's events, he grabbed a towel and got out. Loosely tying it around his waist he came out of the bathroom and looked at Nupur lying in bed wide awake. She was looking up at the ceiling. Blankly staring at it. Mayank walked upto her looking very disappointed. "Why don't you talk to me, Nupur?" he whispered holding her hand. She was surprised by his sudden appearance. "What are you talking about?" she said feigning ignorance. "I know something is wrong. Infact, I know that something is very wrong. Why can't you tell me? What is bothering you?" he said trying to be patient with her. "I seriously don't know what you're talking about", she said not looking at him anymore. "Fine. Then when you're comfortable enough and trust me enough to share your "secrets" you know where to find me", he roughly left her hand.


She didn't say anything. I am not doing the right thing. I'm not being fair to Mayank! He has every right to know! He'll never forgive you if he finds out you were keeping this as a secret to him! But I possibly can't tell him! Her mind fought back. Her heart and mind were having a great big battle and she couldn't handle it anymore. I need fresh air and time to think. She said getting out of bed and after putting on some loose fitting trousers and a shirt on top, she walked out of the house. Mayank watched from the window as she made her way out of the drive way.


Now he knew for sure that she was keeping something from him. And he would sure as hell find out!


He walked into the bedroom and heard the familiar ring tone of her cell phone. He would usually ignore her calls, letting it go to voice mail instead, but today he was curious. He picked up the phone sitting on the side table and looked at the number. It said "Dr. Matthews". His heart dropped as he pushed the answer button. "Hello? Miss Nupur Bhushan?" said a female voice from the other end. Mayank cleared his throat. "She's not here at the moment. Can I take a message?" he said with his heart pounding in his chest. "Well, may I know who I'm giving this message to?" "Mayank." "And you are her...?" "Boyfriend.." he said when he so badly wanted to say husband and tell that woman to say what she wanted to say already! "Oh! Alright. I called to confirm her appointment because as it is she postponed the last two." she said finally telling him the purpose of her call. "Appointment.. for what?" he said with his hands sweating and his heart anticipating what her answer would be. "For her abortion", she said as if it were very obvious. Mayank felt his heart stop and then suddenly everything around him slowed down... Nupur was getting an abortion? Nupur was pregnant? And that was when the phone dropped out of his hand...

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Posted: 14 years ago
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Posted: 14 years ago
Naina, I understand - it is so irritating and disheartening but dear this one came out just perfect - the people they are ... You know when you mentioned her shivering - I was so thinking that maybe she is pregnant ... Now this is getting just more interesting ... He will obviously be against this decision of hers - let's see how the story goes fro here ... Continue soon ...

Edited by -jaee- - 14 years ago

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