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Posted: 14 years ago
Hey dear the part was simply awesum i just loved it
the more n more i read nd im just falling in love with this maan of urs yet he was cruelest man in the world yet all his sins are unforgivable yet to stand him is unbearable bt still there is sumthing in him which catches ur attraction i thing 4 sure wat ever he does he does at its extreme wen he hated her that too was in extreme
that he abused her accused her in every possible way by every possible method nd now that he is loving her that too is in extreme that he started calling her his life he is ready to go any height 4 her to any extent just 4 her he could leave any1 anything just 4 her he is truly madly in love with her

he was madly looking for her finding her observing every place everywhere he could possibly find her in every single corner of the world most probably bt still failing coz she was nowhere to b seen it seemed like he was loosing his life 4rm his own hands his soul was drifting way 4rm him his happiness was moving way 4rm him all seem to b cuming down as mere ashes if she isnt dere den nuthing is at its ryt place coz if she is nt dere den he is dead nuthing more than a corpse

she was at a complete different state of mind once again she referred herself to sumthing this time as a dead rose wat her life was more than that or herself she was dark like a dead rose she was wilted as a dead flower she was lifeless there was no use as she was no dead no matter how much u water a flower after its dead it never gets alive once it is dead all the efforts are just useless there was nuthing that could she feel or be happy about her life was completely a misery wat else could b wen a wife gt deceit by her own lover her own husband bt still she never killed herself still she was that strong to face everything in her life

maan had really gone insane 4 her actually people du wen they are in love that too madly maan singh khurana waiting 4 sum1 on its door sorry to b corrected waiting 4 his life his wife he was damn happy bt she gives him no more chance to be happy its just 4 few moments nd then the very next moment he realizes he yet has only her body nd nuthign more than that nd wen u are in love this structure made of mud does nt matters at all all wat matters is feel btw the souls which obviously didnt existed here as she was a dead soul
she was least bothered wat could bother her about him anymore as she knew why he was here that was fir his mere needs she keep reasoning her mind most importantly her heart so that it does nt fall in his trap yet again bt seems she was really helpless at times she already started melting but still sumthing deep inside her nt allowing her to react back to love him back

he again was badly hitted by all those memories which could give nuthing bt only pain which were good for nuthing bt just to pierce ur heart all those doings that he did with her how could he after remembering them after recalling them he wasnt even able to face himself bt sumwhere it was good u wont correct it until u realize it bt still the thoughts that how could he du this to his wife how could he go so low how could he not realize wat he was doing how could he nt feel wat he felt now how could he be so blind in all those golden linings how could he go so far how could he?only question that was right now in his mind in his body in his soul that was creating a sense of dread in him a fear of wat she would have felt at all those times wat she have gone thru just because of him wat he have done to her wat he had made her he was frightened he was terrified the thoughts were horrendous talking over his body his soul his mind his heart the pain the fear the horrifying thought were making him shiver he was afraid wat if she leaves him he can never loose her how can any1 loose its soul how will 1 live all those were making shake
as his soul she can definitely understand wat he was going thru bt as she was nt sure wat is it bt still she tried bt was helpless wat she could du nd she dont want to either helpless at both the sides

i loved wat he said at the said at the end he was actually doing all this just to please himself he loved her truly bt all he was doing was 4 his own satisfaction or he was doing as his atonement bt love grows this feeling that all your happiness lies in that particular person but he sumwhere hated this fact to the core he actually wanted her happy that wat the aim of his life 4rm now own hope he fulfills his promise nd get her back to life

next day they were together again sun rises like sunshine bringing sum light to their life nd illuminating nd taking all the dark shades with it
loved the part dear it was awesum loved the way u explained every emotion of maans that was just amazing
du continue soon will b waiting 4 the next part
keep writing as im in love with ur writing skills u really drive me crazy nd i love u 4 this muaah
god bless u
thnx 4 the pm



Edited by muskaan_cute19 - 14 years ago
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Posted: 14 years ago
ahan u updating finallu u kno was waiting 4 it
bt then just thought to comment atleast on this 1
chalo wait was worth nd now update quickly dear

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Posted: 14 years ago
wowwwwwww... updating...
muskaan_cute19 your comments is so heart touching...
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Posted: 14 years ago

Originally posted by: 18mypride

wowwwwwww... updating...
muskaan_cute19 your comments is so heart touching...


thnx dear
glad u liked it bt as i say all credit goes to only keyama
she is the 1 who writes it just amazingly nd make me write toooo😳

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Posted: 14 years ago

Originally posted by: muskaan_cute19


thnx dear
glad u liked it bt as i say all credit goes to only keyama
she is the 1 who writes it just amazingly nd make me write toooo😳

appriciate your inspiration... liked ur pics collection...its veeeeeeeryyyyyyyyy good!
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Posted: 14 years ago


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part 52
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Maan felt comfortable holding Geet in his arm. Nothing els mattered. His tension just have disappeared. She had magic. She had magic in her touch. Her touch always melts him. Her touch always gives him some weird satisfaction. The demand of her presence from his heart & mind. It eases that. His life. She was his life. No matter how much he may want to kill & feel sick of him self. Geet will be always there to comfort. She was in deep sleep & he didn't want to disturb except make her comfortable. Very comfortable. Geet seems to lost her anger. She cuddles up further. Her hand round his chest & head on his arm. She liked his warmth. Even in sleep. She loved it. She couldn't deny the fact she was falling for him all over again. Falling for this new maan. It's clearly visible in her sleep. The way she moves... The way she comfortable...
After 2 more hours Geet gets up. Found maan staring at the ceiling & holding her tight. She jerks up.
Geet- I am sorry. I... Maan puts his finger on her lips instantly. Both falls back on the bed. Maan on top of Geet.
Maan- why? Why are you saying sorry? You have every right on me. Right to love me! Right to kill me! Right to claim me! Geet looks at him. Surprised. She wanted to protest back. She stopped thinking first thing in the morning. It's not a good idea!.
Geet- can you please move. I have to get ready for My office.
Maan- we are not going to the office today. We.... We going somewhere els.
Geet- I have no time to waste. Maan was hurt. Spending time with him was a waste. But geets anger was reasonable.
Maan- then waste it is! You are coming with me. Get ready. He replies cunningly. Not giving Geet Any chance to protest.

Maan drives to a very old building. It's a orphan school. Building badly needed refurbish. Kids had no good cloths on. No good place to stay. The teacher greeted them.
Lady- hello Mr & Mrs maan sing khurana. We have been expecting you. I am mrs mhir.... Geet puts a force smile on. & maan smiles with heart. They both flows the lady. The school was in very bad condition. Geet barely cared. Barely noticed the helpless children. Barely seen how much pain they were going through. Maan looks at geet now & then. She seemed normal. Like nothing is happening round her.
Maan- Geet. I have brought this under your name. We are there sponsor. We need to spend quality time here to refurbish everything.
Geet looked least bothered- why have you brought me here? Why are you wasting my time. Geet was rather rood. Some children was hiding at the corner looking at them. Bit scared now. The teacher looked down.
Maan felt embarrassed.
Geet- I don't have time for this mr maan sing khurana. So please. Leave me alone.
Maan- Geet... J....
Geet- no! You listen! Doing this won't make you big or you will get any sympathy. Everyone knows who you are & what you are. Stop showing off! Because I don't want this children to go through the same insult as me!.. Maan looks at her. Shocked & surprised. Not understanding her sudden reaction. He brought her here to overcome there Childs memory. To forget the fact he him self was the murder of there child. No one els! Then? Then why? Why she won't give me wither chance.
Geet- enough of me wasting time here. I am leaving. Geet walked off. Some child was on her way. They ran way as well in fear.


Maan was just loosing it now. His patient. He wasn't great at patient! But geets behavior wasn't improving & it seems to get rude day by day! Maan walked right behind her. Very angry annoyed. What exactly is the children's fault that she have to be this rude! What exactly they have done.

Geet was about to open the car door when maan holds her hand firmly & shoves her against the car. Killing her with his eyes.
Maan- why are you doing this? He asked. Angry!
Geet- what do you mean?
Maan- I am trying my best to improving everything we have lost & you...
Geet- no! You are wrong. Everything I have lost. Not you. & this won't make any difference. Not a single!
Maan- I don't care! all I care of helping them. Just help...
Geet looked at him. Barely could digest a single word. What does he mean? There is nothing he could do to ease her pain! Geet somewhere believed is no show off & somewhere she was certain it's nothing then show off.
Maan sing khurana could never change. Never………….






PM- SS

thanks for all the love & suppot.

next- will she come back in?😳

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Posted: 14 years ago

love Maan's out burst,

coz some times it would help to knock some sense to the other person that he/she really mean their actions!!!

lovely update!!!

loved it!!!

Edited by -dia- - 14 years ago
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Posted: 14 years ago

o ooh.... school ka precap padhke laga tha ki yeh maaneet apne bachpan ke school jayenge...

pan yahaan toh... alag hi twist ,.... u always gives surprices..😉
loved this part...
Edited by 18mypride - 14 years ago
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Posted: 14 years ago
awesome update
loved it
looking forward to see how will maan handle geet??
will he be successful in his attempts?
n will geet forgive maan? at wat cost?
too many questions in mind...
plz do continue soon
thanks 4 updating
Edited by millie_maaneet - 14 years ago
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Posted: 14 years ago
Hey dear loved the part it was amazing as always
nuthing could b better 4 him more than holding her in his arms

no night could b better than this in which sleep holding her and no morning can b better than this in which he sees her face even before the sun this was just like a spell on him in which he was enchanted with her charm the effect she had on him she really take him to any extent undoubtedly she was a magician to him who could heal all his wounds that too in a jiffy she could get him release from all the pains
she could absorb all his stress she had that power in her

she still had that love 4 him deep inside as that love existed in that subconscious mind of hers so that could only b visible in a subconscious state
wen she not completely conscious coz at that time her mind takeover her completely nd as of now her brain was sleeping she could feel him
bt as soon as she cumz back she is still the same no change at all rude stubborn strongheaded determined that never to love him back no never wat may ever happens


all did this happened it hurt more coz she loved him truly madly she loved him even sum1 else pain couldnt help it coz all wat seems is just an act of him nuthing more its just another way to hurt her or any1 else his doings were unforgivable she was turned so negative that even if he is duing sumthing right or correct or sum1z good sake she felt that its just another tricks of him to hurt that was fitted in her mind the only thing in her mind was all he could do was hurt people give them pain nuthing more than that as he was good for nuthing nuthing at all
at the end i wont say anything much abt it as i myself was confused was she angry or confused
was she hurt of wat he have done or wat he is not duing the statement at the end she thought There is nothing he could do to ease her pain! wasshe complaining was she sad about this was she angry abt this watevershe felt there i myself is quite confused bt i tnk she still in dilemma how to react wat to react as she is hell confused about his behaviour hs present doings
well loved the part dear it was great love reading it
keep writing
god bless u

Edited by muskaan_cute19 - 14 years ago

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