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This is my altered version of the scene where Sid saves Armaan from that room where there was an oxygen leak.......
Chapter 4
There was too much smoke. His eyes were burning and his throat was too dry.
But he continued running upstairs to the ICU where JP had confirmed that patients were stuck inside because of a door jam.
He wondered where Riddhima was.
Was she safe?A mild panic started to spread within him.
Was she stuck in that room too?He reached the room and peered through the windows.
Some of the doctors had fainted because of the excess oxygen and the remaining were trying to help the patients but he knew it was a matter of time before they would give up.
He spotted Armaan lying still on the floor......a wave of concern swept over him.
He was after all, before anything else, a doctor.
"Armaan!!"
That voice.His attention was pulled towards the other window where someone was standing outside.
It was
her.
Her eyes fixed at the unconscious man lying inside.
She was hitting the glass ....crying for help.
He willed himself to look away and do something.But his insides were frozen.
He couldnt move.
He saw the panic in her eyes, the desperateness........
and something else.Even with so much chaos around him, he was rooted to his spot as a hard realization hit him.
"Armaan!!"
And that one word propelled him of his stupor.
His mind coming back to the present, he looked around wildly searching for something,
anything to break the door.
Spotting a fire escape ,he shielded his face and smashed the glass with his fist.
Grabbing the axe, he ran towards the door.
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"Armaan! Armaan!!...please somebody help!"
She looked around frantically.
But there was no one. She had never felt so helpless in her life.
She banged the glass in vain knowing it was no use.
This couldnt be happening............She was going to lose Armaan again.
Suddenly, she heard a loud sound and saw that someone had broken the door.
She smiled though her tears and started running towards the entrance.
But midway her feet stopped as recognized the profile of the man in the gas mask.
It was
him.
Her saviour was here.
Whenever things went wrong, he had always come to make them right.
And he had come today too........ when she didnt expect him to.
Other doctors were running into the room to help the people inside but her eyes were only fixed at him.
Holding a firm hand around him, Sid was trudging Armaan out of the room when suddenly her sight was blocked by other patients being brought out.
More smoke burned her eyes and her vision blurred.
Squinting she tried to move forward but there were too many people blocking her way and too much smoke.
After a few seconds, her way cleared and she saw Armaan lying right next to where she was standing.
Kneeling beside him, she tried to rouse him.
"Armaan wake up please....Are you alright?.....Talk to me!"
He coughed suddenly and painfully opened his eyes.
Riddhima looked around.
Where was Sid?She couldnt spot him anywhere.
People were gathering around them now but she still couldnt see Sid.
Had it been just her dream?Had she imagined him?As an answer, her eyes were pulled straight towards the staircase as if by a magnetic force.
Through the smoke, she could make out his silhouette.
One hand on the railing, the other holding the mask, a defeated stance.
But what she could see, very clearly, were his eyes.
She tried to move but she felt as if an invisible force was holding her back.
His eyes churned with so many emotions ....
Anger.
Disappointment.
Questions.
Sadness......but what stopped her breath was the look of finality in his eyes.
A goodbye.Her vision was obscured again by someone but even before it cleared, she knew he was gone.
Gone from her life......forever.And she knew with a stark clarity...............that she would never find peace again.
Edited by sidsk - 14 years ago
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