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maha

@OpTiMiStIc.cUt

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Posted: 14 years ago

#391

owowwwwwwwwwww what a update just luv it :D plzzzz update more I know I m getting greedy but plzzzz I can't wait for tooooooooooooooooo long :( if poosible update tonite the nxt part pleashhh :D

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applepie

@-GoogleWithMe-

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Posted: 14 years ago

#392

wow dear finally u updated

loved it was awesome

Ar romance was fantatic

plz complete the part as soon as u can

Edited by -poornima- - 14 years ago

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Geeta singh

@sweetdesire

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Posted: 14 years ago

#393

Hey di...now u really testing my patience yaar....aur yeh kya AR phir se alag-alag aur wo bhi pure 1 week k liye....why r u tourting me nd MY ARMAAN at the same tym....haan...waise aap do-do din tk kahana gayab ho jati h....u know na how impatience I am ven it comes to TTW...now compele dis part di....ek baat aur...now-a-days I am missing u alot....

Lots of love
GEe

Edited by sweetdesire - 14 years ago

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caprigurl

@caprigurl

Sparkler

+ 4

Posted: 14 years ago

#394

Hawwwwwwww phir sey ek nai problem
Armaan is gonna burst soon if Riddhima has to stay away🤣

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namita

@namita18

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Posted: 14 years ago

#395

finally a reserve

for the time being inse kaam chala lo😆

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Nruti

@arshluver_15

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+ 4

Posted: 14 years ago

#396

reserve
i was thinking u be done in day or 2 but not so i am taking this reserve....
i hope i remember to update it.....if not remind me....
love
nruti

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Sonya

@Ianoconic

Stunner

+ 4

Posted: 14 years ago

#397

HEY DI THE PART WAS NICE😊 BUT IT WAS SHORT HOPE YOU WILL UPDATE SOON.

COMING TO THE PART I CAN IMAGINE ABHIMANYU AND ARMAAN RACING AND THE OBAMA AND OSAMA THING WAS REALLY HILERIOUS.🤣

BUT DI WHAT IS HAPPENNING WHY ALL ARE PLAYING VILLIAN IN AR'S LOVE STORY😔 BUT AS YOU SAID THERE WILL BE LOTS OF AR SCEANS SO I THING I IT'S OK. STILL DON'T FORGET DI WE ARE HOPING FOR THE SPECIAL PART AS SOON AS POSSIBLE.😳😉😳

PLZ COMPLETE IT SOON..................

TAKE CARE AND LOTS OF LOVE❤️

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461075

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Posted: 14 years ago

#398

I just wonder why you do not break this into distinct chapters?

I do not know your story or it's characters, but surely something well written should make for an interesting read irrespective of where a reader 'samples'! Your prose is too dense .. with dialog .. and anthropocentric .. if you haven't already, you should think of adding descriptions of nature etc to lighten the mood. I got started on my fictional rendering of 12/24 Karol Bagh - after despairing that the production team would put a decent show back on an even keel - and the first thing I thought to do was a trip. You might use this as inspiration:

https://www.india-forums.com/forum_posts.asp?TID=1405584

I wasn't particularly moved by your rendition of 'physical intimacy' .. plus given what I have read on this forum along these lines, describing the moving of a man's hands towards a woman's breasts as 'forbidden territory' is laughable!! You CAN be MUCH more bold! Don't hold back! It adds authenticity! I too shied away from graphic descriptions until I saw the 'hot' albeit trite 'writings' here on the forum! There's no stopping me now! How graphic did I get? You tell me:

https://www.indiaforums.com/forum/fan-fictions/1529956/12-24-green-park-in-fairy-land

Plus .. people are horribly confused about the difference between 'loose' and 'lose' .. one 'loses' people or things not 'looses' them! One loosens things like - pajama strings! I also wish people would lighten up on these interminable banners!! We want to get to the substance of the author's offering, not have to wade through saccharine sweet slush!! One can express one's appreciation without the extra baggage! 😕

I'm always curious - have you taken classes in creative writing? I find people to be self-anointed raconteurs at the drop of a hat! But at least, you attempted to use a narrative form rather than the banal 'dialog' in 'Fan Fiction' where my eyes have glazed over much too much!

Edited by SValeCalGal - 14 years ago