FF*Despair*(maaneet)pt20at pg 133(17 nov) - Page 10

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Posted: 14 years ago
#91
Hi naddiya😊

First of all sorry for commenting so late!
Was a little busy since 2 days....
But I did read the intro😊
And just now read part 1😊

It seems really interesting!
Hate Brij😡

Geet-she has so much pain inside her😭
Continue soon...

Add me to the PM list for this FF too😊
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Posted: 14 years ago
#92
hey dear nice promo... do continue soon
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Posted: 14 years ago
#93
really liked it... but it kinda lacks some emotions... not so touching like your other ffs!
but do continue!
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Posted: 14 years ago
#94
Part2

Dadima : as you wish beta.

Maan: i will leave today it will take a day to reach there
Dadima: beta send telegram he will send her.
Maan: dadi i go for camping it is not at all big deal for me...
Dadima : as you wish beta.
Maan: theek ha hum kal subha nikla ga.
Dadima:theek ha..

at Geet place:
Geet: beeji where papa send you?
Beeji: beta i was gone to pray
Geet: beeji ..jhoot
Beeji : nai chand... kissed her forehead
Geet: beeji why papa is again & again asking about postman
Beeji: beta koi important letter aana ha un ka
Geet: beeji tell me truth why you both are so frighten?
Beeji: kuch nai beta..chalo jao aaj tum khana pako
Mr H: beeji come in my room
Geet: go phir dono raaz kai baat kara
Beeji smiled

Mr H: beeji koi telegarm aaya

Beeji : nai
Mr H: may be she is not at home
Beeji: sabar kara sub theek hoga
Mr H: kaisa....
Beeji: woh ha... pointed up
Mr H: han woh tou ha.... acha yeh box aap rakh la
Beeji: yeh kya ha
Mr H : kuch jewelery....
Beeji: give it to Geet
Mr H: nahi abhi nai
Beeji:if they didn't reply then
Mr H: take her to your village
Beeji: how she will stay there?
Mr H:it is better she stay then to marry that brij...
door bell rang:
Beeji:may be the telegram let me check. she open
Brij servant came with few gifts
Beeji: what is this?
servant: for bhabi jee.. kept in their seating place

beeji: please take it back

Servant: we can't take it back
Beeji: ok i will throw it...
servant : do what every you want to do?
Geet: what is this came out ?
Beeji: kuch nai you go in
geet: what are you both hiding from me?
Beeji: beta
Mr H: let me tell her
Geet: kya papa
Mr H: yesterday brij mom came with his proposal
Geet: what?
Mr H: they said we pay them or ....
Beeji: bas jee kyun parashan kar raha ha aap
Geet: beeji i am not a kid i should know everything

MrH: beta you pack your bags

Geet: why?
Mr H: you are going with Beeji
Geet:where?
Mr H: to her village
Geet: why papa?
Mr H: because i will not let you get married to Brij in my life..
Geet: Papa i cannot leave you if he is in my faith i will get married to him......
Mr H: walk in...
Beeji: he is not
GeeT: beeji how he is not ?
Beeji: bas beta
Geet: please beeji dont live in fantasy like you use to tell us stories in our child hood ..a prince charming will come to rescue you .
beeji : Geet he will come
Geet: beeji tell me why papa had attack?
Beeji: geet bas...

Geet: tell papa i am ready to get married to him he should not worry ...

Beeji: beta
Geet: beeji like this he will forgive all his dues
Beeji: but beta
Geet: aik na aik din to karni ha .... phir paused ran to her room.... closed the door behind her
Beeji: Geet
Mr H: bahot bari hogai ha
Beeji: aisa nahi hoga kabhi nai... brij kai aik biwi pehle bhi maar chuki ha ..

Geet open her diary
lonely in the desert of sorrow
waiting for you to come & take me.... pen down few lines
picked her sketch pencil draw eyes

murmur
" these eyes always follow me ...
you never let me sleep....
why you force me to see dreams?"
ok don't ..closed her sketch pad wrap her arms around her knees
murmur chupka se koi aaga... mama why you left me like that... you always you to say, mera kismat bahot achi ha?
Beeji: Geet please open door
Geet: beeji please can i stay alone for some time
Beeji: you papa is calling you.
Geet: jee aati hoon. splash water at her face... "Geet will not cry ? she is brave...."Looked at herself walk to Mr H room
MR H: beta come here
Geet: jee
MR H: beta i don't want you to get married to Brij
Geet: papa dekha if i will get married to him you can live peace fully in this home .
MR H: i can live on road but i will not
Geet: hold her hand.. papa i want you to go & have a by pass , if i will marry him , we will have money for your operation
MR H: for my operation i can't ruin your life
Geet: my sweet papa... my life will not be ruin , you will be fine after operation & i will be .... her throat choke...she ran out of room bang with Brij
Brij: oh jee aaram se..... looked at her
Geet: ran in
Brij : oh sharma gai
Mr H what are you doing here?

Brij: oh papa jee i came her to remind you

Mr H: what?
Brij: about our marriage.. twisted his mustached
Mr H: kal tak ka time ha mera paas..if i pay you all the money will you leave my daughter.
Brij: oh papa jee How you will pay ? why you are so stubborn? karlo shadi ..
Mr H: shadi nai engagement if i am not able to pay you....
Brij ok jee i will come day after tomorrow with band baja.....
Mr H: ok but not before that.
Brij: brij ka promise jee
Mr H: if i pay you will leave my daughter
Brij : ha jee.. but you can't pay....
Mr H: ok you sign here...
Brij : lelo sign you can't pay , as you are short of money for last 2 years i know that..
Mr H: now you may go..
Brij: i will go but , don't trick me..
Mr H : i will not i am not like you , who had increased zero in account
Brij: smiled

In Delhi

Dadima: where are you going?

Maan: i am going today
Dadima: why?
Maan: i have a meeting day after tomorrow ...
Dadima: ok wait
Maan: jee
Dadima: give this to Haunda...
Maan: what is this?
Dadima: once his wife gave me some money to keep , he might be needing it for operation, and give my letter to him...
Maan: dadima arrange guest room next to mine ....please buy some dolls toys as she is kid must not feel home sick here...
Dadima : sure beta...
Maan: can i leave now?
Dadima: yes sure....

to be cont... hope you guys like it.... i will try to put emotional in it dear... it is just a started ....
please add me as buddy if you want me to pm you.
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Posted: 14 years ago
#95
Haha I cant wait to read when Maan gets shocked to see a grown up girl Geet ;-)
Thanks for the PM and update soon
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Posted: 14 years ago
#96
😉

Originally posted by: pushpi

Haha I cant wait to read when Maan gets shocked to see a grown up girl Geet ;-)

Thanks for the PM and update soon

he is asking to buy dolls 😆
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Posted: 14 years ago
#97
can't wait to see his reaction when he finds out geet is not 12-13 year old child!!! Love this so much!! Thanks nadi!!!
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Posted: 14 years ago
#98
superb!!!


cant wait to see his reactioN!!!


update soON!!!
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Posted: 14 years ago
#99
aww poor Geet.. hope Maan gets to her fast.. great update

con't soon!
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Posted: 14 years ago
hey that was just so good...really awesome.....
so loved it...great update....i am so loving it all
do keep writing

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