Hey, I am impressed that you can write so much and so well! I have problems in drafting an office memo, lol!
But can I please be honest? Not to take away anything from the part, but honestly I think this miscommunication between Armaan and Ridhima stretching over parts is dragging.. I mean I can understand that Armaan didn't hear Sapna's end of the convo but still.. please dont take offense cos I think you write extremely well but my reaction this time was "why doesn't the story move forward?"
And for woman who has just realised her love for a man, who is desperate to confess and hear a confession, its strange that she is very happy to get involved in Rohan's life at the cost of alienating the one person she wants to get close to? No matter how selfless you might be, its strange that she doesn't realise that she is neglecting Armaan, and even when she does, she is willing to let things be till she has the time after she has finished what she is currently focussed on.. taking Armaan for granted or being self absorbed/ focussed like before?
Having said that, the part made entertaining reading esp the AR reactions over lunch! Waiting for the next part, do update soon..
And my apologies once again if I offended you, that was not the intent...it was just honest feedback from a regular although often silent reader...
Edited by DMGFan-2b-not2b - 14 years ago
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