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Paramjeet Singh Sachdeva

@hunder

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+ 3

Posted: 15 years ago

#21

Originally posted by: kashishk
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jaldi comment karo sis and answer to ur ques is ki aaj kal IF par nahi aa raha but jab bhi par kar thak jata tha to kuch likh leta tha, jab sani ko dikhaya to usey acha laga aur FF post karne ke liye kaha usne is lia post kar diya😆😆😆😆

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@Mrs.Hulk

Stunner

Posted: 15 years ago

#22

Originally posted by: hunder

thanks sis for liking the part and i hope u keep on liking my FF like this😆😆😆

well abhi shareef lag raha hai na, aage aage dekho hota hai kya😆

well sis ab thori technical baatein bhi to dalni thi na islia honeymoon period😆

oye CS acha laga mere to bhag khul gaye rondu mal😆😆😆

sis tum purple mein likhna kab chorogi

😆Ji bilkul......no seriously it was really good....😃
usika to intejaar hai😉😆😆
oh...okay......😆
aree usse to kholna hi tha ek na ek din...😉😆
oye don't call me that😡😆😆
jada maat chero😈.....phirse aapke post main perple se likhna band kar dunga😉😆😆😆
Phir PLZZ maat kehna😛😆😆😆

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Saniya

@Sani_Rani

Sparkler

+ 5

Posted: 15 years ago

#23

Originally posted by: hunder

jaldi comment karo sis and answer to ur ques is ki aaj kal IF par nahi aa raha but jab bhi par kar thak jata tha to kuch likh leta tha, jab sani ko dikhaya to usey acha laga aur FF post karne ke liye kaha usne is lia post kar diya😆😆😆😆

bhai correction. sani banged her head on the wall, she banged ur head on the wall too. bhik maangi, EB kiya and dhamkis bhi di, TAB JAA KAR KAMINE NE POST KIYA😡😆😆😆

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Paramjeet Singh Sachdeva

@hunder

Trailblazer

+ 3

Posted: 15 years ago

#24

Originally posted by: Sani_Rani
bhalayi ka to zamana hi nahi raha😆
bhai i simply loved it. no words are coming out of my mind. bhai i love. aapne muje bhi rakha. eekkss i loved the character sketch and armaan's character is ditto urs and i guess u'll make riddhima like neha bhabhi a bit if i am not wrong.
kk now technical baate

always check ur words before posting it to see if there r any typos or not.

i really liked the way you added humour in father- son convo.

it has a good flow and pace so readers won't get bored of writer going at a tortoise's speed.

i loved that proposing wala dialogue😆 man neha bhabhi will love it😆

sirf ek cheez critic karna chahungi if u don't mind. just explain the character's feature and their actions in a bit more depth, so that readers can actually imagine it. u know wat i mean?

right now the ff is giving an overall view but readers love to go into the ff and actually keep them in character's shoes and feel them. and try to add a but more adjectives and adverb to show that depth baaki ff ekdum AWESOME hai. hayeee am ur first reader and fan bhai. BHAI WHY THE HELL DID U START AN FF NOW?😡 agar itna acha likhte ho, then pehle kyo start nahi kiya

wah wah copy paste kar diya comment😆😆😆😆😆

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Saniya

@Sani_Rani

Sparkler

+ 5

Posted: 15 years ago

#25

Originally posted by: hunder

wah wah copy paste kar diya comment😆😆😆😆😆

arey ab hum technology ka use nahi karenge ko kaun dinosours karenge😆😆😆

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Paramjeet Singh Sachdeva

@hunder

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Posted: 15 years ago

#26

Originally posted by: Sani_Rani
bhalayi ka to zamana hi nahi raha. ekto comment karo and upar se writer ke nakhre jhelo😆😆😆

sis mein writer nahi hoon, mein to bas jo dill mein aata hai bolta hoon ya likhta hoon😆😆😆😆...............oye ab chatting band karo yaar mujhe jana hai ab raat ko aayunga😃

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Saniya

@Sani_Rani

Sparkler

+ 5

Posted: 15 years ago

#27

waise bhai i love ur title.😆

zaroor kisi mahan aatma ne suggest kiya hoga nahi🤣

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Sweet_Ashum

@Sweet_Ashum

Dazzler

+ 4

Posted: 15 years ago

#28

Wow bhai!
Something totally diff
n ye kya?
mera naam kahan hai PM list mein?
N hmm actual trainees ke saath real ACC waale trainees ke baare mein padhkar maza aa jayega! 😆

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