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Jassi

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Posted: 15 years ago

#61

Originally posted by: sonam961986
quite interesting ... add me to ur list ....

Thank You!! I'll add you!

-Jassi

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Jassi

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Posted: 15 years ago

#62

Hi guys! i was overwhelmed with the great response! I'm so happy u guys liked it! Here's the first part!

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*BEEP BEEP BEEP*

A girl's alarm is beeping, she groans and turns it off. She slowly gets up stretching, and her face is shown.

--PAUSE--

She is Nupur, Nupur Shergill, 20. Pretty, smart, short - tempered,, yet sweet and caring. Just a few days ago, she decided that she wants to complete her MBA in India. The main reason is because her best friend lives there. He's none other than Samrat, Samrat Sehgal. When, they were small they used to be neighbours in Punjab. They studied together until Grade 12. Samrat suggested she should come to Mumbai's Excel College, where he currently studies. Today is her first day in Excel.

--PLAY--

"Uuggh! Isse bhi abhi bhajna tha!" she says in frusturation. Just then she remembers it's her first day in Excel.

"Oh shit! Thank you alarm, mujhe uthane ke liye warna pehle din hi late ho jaati." she says and hurries to the washroom.

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A guy is shown laying in his bed, with pillows covering his ears. His mom was doing morning puja. She finally finishes, and the guy uncovers his ears.

"Utho Mayu!"

--PAUSE--

He is Mayank, Mayank Singh, 22. The heartthrob of Excel, also the Captain of the Soccer Team. He is Punjabi, and was born in Punjab but now lives in Mumbai. He is flirty, cute, hot and at the same time is really sweet, and is a really nice person, can be a little aggressive, and arrogant sometimes. Today is a Soccer match between Excel and Eagles.

--PLAY--

"Utho Mayu!" calls out his mom, Shilpa Singh.

" What Mayu, mom!" he says irritably.

"It's Mayank, Mayank Singh!"

"Chup karo, naam maine hi rakha tha!" she replies back to him.

"Aur yeh kya, abhi tak uthe nahin? Is saal agar pass na hua toh dekhna, pichle do saal se fail ho raha hain, sharam nahin aati tumhe!? Aur haan, agar iss saal pass na hua toh main principal se keh kar tumhe soccer team se bahar nikal doon gi, samjhe!" she says in her motherly tone.

"Arre yaad aya! Aaj toh soccer match hain, shit!" saying this he got up in a second and rushed to the washroom.

His mom smiled and went to the kitchen.

...............

A guy is shown sitting in a car, driving to college excited. He reaches Excel and takes off his shades.

--PAUSE--

Samrat, Samrat Sehgal, 21. Very sweet, cute, and loving. He's very excited. His best friend, Nupur has come from England and is joining his college. He is very possessive about Nupur. The other reason he's excited is because Excel has a Soccer Match today, and he's the vice-captain.

--PLAY--

"Aaj finally main Nupur se miloonga, itne dino baad" he smiles to himself and gets out og his car

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Everyone please, please check my replies to your comments below

and please do comment on Chapter 1 (intro)!!

Also, check if I put the correct username, or name in the Updated PM List.

Edited by xxJaSsIxx - 15 years ago

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Jassi

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Posted: 15 years ago

#63

Updated PM List

PehliNazar - Sanam

rkmnsg - Lina

sharma.nat

KomalLuvsYa - Komal

Shafoo - Shafia

A-N-S-H-I-K-A - Anshika

hgrhr

-Pooji-

Luv.MayUrArTi

pRaTiBhA.1990 - Praty

fariaa70

pari.theprincess

arunabehere - Aruna

sonam961986 - Sonam

wind453

kiran_artifan - Kiran

annie07 - Annie

sariska_mjht - Sariska

maloo19 - Marium

amritavasireddy

mayur.forever - Shruti

-Khushboo- - Khushboo

achoose

Rozain

mina_18secret - Mina

fanofmjht

-afsha- - Afsha

Favouriteofall

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Jassi

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Posted: 15 years ago

#64

Originally posted by: PheliNazar
hey jassi
as i said before i'm a fan of ur wrting so add me in
would love to read it! :) do pm me
Sanam

Thank you Sanam di, for encouraging me so much!

I'm really happy you liked my work!

- Jassi

Originally posted by: rkmnsg
hey Jassi would love to read this new FF!
do cont soon n

do add me in ur pm list na 🤗

-Lina-

Thanks so much for commenting Lina di

I'm really happy you want to read my FF

I really thought nobody would like it!

- Jassi

Originally posted by: sharma.nat
Loved the intro cont. soon
Thank you so much!
I'm happy you liked it!

-Jassi

Originally posted by: Shafoo
really nice CS jassi plzz contuied soon
Thank You!!!
will cont soon!
-Jassi

Originally posted by: rkmnsg
hey Jassi the Character Stetch is just amazinGG!!!
so Nupur going to Excel collage

cant wait for part !

n wonder how they will meet

do continue ASAP na!!!

will be waiting !!

Love Lina

Thanks so much!!

I'm soo happy you liked it

I'll cont soon!

BTW: I love both your siggies so much!!

-Jassi

Originally posted by: KomalLuvsYa
hey amazing cont n CS great, do cont soon n do add me in ur pm list

Thank you!!

I'm happy you liked it will cont soon!

-Jassi

Originally posted by: PheliNazar
hey awsum CS :)
looking frwd to the updt
-sanam-

Thank you so much!!

i'll cont soon

-Jassi

Originally posted by: hgrhr
i'd love to read it...
do add me to the PM list as well..!

Thank You!!

I'm happy u look forward to reading it!

-Jassi

Originally posted by: -Pooji-
great update....
thankz for pm...

Thank You!!

and no problem

:-)

-Jassi

Originally posted by: Luv.MayUrArTi
Hey Jassi!!!
Nice one!
Do pm me 👏

Thank you!!

I'll surely PM you!

-Jassi

Originally posted by: fariaa70
Nice CS
Add me to ur PM list

Thank you!

I surely will

-Jassi

Originally posted by: pari.theprinces
plz add me to yur pm list....... its cool... update asap...

Thank you so much!!

I surely will add you

-Jassi

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Originally posted by: arunabehere
hey Jaai
Looks nice

please add me too

Thank you, I'll add you!!

-Jassi

Originally posted by: wind453

nice

add me to ur pm list

Thank You!!

:-)

-Jassi

Originally posted by: kiran_artifan
plz do pm me ...would luv to read it

Thanks, I'll surely PM you!!

-Jassi

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Originally posted by: annie07
sounds interesting..............add me to pm list

I'll surely add you!!

-Jassi

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Originally posted by: sariska_mjht
Hey jassi do cont do pm me

I'll update soon!

-Jassi

Originally posted by: maloo19
nice concept will love to read more
plz add me to pm list n thanks a ton for pm

luv Marium

Thank You so much!!

I'm happy u liked the concept

I hope I reach your expectations!

-Jassi

Originally posted by: amritavasireddy
hay the concept is nic plz cont soon
n plz pm me ur new updts

Thank You, I'm happy you liked it!!

I'll continue ASAP

-Jassi

😃

Originally posted by: mayur.forever
great concept...wud seriously luv to read more..add me to ur pm list...😛
-sruthi

Thank you so much for commenting!!

-Jassi

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Originally posted by: achoose
awesome cs dear.....waiting to read more.........

Thank You!!

Will update real soon!

-Jassi

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Originally posted by: Rozain

Hello

Sweety as always you rocked with such a splended and shinny updates and share with us your such a fabolous and gorgeous creativity work.

Thank you very very much for your extremely encouraging comment!!

I really appreciate it!

-Jassi

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Originally posted by: fanofmjht
awesome cs
loved it
do continue soon
and plz add me to pm list

Thank You!!

Will definitely cont soon!

-Jassi

Originally posted by: -afsha-
Nice CS
Im in ur pm list

Update soon

Thank You!!

:-)

-Jassi

PS: I love your Atif Aslam Siggie!

Originally posted by: A-N-S-H-I-K-A
hey hey hey!!!!!
i luvd the CS!!!!!
do cont asap....! :) :)
plssss do PM me!!!!

Hey!!

Thank you soo much for commenting i'll definitely updatye soon!!

-Jassi

Originally posted by: pRaTiBhA.1990
hey sweety..
interesting CS

pm me 2

lov praty

Thank you sooo much praty!

I'm happy u liked it!

-Jassi

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Originally posted by: -Khushboo-
Hii Jassi Nice ...

Congrats For Ur FF..

U Will Rock..

Plzz Add Me To Ur PM List.. 😊

-Khushboo-

Thank you so much for your highly encouraging comment!!

I will definitely try to reach ur expectations!!

-Jassi

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Originally posted by: mina_18secret
Hi dear..

Nice concept!

Add me to ur PM List!

Continue soon!

Love

Mina

Thank you very very much for commenting

:-)

-Jassi

Originally posted by: Favouriteofall
hey jassi!
nice concept

would love to read it

plz add me to ur pm list

Thank you!!

Will surely add you to my PM List!!

-Jassi

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Originally posted by: sonam961986
quite interesting ... add me to ur list ....

Thank You!! I'll add you!

-Jassi

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aswathy

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Posted: 15 years ago

#65

awesome ontroduction of the trio dear..cant wait to read more...amazing start....pls do continue soon..........

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shafia Akhtar

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Posted: 15 years ago

#66

tht was soo nice chapter 1 jassi heyy my name is shafia

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Dilbole_ShiOmRu

@Dilbole_ShiOmRu

Stunner

Posted: 15 years ago

#67

Loved the part very much cont. soon

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439538

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Posted: 15 years ago

#68

hey jassi

veryy nice itroo hmm interesting cont soon :)

Sanam

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bhargavi

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Posted: 15 years ago

#69

interesting start
plz pm me when you updt

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Jiya

@Jiyyaa

Sparkler

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Posted: 15 years ago

#70

Hey Jassi, Im Sonia Lovely part!!!!
LUV IT!!!
🤗 👏
Mayu Failing 😆 something really different but really really really interesting!
Thanks for pming
Congraz on first part update
Hope u'll update 2part soon

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