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Posted: 15 years ago

#61

Part 1

lol Nupur waz dreaming

n she got waked up by Dia

just loved when she waz screaming at her

awsome part

n haan Mayu/Arjun in black😍

really really cute

n Mayu hates girls

wow

just like our dear Mayank

and Arjun he is the opposite

sachi mein

awsome part

just love it very much

Adi plezzz do continue soon na

I reallly really want to read the next part

-Lina-

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adi_gupta

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Posted: 15 years ago

#62

Originally posted by: MjhtFan_Mahima
awesome promo........

can't wait........

best of luck for your exams

thx mahima

thx for ur wish

i will update soon

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adi_gupta

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Posted: 15 years ago

#63

Originally posted by: preethis
very nice promo dear.......

thx preet
thx for your comment

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adi_gupta

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Posted: 15 years ago

#64

Originally posted by: fariaa70
hey adi,
wow awesome promo yaar.
it was damn interesting .
sorry dear for not commenting on ur first part becoz of my exam
but my exam were over and now i m free 4 some days.
so now i m going to read ur first .
i'll back soon with my comment.
and u sweetheart- u must do ur best in ur exam
i want to c u on top position.
all the best
remember my ALLAH alwz with u.
so dont worry and do ur best.
take care

farii your word alwys give me the strength to work hard
ab agar i will say thx its is not right because their is no sorry or thanks in friendship
i will do my best farii
i know fariii your exam is also very important for you

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adi_gupta

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Posted: 15 years ago

#65

Originally posted by: ..pebo..
heyyyyyyyyyyy adi

yeh kya promo hai

bechaara mayu😭

why does nups ask forgiveness frm arjun

why do mayur fight

i know all the answers are in the next part

okay fine ill wait till 14th march

parr usse jyada nahi

love u pebo

you have to read my next update for this
their is very interesting scequence
thx for your comment

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Faria Ferdousi

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Posted: 15 years ago

#66

Dear janiiiiiiiiiiii
ur exam was over.
So no excuse
now tell me when u gonna to update this ff?
today or tomorrow???????
plzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzz update soon

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adi_gupta

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Posted: 15 years ago

#67

Originally posted by: rkmnsg
Character stetch is awosme Adi
sachi mein

so Mayank and Nupur together na

and he has a temper prob

n Nupur has no family

and Arjun is Mayu's twin bro

the concept seems soo different

would love to read more

n the title is amaing!!!!

-Lina-

thx lina

even me too like the title

well you have to wait for this

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adi_gupta

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Posted: 15 years ago

#68

Originally posted by: rkmnsg
Part 1

lol Nupur waz dreaming

n she got waked up by Dia

just loved when she waz screaming at her

awsome part

n haan Mayu/Arjun in black😍

really really cute

n Mayu hates girls

wow

just like our dear Mayank

and Arjun he is the opposite

sachi mein

awsome part

just love it very much

Adi plezzz do continue soon na

I reallly really want to read the next part

-Lina-

thx lina for liking the update

i will update soon

yaar me too dreaming omg and blushing too

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storytellerm

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Posted: 15 years ago

#69

hi adi loved it pm me when u update

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adi_gupta

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Posted: 15 years ago

#70

kuch pal -2

nupur- nu, maynk &arjum mom-sh, maynk-ma,arjun-ar

(nupur by proffesion a teacher , and work in a school which is run by the same orphange where she brought up..now she has her own two room flat with dia......)

arjun and maynk both went inside the home and saw their mom preparing breakfast .
maynk and arjun both wink each other and run

maynk lift their mom in his strong arm .and gave a red rose to her mom.

sh- mayn ..........kkkkkkkkkkk

may- i won bhai ,i tell you na i will win.

ar- don't worry next time i will win.

sh- if both your compition is over than plz ,put me down .

may- no, way first you have to kiss me .

sh- maynk you are not kid any more .this will not suit your personality ,that a old woman kiss you.

maynk- well for your kind information ,mom ye jo handsome ,hot young man aap ke samne hein ye bhi to is beautiful i mean world ke beautiful lady ke karan hein ,so give me my kiss.

ar- me too.
sh- arre agar muje hi sarre compliment doge to usse kya doge jisse tum marrige karoge.

sh- i don't remember today any special day ........

ar-i tell you na she will forget.

ma-you are always right ,akhir bhai kis ke hoo.......

ar- maynk tum mom ko neech mat utarna mein abhi aa raha hoon.

arjun bring a beautiful cake written happy birthday mom.
sh- omg .i forget my birthday.

ar- mom you forget this but we don't ,beause this is the best day for us.
she kissed both maynk and arjun forhead .
and they both touch her feet.

sh- i am so happy .but where is my birthday gift????????

may- ab aap ko or kya chayia. two two handsome beto ke maa hoo ,aap ko or kya chayia.

sh- muje ab un dono handsome boys ke liye ek ek ladki chayia.

may- acha ab ye kya hota hein mene to aisa koi brand nahi suna .bhai aapne suna hein kya......

ar- he also denay.

sh- shut up both of you mein kissi shoes ke brand ke baat nahi ker rhai hoon .mein to ek asie ladki ke baat ker rahi hoon ,jo mere in anmol ratno ko sambal sake ....

may- to ma is ke liye ladki ke kya jarurat hein ,aap hum vo anmol ratan de dejiye hum bank ke locker mein deposit kerwa dete hein......

sh- shut up maynk , i know you understand everyhting but now you are doing this to irritate me.
and arjun you too.
ar- but mom i did not say any word.

sh- but you both will definately get punishment.......so this is your punishment......
you both are going for one weeks holiday. to mansuri
may- yahoo
and they both hug their mom.....

nu- omg dia ,today they will kill me..

dia- ab yahi kahdi ye repeat kerti rehgi ya phir yahaa se jaygi bhi........

nu- ja rahi hoon.....

after 15 minute ...we saw nups was doing push ups and saying sorry.......
vo- no way, di this time we will not forgive you. you always do this .......

nu- plz last time she was making a cute puppy face.

voi-ok .get up

now we can see the face they were small and cute children ...they all hug nups .
and nups was kissing them one by one.........

kirti- di ye kya aap ne kaha tha na ke picnic per laker jaogein .

anu- did di ...picnic picnic..to....fe.....eee., i...ce.....cccrr.eam/
nupur- picked anu in her arms and kissed her cheeks,oh mera sona jarur nupur di kal subha sab ko picnic per laker jaygi or icecream or choclate bhi dilaygi....

menu , nisha ,choclate...............

nu-acha now you both go to your classes and study......

and all children run to their classes
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mr. tam - nupur tum bacho se itna pyar karti hoon .mein socti hoon jab tumhara khud ka baby hoga to vo abhut lucky hoga.

nu- was blushing ,she turned....

mr tam- acha to nupur tum picnic ke liye tomorrow early morning mein chali jana .

nu- ok mam-acha mam meri class ka time ho gaya hein .

NEXT DAY
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nup-was agin sleeping ..............

dia -oh aaj phir nups ko water doze dene padegi ,she was again pick the bucket and fill bucket with water and was ready to throw it on nupur ...suddenly someone just ........

splash splash........................

dia was totally drenched ............... dia screamed no............n..................ooooooooooooo

nupur was laughing like a mad ...... ......she ws just lying on floor and laughing her hand was on her stomch

dia was fuming with anger..........

dia-nup ye kya tha......

nup-kya tuje pata nahi laga kye ye kya tha.mene to soch tuje daily bath me abhut problem hoti hogi ...kyo na tuje aaj yahi nahla doon....

dia- nupur ,she grab the bucket and drench nups with water.

dia- ab to tu bhi naha li........

nupur- abhi anhi now both were playing with water......
suddenly omg dia look at the clock we are getting late .......picnic and now they both are running to arrange the mess which they created .

all set for picninc .

ms. tam- nups ,benji and mr shyam will accompany you..and bachoo log koi bhi nups mam or dia mam ko tang nahi karga.
chil- yes mam .

nu- dia tu to busy ho jaygi benji ke saath........

dai- nups she glared.

nup- ok my mouth is sealed.........

here maynk and arjun both driving for mansuri.

suddenly car halted .

may- what happen ?

ar- tune fuel check kiya tha kiya ,drive se pehle.

ma- no.,but fuel is full.i think enigne garam ho gaya hein.

ar- give em water bottle.

ma- bahi agar aap mujse beer cane mang rahey ho then i will give you ,i don't have any water bottle.

ar- what maynk .ok wait i will bring water from somewhere.and also some fruits too .

ma- acha you go i will wait for you.

both nupus picnic bus or arjun car stop at same place........ (benji and dia were doing their lovley talks )and mr.sharma also playing with children ,and some children playing with nupur.

anu ,kirti,mini all were playing football.suddenly nikhil kick the ball hard and the boll hit maynk on his shoulder.

ni- yaar ball to outside chali gayi .kaun layga

all denay.

anu- you kick the ball now you have to bring it back.

ni- plz anu to meri dost hein na ,tu mera itna sa kam nahi ker sakti ja plz ball la na.plz plz.

an- acha ja rahi hoon per ,tuje muje ek toffe dene .

ni-acha i will give you one tofee.

maynk was looking here and there to know whose ball is this.

anu saw the ball she apporach maynk

anu- uncle sorry ,this is my ball.plz return this.

ma- tumhari ball hein ,dekh ker nahi kick ker sakti ,agar muje chot lag jati to.

anu- making a cute face,uncle aap to itne strong ho aap ko chot kassie lag sakti hein..aap ki body to bilkul salmaan khan ke tarah hein or aap ke face kitna cute hein ,unlce itne stron boy ko kabhi chot lag sakti hein kya .ab plz uncle ball do na.

may- oh ,very samrt whats your name...

anu- my name is anu.

may- very sweet and my name is maynk.aap mere friend banoge.he gave her choclate

anu-wow choclate,but i don't know you ,and our mam said never take anything from stranger.

ma- aare abhi to mein aap ko apna naam batya to phir hum stranger kassie hue ,hum to friend hue na to friends se to le sakti ho na.

anu- ok ,nice to meet you friends and she kissed maynk 's cheeks.

ni- anu where are you. ?

anu-my friends calling me ,bye friend.
she was running and suddenly tripped over a stone ,she screamed .anu's frock shoulder ripped .
nupur saw this maynk and nupur both approach .

nu- anu what happen ?
anu 's hand was bleeding ....she was crying....... and also the choclate
nu- she saw maynk and ,she thought that maynk do something with anu .
what did you do , you sick people .here anu was crying countinuly.
nupur was shotuing and due to her loud voice , alot of people gathered there . ,don't you have any shame such sick mind people.

here arjun was buying some chips for maynk and soemthing for.....

one person- what happen beti

nu- dekyia na uncle aaj kal ke ladki ,mana ke girl ko to pershaan kartien he they lakin ab to chotie chotie bache ko bhi,dekho isse choclate deker chi....muje to boltein hue bhi sharam aa rahi hein.....

maynk was holding him self for long time and now he was boiling in anger.

ma-kyo sharam ker rhai hoo ,itni time se muje bolne bhi diya hein kya ,jo tumhe bolne mein sharam aaygie.
jab se aayi ho bolti ja rahi ho,aare tum to lalu prasad se bhi tej or fast boltein ho ,yahaa kya ker rahi hoon bihar kyo nahi jati.

nu- dekho dekho ,muuh mein jauban hein ya scissor.ek to mistake or upper se.

dia and all children also gathered their.

people arre bhai dekh kya rhey ho aise logo ko to itna marna chayia ke kabhi koi aisa next time na karein,
they all grab maynk collar and start fighting, they hit maynk with hands on his stomach never giving any chance to speak

here anu want to say something but nupur don't give him any chance to speak.

dia- stop stop,arre aap sab kya ker rahey hein ,isse vasise bhi bahut insult ho chuki hein ,hume anu ko dekhna chayia.

nu- arre is to police ke pass le jana chayia.
dia & benji- nup plz calm down.lets leave .......

all people went from there and giving maynk angry glare.....

here maynk was fuming with anger........

ma- is ladki ko to mein chodga nahi ,kya samjati hein apne aap ko is ladki se apni insult ka badla to mein leker rahoga.

ar- - he saw maynk and shocked to see him,his clothes were ripped and also some puch marks tooo.
maynk what happened he asked wtih worried expresion.

ma- nothing bro ,i think yahaa ke log pagal hein or specially yaha ke girls.

ar- maynk tune kissi girl.................

ma- bahi aap kya muje aisa smajtin hein ke mein road per he start ho jaoge
abhi mera mood bahut kharab hein so plz lets go from here ,we have to reach ,their toooooo.

sorry for the delay ,
tell me about this part,your suggestion is welcomed
and also critiscm tooooooo

sorry for maynk's pitai well thoda se chalege na......

with love
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aditi

Edited by adi_gupta - 15 years ago