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Posted: 15 years ago

Originally posted by: KrazyRiya

wow....really nice update dear !!

though it was short n simple......but sweet too !!

loved the mayur moments.....they were so cute !!!

wow....Nupur loves paani puri...even i love it too !!

great part dear .....really loved it !!

plz update next update soon.....n that too a long one !!!

love ya.....

awwww thankzz a lot na Riya
Im soo happy that u liked it
n haan pani puri's amzaing!!!😆
will be continuing 🤗
-Lina-
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Posted: 15 years ago

Originally posted by: samira-08

DON'T SAY IT'S HORRIBLE IT WAS NICE DEAR THANK U 4 D PM N SORRY D LATE COMMENT. WHEREVER IN MAYUR IT CAN'T BE HORRIBLE👏 WELL DONE

awww thankzz a lot na
I am glad that u liked it
n dunn say sory na😳😳🤗
-Lina-
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Posted: 15 years ago

Originally posted by: rose.mn

oye lina finally i read both last parts..........great going yaar........
mayur and pani puri..........mere muh mainn bi paani aa raha hai...........hhehee
anyways nice parts........do cont soooon

awwww Rabi thankzzz soo much
Im glad that u liked it na
love ya sis🤗
-Lina-
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Posted: 15 years ago
Part 7
Mayank- Nupur tumhe nahi lagta humne jaana chahiye? Its already 11 o clock. Aur kal uttana bhi hai, woh bhi jaldi, warna phir se train miss ho jae gi.
Nupur- Umm theeke toh chale?
Mayank- *Smiles* ok!
They sit in the car, and Mayank starts driving.
Mayank- Woh sorry, mein toh kahi special le ke jaana chahate tha, par its too late-
Nupur- Mayank its ok na, kabhi baadmein chale ge.
Nupur just keeps looking out her window.
Many hours later they finally reach back, and the childrens going staright to bed, since they were tired. Mayur went to Mayank's room.
Mayank- Nupur tum yahan soo jao, Arti ke saath, mein kissi bhacche ke room mein soo jaoon ga.
Nupur- *Smiles* theeke.
He is about to go, when Nupur tells him to stop. He turns around.
Nupur- Mayank thanks.
Mayank- Kiss liye?
Nupur- Yeh sab tum-
Mayank- Nupur thanks nahi ok??!!
Nupur- acha baba goodnight.
Mayank- ase nahi
Nupur- Toh phir??
Mayank- Ek smile ke saath!
Nupur- *Smiles* ok, goodnight Mayu.
He smiles back and leaves.
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The next morning, Mayank wakes up and gets ready. After he comoes from taking a shower, he goes to his room, and before he could knock, the door opens. And he finds Nupur standing there, smiling, looking gorgeous as always.
She is weaing a dark purple glittery choridar, and lavender bangles, with high heels.
Mayank- Ummm
He lost in her beauty.
Mayank- Ummm Nupur ready?
Nupur- Of corse, abb chalo Goa appne best friend Benji ke saath.
They start laughing.
Mayank- Ok lets go.
Nupur holds Arti, and Mayank holding her suitcase, and they go.
This time they reach the train, and some minutes later it starts.
Mayank- Nupur tumne mujhe appne ghar ke barrein mein nahi bataya.
Nupur- Well mere liye woh ek prison ki jaisa hai. Mujhe appne room se bohat darr laagta tha, jab mein choti thi........
She continues talking, he didn't even realized when time passes, and they finally reach Goa.
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They are standing in front of her house. It is huge and very beautiful, more like a gigantic banglow than a prison as Nupur described it.
There is a huge fountian spraying water, in the front. And many trees, bushes, and the grass is mown very well. Nupur looks at him.
Nupur- Umm andar chale?
He looks at her, and smiles.
Nupur- Mayank ek baat poochoon?
Mayank- Haan
Nupur- Tumhe kya yeh really karna hai? I mean ke agar tum nahi karna chahate toh it's perfectly fine.
Mayank- Nahi Nupur, it's ok.
Nupur- Oh thank you-
He looks at her with the "What did you say"look.
Nupur- Toh SRK ke kaha friends ko khabi nahi kehna, abb chale?
He smiles, and they go knock on the door, and it opens. It is Gunjan standing.
hey everyone, yeah this is the FF if where u see "Smiles" everywhere😆n I cant tell you how sorry I m, sachi mein, Im soo soo sorry for not continuing this FF for a long time. And haan this part is very boring too😭 I really want to know wat u think of it, I promise I will continue it soon, if you like it.
Do comment🤗
-Lina-
Edited by rkmnsg - 15 years ago
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Posted: 15 years ago
res EDIT
hey Linz
I have soo many messages
LOL
But I will still write a long review
who said this was boring?
it was amazing!
But I hated one thing-
how short it was
so definately make the next one longer
please
mere liye
and the smiles thing
I like it,
makes the story more....
ummmmm...
I guess more visual?
I'm clueless right now
and I almost fell asleep in SS
it's so boring
LOL
Me getting off topic
and continue this sooner
I like-
no not like
I LOVE this ff
so more longer
and quicker
tikh hai?
TTYL Desi Girl 😉
Edited by dmgmjht4ever - 15 years ago
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Posted: 15 years ago
hey lina..nice part..
MayUr leave for her house..n he tells her not to say thanks..she keeps talking..n they reach the place..when they reach..gunjan opens the door..nice..waitin to see her reaction..
n yeah do make it longer!
thnx 4 d pm
update soon
-aish
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Posted: 15 years ago
gr8 update Linz! don't worry, short tha but sweet tha! MayUr r soooooooo cute!😳
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Posted: 15 years ago
Linu

I thought you forgot about this ff

ek tou itne din baad update kiya wo bhi itna short

I'm gonna kill you seriously...........

The update was really sweet but.....

shuru hote hi khatam....

next time I want a longer update samjhi..........

Luv
Nidzy~
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Posted: 15 years ago
lovely part
so finally they are in goa
interesting
do cont soon
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Posted: 15 years ago
nice update
thnx for pm n writing this ff

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