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maaneet_crazy

@maaneet_crazy

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Posted: 15 years ago

#101

hii kiran!!!!!

hate u stoppin at dat point.... 😡 😡

but nice part!!!!!

thnx a loads for revealin parts of armaan's past...... i sooo hate abhi for cumin at dat vry moment....... 😊 😊

nd yes nikki is nt pregnant afterall... 😕

upd soon.... (atleast drop in a promo...pls)

nova 😳

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Pooja

@kweetrockstar

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Posted: 15 years ago

#102

ok Kiran di

something compels me to write a bigger comment, n pray wht might it be, maybe u dont know,maybe u do,

OBVIOUSLY!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

its the cliff hanger, areh, u left at such a crucial pt

i just wanna read another one,

anyways

coming to this part,

Riddhima and her situation was so cut n funny, even Armaan cudnt resist her, cool,

the whole Nikki n Abhi scenario, and Armaan still feeling guilty abt his absence at Abhi's marriage, Riddhima worried, Armaan comforting, the Rohan Zaara scene, the end part, all was amazing

i simply loved it

do cont soon

thanks for the pm

Edited by kweetrockstar - 15 years ago

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Sunaina

@SunainaTM007

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Posted: 15 years ago

#103

edited my comment on page 14 :) :)

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Tahmina Aliya Begum

@-Aliya-

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Posted: 15 years ago

#104

Hey Kiran...finally u updated, been dyin to know wat happened but now u'v left us wiv another cliffhanger and dis ones at a much more crucial point.

The part was beautiful...so descriptive yet not too much and everything growing and developin slwoly - loved it!

plz pm me...il check if ur in my buddy list and so it wil be easier to pm me. tnx.

Tahmina😉

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Garima

@ScatteredCastle

Voyager

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Posted: 15 years ago

#105

Umm, Update my comment on page 13 :)

Keep continuing! :D

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Sookie

@-Sookie-

Voyager

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Posted: 15 years ago

#106

For mere mortals like me who have less than 16MB memory, have to refurbish every time you post a new chapter. Kind of cumulatively reading. So for that sake a recap please?
Add Index please. Really, I have to click every page to find out where a chapter is.

~~ Edit 1 ~~

Its a little confusing chapter. I think this is not the introduction but somewhere in the middle part of the story. So its hard to warp my mind around it and figure out what exactly is going on there. Or else I could and you can give me answers stating how wrong I am. Looks like the two of them are not together. Neat trick to tell readers that by giving them separate story lines. I wonder what happened. Loved Riddhima here. Paying for her own food on a blind date set up by a gay friend. :-)
Which city is this?

~~ Edit 2 ~~

You know what I love about the part where Riddhima narrates about her "lawyer". Its the smooth of letting audience know what sort of a character he is and his impression on Riddhima. Its not all handsome eyes and pretty face; its determination and confidence. I liked that a lot. This line - "Perhaps sometimes, you seek in people what you yourself possess, and when you see it somewhere, anywhere, you instantly recognize it, even if other people can not." was utterly well penned. Its true for almost everyone, is it not? That's why we like some people on the very first instant we meet and with some we take eons to get past the surname phase.
Ehh? Armaan is already married to another woman? Waaah!
Armaan and Abhi are bosom buddies :D Well, they do seem quite close and I don't know, but it seems like Abhi is the one who puts more effort in their relationship than Armaan. You know its just a passing thought and I might be wrong on that one but its something I noticed in the way Abhi reminisces.
Good part! Abhi steals the show. I like him the most till now (in all of two parts :D)

~~ Edit 3 ~~

When I was searching for the next part, AS YOU IGNORE MY PLEAS TO HAVE AN INDEX, I found a comment for part 1!!! Wooh...apparently I have already read it. :-)

Alright, this is exactly the reason why I don't read work in very slow progress FF. Because its damn intriguing and my insatiable curiosity will go bonkers trying to figure what the heck is going to happen. There are far more unanswered questions in this story than anything which can tie to reality. Something about Armaan-Damini relationship, many things about Abhi-Amraan relationship and Abhi-Nikki too!
Okay, I did not like the way Nikki just cut Riddhima off that way. :S Must be just me. Its almost as if she doesn't want Riddhima to talk about her problems. and is scared to see Riddhima not being the all controlling woman that she was always perceived as.
Wooh...Rohan? Embezzlement? Again knowing about Riddhima, the case and her precarious situation via Armaan. I like this style. Its much better than a dry third perspective narration. Its cobwebbed inside the story and its gently unfolds as a memory. Not bad kizza!

Cliffhanger! And that too filmy ishtyle! :D

~~ Edit 4 ~~

I did not know that you have a thing for complications. Or the fact that you can weave a story with way too many loose ends and start tying them up later. My tiny brain cannot comprehend that :D Rohaan (why the double A in the name? Numerological aspects for the success of this FF? :D) has his own personality and idiosyncrasies. Whoopie. More things to remember :-) I hope these are all the characters I need to know. :-)
I like these people. Because they are in my generation and not yours :D Okay, that was not nice, but really! I am so tired of reading teenage AR or early 20s AR. Now I get to read real adults AR stuff who have seen life and been through a lot. Okay, that sounded much better in my head. Anyway, there is something funky about Armaan's marriage to Damini, yes? He avoids, glides over and ends up tripping about the subject. But something is not right. Again, loved Abhi here :-)
Ehh? Rohaan (one with double A. Cannot get over it!) is not the one? How many brothers does she have? You just mention..."her brothers.."
All in all an interesting part and the story moved forward rapidly and looks like things will start cooking!

So, When is the next part?

Sookie

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ahenseven

@ahenseven

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Posted: 15 years ago

#107

Hi Kiran...am not saying di as per your request...anyway how old are u actually and what do you do??...I am very upset that you did not pm me when you started this new fic of yours...I just read all the parts and they were just amazing...soooo different from your other two ff's...pls try to update a little faster and pls do add an index...pls pm me with your next update...thanks...love neha
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pickytg

@pickytg

Dazzler

Posted: 15 years ago

#108

Update milega? It's simply a question.

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Sur_10

@Sur_10

Voyager

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Posted: 15 years ago

#109

res

i will come back :)

soon

*edited*

great ff, I must say...I wonder whats up with me these days as I end up reading only AR ffs! anyways the work u have done is simply fantastic!👏

The intro was longer than expected, but it was good. The story flows nicely and the characters have layers, which you are pulling off slowly (too slowly, update quickly please)...

Armaan is married? oh..I hope u r not planning some extra marital stuff here.Damini is one character who cant be really judged so soon. Armaan is clearly closed up and something is definitely wrong with him. The too perfect looking couple...

Abhi and Nikki are pure sweethearts. I was laughing at that airport scene and then when Nikki was jumping on the bed and when she had that nausea attack! the way you wrote the whole thing was entertaining.

Rohaan and Zaara also sound nice but I wonder whats up with him and Riddhimma though.

The parts are very neatly written

plz update soon

and add me 2 ur pm list

Sur

Edited by Sur_Singhania - 15 years ago