It Had To Be You (Part 11) AR ff pg 131 4/26/10

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ssh57

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Posted: 15 years ago

#601

Hi Bheegi,
In my earlier comment I forgot to mention one very important thing. I have also heard about this dangerous way of getting high, which seems to be getting popular with teenagers. Its very nice that you used your ff to make them of the dangers involved with it.👍🏼

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DIPIKA

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Posted: 15 years ago

#602

hey!!!

dear what a part man...

really loved it.....

scates was the best,,.,,,

loved them

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Nina

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Posted: 15 years ago

#603

Hey sweetyy, wooow awesome updateeee hun love yaaa 🤗

I just loooved it hun, it was a brilliant udpate ^^

WTH was he doinngg, has he LOST itt OMG i soo wanted to slap him at that moment for playing that stupid game with those stopid friend of him 😡

It could be EXTREMLY dangerous omg, but hun i loved the way you describe everything of it really, it was very well written and you have put all the emotions sooooooo brilliantly hun, woow hats of to youuuu Bheegi, you are AN awesome writter hun, love ya mwaaaaaahhhh😳

Thank GOD Riddz was theer and i love theway she was just caring and beeing worried for him i loved it 👏

He was first angry and then understood where the whole situation was going so he cryied 👏 i liked that part cause he was starting beeing himself again, and not A PSYCHO 😡

Lol i loved the small convo between him and riddz , lol the one where he got a verbal slap again, lol and he reallyyy deservs it, and the second one lol where he was just like flirting/teasing her i loved it, lol "are you just asking me for a DATE"😆😆😍 i wish lol 😍

And then the "date" lol was jsut AWESOME omg i can see that Shanky doesnt really like Armi 😕😭 but dont worry Armi Sasurji ko patalega 😆😉😳

OMG that small close scene between AR was superb the way he was caring here and everything, and then he SANG RIDE IT 😲😲 you wont belieev but i was just listenning to this song before reading your udpate 🤣 lol, it was superb i loved that part aswell, and the small discussion in the train was GREAT also 👏

just a little ques hun, you knwo always at the end of his thought he speaks back in present and somewhere he said something like if he would have listen then he wouldnt be there todaye 😕 what did he exactly meant theer , im scared lol, i really wish nothing wrong will happen hun 😃😳

Oups thora ziada lamba hogaya sooorrryy, lol😆😛

cant wait for the next part ^^

Love, Nina ^^

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Neeta

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Posted: 15 years ago

#604

Hi Bheegi :)

That was a much awaited part, and needless to say, I loved it :)

First of all, I want to thank you for mentioning the choking 'game', I think it's one issue that needs to be brought to public attention more often. Teenagers indulge in such dangerous activities unaware of their consequences, which ultimately results in permanent damage. You did a great job of depicting how harmful it can be through your story, kudos for that :)

The only thing which didn't seem to settle well with me was the lack of withdrawal symptoms in Armaan. Now I may be wrong here but from what I've researched, this game is pretty addictive and sudden halt to the practice does invoke some withdrawal symptoms. Armaan didn't seem to go through those (or maybe it was not supposed to be told) so I felt that this aspect could have been shown. Otherwise, the whole thing was brilliant.

I don't think I need to say anything about the AR part 😃 You always do that brilliantly. The whole part about them skating was simply beautiful. You're shaping up AR wonderfully here. I think you're giving them a strong base, unlike other FFs where they're 'just meant to be'. This one's much more real :) Great job!

Thanks for this fic bheegi =) Looking forward to the next part! ⭐️

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kshanikaa

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Posted: 15 years ago

#605

Hey Bheegi di 😃
It was a long update....????????? I didnt feel....may be i was too lost...😆

Do you really challenge yourself to be better and different every time....i mean every ff of yours is different.....May be You are too hard to be pleased by yourself!!! 😉 😆

I too feel that riddhima's character is yet to be revealed fully....we also dont know many things about her....Here armaan looks like an average normal guy who does mistakes even after listening a warning at the back of his head.....and riddhima is depicted as a quite mature girl....too big to be flattered by such uncool things.

I believe, getting someone great as your lover is such a big support that it encourages and motivates you at all the week moments....Armaan in an indirect way was being protected by all the harmful things through his unconfessed feelings towards the girl....😊....a feeling to become a good human beings arises automatically out of love...so where in previous times, parents were too afraid of such a thing called love for their kids...today the trend is definitely facing a change even in traditional families....

Again after reading these lines, i can say you are back to your bheegi mode even in dialogues now. 😃
if ice creams were relationships, I am sure the guy who eventually gets you one day will be one heck of a lucky guy as you would be faithful to him all your life. Thoughtful!!!
Why dont you open a school to train boys for speaking different lines to their lovers??? 😆

match making runs in our desi blood I think. 😆 YAAAAAA

"Hmm? Are you adopted?" well that was out of the blue.😛

Extremely managed update...well done!! 👏
Thanks for d pm. 😊

Edited by kshanikaa - 15 years ago

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Asma Khan

@crazy4KASH_AR

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Posted: 15 years ago

#606

gr8 ff di!

sorry to join so late.

I'm really enjoying reading it.

Armaan's point of view has made this ff really different from ur previous ones.

I just love Armaan's stupidity.

I wish he learns some new techniques to speak truth and get closer to Riddhima instead of irritating her.

plz update soooooooooooooooooooooooooon

u r really an outstanding writer.hats off to u!!

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krina

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Posted: 15 years ago

#607

THANK YOU SO MUCH!!! for the LONG LONG update.

OMG update was full of reality. Much difficult to explain it di that how wonderfully and precisely written. HATS OFF TO YOU!!!!!!!!!!!!

Armaan's stupidest act of going out to late night parties; yet his habits, daily routine, school friends very much true and so obvious for young teenager. You portrayed very well. At one point he was responsible too with drugs and knew very well of consequences. Nevertheless, he did make an impulsive decision or out of curiousness he hang out with wrong friends. Which was very unlike him?
His whole transition of teenager is said so well that it each sentence/every scene were happening right in front of me.

Even when Riddima followed, presence of his dad there was virtuous. He was definitely a very responsible parent. The best was when he gave Armaan the gun and told him to shoot himself right now. The way he told him "I'd rather have my son kill himself with one shot than die a slow death hanging himself everyday with his moronic friends!"
My heartbeat was rising with every bit of tension. It is the bitter truth of most teenager today.

As a writer you know very well how to surprise them and engage them into the read. After that fiasco I kept wondering about what wud be next and how will they be together?

Armaan's recovery and talk with riddima was definitely worth it.

Riddima being upset was more effective than anyone else. Her saying jerk to him was very hurtful. Yet she was her medicine. He realized that and he did changed himself.

on a happy note I admired their conversation on subway. I think this wud be the first time when they both came to know each other more personally.

I can say Shashank was very protective parent. lol. Rockefeller center trip was wonderful. I've been there so it was nice refreshing memories. It's beautiful and really amazing.

Jay Sean - good thought he sings for girls. lol...

Freshness- skating, Armaan holding Riddima, and singing for her as well. Good start for Ridzi and Armaan. It was romantic n loveable.
if it wasn't the curfew of 10.30, I bet AR would go on and on. LOL.
** Curfew - actually the deadline remainded me of curfew. when i go out with friends I m the first one to be home earlier than my other friends, so they always tease me what time your curfew is? LOL

Please Please update Soon I miss AR.

Thanks for mentioning of cutie childhood friends-cum-lovers stories of Rahul-Muskaan, Abhi-Nikki...

I better shut up now. otherwise your eyes will get tired of reading my LONG critics. LOL

Take Care

HAPPY HOLI TO YOU AND YOUR FAMILY. :)

Edited by krina_17 - 15 years ago

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@khahani

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Posted: 15 years ago

#608

Hi Di

I thoroughly enjoyed reading this part although I am a little late in commenting as usual. This part was embedded with laughter, sadness, a meaningful message to the young generation and had a hint of invisible romance! I may be wrong but Riddhima's one line about "NO YOU DON'T'IN FACT NO ONE DOES!" kind of gave me the impression she always had some sort of romantic feeling for our hero.

if I read between the lines she has indirectly confess her feelings as no one would never know that she felt something for him due the nature of their love / hate friendship/relationship. This is why I said invisible romance! She also had slip of tough when she asked him their ice-cream date.😳

This part has also addressed a very sensitive issue of drugs and other ecstasy related activity which majority parent and teenager living in the west have to face! I must say you handled it very well from both the children's perspective and the parents' perspective!

"Each time, I saw you, I was sure you were either ridiculing me or assessing me on a jerk-scale- I was sure I scored in the negatives in those days." ' now that they have confessed their feeling after 28 years I hope Riddhima gets see all of this and puts poor Armaan out of his miseries. I would love to see her reaction to his detailed monologue about their budding relationship!

Btw did I mention I loved they subway conversation ' it felt like this is what the real Armaan Riddhima are about: sometime arrogant, sometime argumentative, sometime annoying but overall adorable!

Armaan is obviously trying to redeem himself but knowing Armaan I wonder how long this will last.

Di seriously I feel like I'm writing an essay with all these quotations!

Finally thank you for the extra long part ' I am glad that all the pestering worked, I shall do it more often!😉

Love you loads

PS: I love the Jay Sean song!

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Sunaina

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Posted: 15 years ago

#609

*reserved :) :) hope to be back soon-ish ;) ;)

*edit1*

heyyy bheegs...!! read half the part...will get back with comments tomorrow for sure ;) ;)

*edit2*

and...i'm back bheegi !!! sorry for being this late... exams are on, so life's a bit busy and hectic now-a-days !!

that was a super cute, beautiful, amazing and wonderful and fabulous !!.. really really awesomely penned hun !! :) :)

11th grade...aaah, how well i can relate to these feelings... its definitely the most hectic school years what with the preparations for the boards next year and all :( :( all of armaan's feelings relating to school, studies, girlfriends, family and most importantly, riddhima were sooooooo beautifully written... loved it bheegs !! :D :D loved the way he got uncomfortable when some other guy talked to riddhima :) aww...😳

and his experience with Space Monkey !!...😲😲 how could he give into such things....??? its nothing but slow poison, which'll kill people slowing in years to come... how could he, of all people, fall for such stupid thoughts and things... and drugs... one of the most dangerous things in the world !! however hard life is, one should never think abt all these things !!

riddhima suspecting armaan and saving him from the worse... armaan's dad's anger was really beautifully justified, parents are hurt the most by such actions of their kids :( :(

armaan's remorse and guilt in the following days was penned really awesomely :D :D riddhima's verbal slaps at him making him feel more bad and sad...aww.. but then riddhima inviting him over for skating !! and armaan being really excited abt it... and their convo was really cute :) :) abhi and nikki...wow...that's cute !!.. abhi's possessiveness for nikki was really really cute !! :D

AR's convo in the train journey...armaan getting to many more things abt riddhima which he didnt know before :) :) and then AR ice skating !!! that was the most cutest part !! 😳😳 the way u described everything was sooooooo beautiful !! 😳 loved reading that part !! :D :D and the song was sooo apt there :) ;) and then their last convo was super-cute !!...riddhima leaving armaan confused...awww :) :) :)

that was a fabulous part bheegi !! :D loved readin it loads !!

thanks for the pm...

continue soooooon :D

Edited by SunainaTM007 - 15 years ago

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Ehsaas

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Posted: 15 years ago

#610

Reserved !
Will come back later
And I promise It's gonna be a looong comment this time 😃

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The Part was AWESOME !! {As I always say}
I was really glad, and wanted to pat Armaan's back when he "Drew a line for drugs" 👍🏼
And then when he tried the "Space Monkey" game ..... Wanted to give him one right away ! 👎🏼

I never knew this game was soo dangerous..... I have seen some students of my class do it... Thanks for informing it Di !
Now I know what to do with them...

And Riddhima following Armaan was just so Aww.. 😊
She really does care for him..

And I was really sacred when Armaan's Dad gave him the gun
I was like "what is he doing?"

😲

Psssssssssssst - Will come back to edit more afterwards...
Sorry.. Busy Schedule ! 😳 😳

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"what is he doing?" but then got emotional when he said that he would rather have his son killed in one go...Thought that Armaan would do it too.. as he was still under that stupid game...but Thank God Riddhima came to the rescue...

After the Space Monkey.. It was the Ice Skating that I loved the to the core...
Mwahhhzz for Jay Sean.... 😊 😳 and Armaan for singing that song in Riddhima's ears 😃
LOVED that scene to the core...

and then the Subway talk was just sooo cute and naughty...
Armaan asking "Out of the blue" questions to Ridzi to know more about her 😉

"You have a twin we don't know about?"
"You have been to jail?"
"Eeeww….so you would want to marry a guy like your dad?"
"You are gay?"

I was laughing all the way.....

I must say that every part of It Had To Be You is balanced with every emotion possible....
From Hatred, Love, Humor, to places we go "Awwww", "OMG!" , "Ewww",

Keep Writing, 👍🏼
and do post the next part soon...

Love,
Ehsaas 😈

Edited by GEhsaas - 15 years ago