Tumse Hi (DMG + Mayur FF) (18/9) Part 13 Pg 54 - Page 4

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Posted: 16 years ago
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srrry 4 late bt i was out o i was nt able 2read nd characer skech is great nd write mre

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Posted: 16 years ago
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Hey guys thanks for appreiciating
So here is the part 1
Do comment/criticise
And also tell me my mistakes as this is my first ff
Part 1

Ridhima wake up you are getting late

Mamma uth rahi hoon bas do min

But beta today is the last day of your internship get up

Hearing this she jumps of her bed

Mama apne mujhe pehle kyun nahin uthaya armaan mera kabse wait kar raha hoga?.

Sayin this she got off the bed and went for a bath

As Ridhima was getting ready she heard sound of the horn of the car

She without wasting a single second ran downstairs.

Nani: Are Ridhima kahan bhagi jaa rahi hai sambhal ke

Ridhima: Armaan bahar wait kar raha hai Bye Nani

Nani: Are par nashta to karti ja

Ridhima(while getting out):Sanjeevani mein kar loon gi

On the other side

Armaan: Kahan reh gayyee yeh basket kaha bhi tha ke mein 8 baje lene aaon ga per meri kahan

He stop in his tracks as he saw Ridhima coming out of the house

She was wearing a light pink anarkali suit with a light make-up on her face looking same as she always looks but to him she looked like an angel who has come to the earth just for him

Ridhima(after sitting in the car):Sorry Sorry actually ma ne late uthaya phir tayar hone mein kaafi der hogayi aur (she stopped when she found no response from his side)Armaan kya hua aise kya dekh rahe ho? (she asked

Armaan:(while looking at her)Dekh raha hoon ki koi itna khobsoorat kaise dekh sakta hai.

Ridhima blushed and said lowering her head Chalo Armaan

Armaan:Oye Hoye Basket tum kitna sharmati ho(saying this he started the car)

Ridhima:Armaan hum kahan jaa rahe hain ye road sanjeevani to nahin jata

Armaan:Basket tum thori der chup nahin beth sakti kya aur mujhe bhi pata hai key yeh road sanjeevani nahin jaata.

Ridhima: To phir hum kahan ja rahe hain?

Armaan: Just wait and watch

LETS SEE WHATS GOING ON IN GAREWAL MANSION

Oye Rahul uth gadhe dekh saare 8 ho gaye hain sanjeevani nahin jaana kya?

Rahul: Sone dena muskaan

Muskaan: Uthta hai ya laaon pani

Rahul: Kya hai tu te sakoon se sone bhi nahin deti

Muskaan: Abe khote sarhe 8 baj rahe raat ke 11 baje se soya hua teri neend poori nahin hui kya?

Rahul: tu poori raat sone kahan deti hai? Itni tangein chalati lagta hai k lagta hai k Olympic ki dor laga rahi hai

Muskaan: Dekh Rahul subah subah larna mat shoru hoja main keh rahi hoon chup chaap bathroom chala ja

Rahul: Acha baba jaa raha hoon aur jhagra kyum na karron akhir muhe apni soni jayye woti nal jhagra karna acha jo lagta hai (while coming close to her) aur waise bhi jhagron se pyar bhi to badta hai

Muskaan(blushing and pushing him towards the washroom): Acha chal baatein banana band kar aur jaa mein nashta banana jaa rahi hoon

Rahul: Tera sharman ik din meri le jaye ga

Muskaan: Chal ja na rahul der ho rahi hai

Rahul: Tu to aise keh rahi jaise tujhe mujhe bhagaane ki bahut jaldi hai

Muskaan(In a naughty tone): Wo kya hai na Sangeet ji ka phone aana hai

Rahul:kaun Sange(then remembering)Kaun wo Sangeet Paul Singh lottery waala ? Who kyun tujhe fone karega? Dekh Muskaan agar us ka yahan fone aaya to mein us ke tangein tor us ke haath mein de doon ga.

Muskaan(while laughing like a donkey): arre yaar Rahul mein tu mazaak kar rahi thi tu itna kyun barak raha hai? Chal ja ab

Rahul: Jar aha hoon lekin ainda aisa mazaak mer saath abhi mat karna

Muskaan: Acha nahin karoon gi ab ja

LETS MAKE OUR WAY TOWARDS JOSHI HOUSE

Atul(Standing at the bed side with a tray in his hand):Anjali utho dekho subah ke 9 baj rahe hain

Anjali(In her dreams):I Love You Atul

Atul: (after keeping the tray on the table)I Love you too now get up

Anjali(yawning):Good morning Atul

Atul: Morning Anjali ye lo tumhari coffee

Anjali(while taking the cup)thanks atul (in the meantime Arun starts crying)

Atul and Anjali make their way towards Arun's cot and atul pick him up

Atul: Kya hua baby why are you crying ??? Papa tumhe lori sunae??

Arun still crying

Anjali:lagta hai usse bhook lagi hai

Atul(giving Arun to Anjali):tum wait karo mein abhi uski bottle lata hoon

Anjali:Thanks Atul you are a sweet heart

Precap:

NikKi: Ye time hai kisi ke ghar aane ka??

Abhi: Ik to itni mushkilon se main pipe charh kar tumhare room mein aaya hoon aur tum mujhe appreciate karne ke bajae daant rahi ho?

Nikki: Haan ho rahi hoon gussa, Waise tum pipe se kyun aaye ho?

Abhi: Kyun Armaan bhi to Ridhima se pipeline ke zariye milne jaata hai

Nikki: Wo is liye kyun ki Ridhima apni family ke saath rehti hai akele nahin

Abhi: To tum kyon akeli rehti ho?

Nikki: To phir kahan jaoon?

Abhi: Uska bhi solution hai.

Nikki: Kya????

Abhi(On his knees): Nikki will you marry me?

Take Care
Zoya
Edited by Zoya_01 - 16 years ago
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Posted: 16 years ago
#33
hey rocking prt yaar arridz wowwht surprise he goi to give her hm vry curious to know cnt wait cont soooooooon nd atul angie aw cho cute nd rahul muski fighting nothing new nd abhi proposd her wohooooooooo cnt wait plz cont soooooon
thnks fr d pm
luv yachna
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Posted: 16 years ago
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wow amazing update..plzzz PM me whnvr u update..
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Originally posted by: aarora

wow amazing update..plzzz PM me whnvr u update..

Thanks
Sure I'll pm you the next time I update
Take Care
Zoya
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Posted: 16 years ago
#36
plz continue soon wanna now where armaan has taken rihdimma
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Posted: 16 years ago
#37
loved it zoya... too good hunny..... tc...rav..xx
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Posted: 16 years ago
#38

hey...dat was a gud part...plzzz continue soon...

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Posted: 16 years ago
#39
heyy,
awsome part.
all paries are introduced.
continue soon.
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Posted: 16 years ago
#40
nice part zoya!!!!
thanx 4 PM!!!!

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