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Posted: 17 years ago
#71
grt part! .. ohh ic
soo 7 more parts b4 kripa changes??...
omg. kripa!!! is she gonna try to commit suicide???!!!😲
plz continue with the next part...!😛👏
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Posted: 17 years ago
#72
a very well wrtten part...lets hope she does not contemplate sucide sriously...she jsut needs to stand up for her self!..continue soon pls..can u PM me when u post the nxt part..thanks in advacne!
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Posted: 17 years ago
#73
oh gosh, suicide?? she tried killing herself b4? n still her parents treat her like this?
i like karan. shes like the only ray of light in her life.
ur fan fic is really realistic. this happens everywhere, not identical to the situation in ur fan fic, but in different stages in life, u always get those who judge ur appearance. poor girl is dying day by day coz of this. did she get some kind of heart pain or something?
keep up the gd work sukhi. im proud of u😆
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Posted: 17 years ago
#74
just read ur fick....
& i am feeling so sorry for Kripa...
i just hope that there is some1 to help her...& stop her from commiting sucide
continue soon
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Posted: 17 years ago
#75
hey hi
i jst read ur ff
i will not say it was awesome, bcoz u know it
what i want to know is how come u know abt the degree of pain experinced by ppl having such looks?
and what abt our right to live?
anshu
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Posted: 17 years ago
#76

Originally posted by: someanshu2008

hey hi

i jst read ur ff
i will not say it was awesome, bcoz u know it
what i want to know is how come u know abt the degree of pain experinced by ppl having such looks?
and what abt our right to live?
anshu

i dont agree with you because ...she is just writing the story obvaiously she wont know the pain about it you are right but its fiction she is not writing a real life story ... she is writing fiction... amm... like when the shows come on tv there is evey time a things comes in writen before the show starts about the character resemlence(spelling?) ... so i think she dont want to hurt any one its just that she is writing a story which is NOT true .. 😃
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Posted: 17 years ago
#77

Originally posted by: sun_423

very well written part.....👏 please do continue soon..😊

thanx so much dear, i appreciate the comment😳

Originally posted by: Anam Ali

Wonderful Part Sukhi

I hope she dnt commite sucide

thanx so much di, and currently im writing the part up for jdck -- it'll be posted very soon😳😳
and as for kripa let's see who and when someone stops her...

Originally posted by: love_iqbal_khan

okay...at first....i had just thought Angad and Josh were having fun by making fun of an overweight girl but this is the limit. They are so heartless, rude, shameless and arggghhhh not even words can describe the hediousness of their hearts........simply disgusting!

to be honest, i dont blame kripa for chosing that suicidal part....when someone's so hurt, they really can't think of anything except suicide.....especially when her own parents make her feel unwanted......i've been through a suicidal phase in my life and its really ugly......
at least Karan is on her side, glad to know that....i just hope she doesnt do anything she'll regret later.
wonderful writing hun. everytime i read ur updates, i literally end up with tears in my eyes...grea part
continue soon

i agree katie some people are so fed up with their appearance and those of others that they fail to see the inner beauty of another human being....awww im sorry to hear that hopefully the next few parts wont pain you at all.....yesh karan is the one person who kripa can always go to...he will be the reason for everything that happens to her soon....awww im so sorry i dont mean to hurt you...and thank you so much for the comment...😛

Originally posted by: sweet honey

great part....omg cnt belive the guyz are still mkin fun of her.....hope she doesnt commit suicide....cont soon

thanx so much, well there is a certain limit to their rudeness and they wont stop until kripa leaves and as for the suicide part you'll find out in the next part😳

Originally posted by: sabzz

heyyyy... well writen parrttt !! you are not hurting anyones feeling you are just writing an out-standing story wich i love ... !!!

continue soon !!
p.s : i am imaginig karan as armaan lol * love his characterrr!!

thanx so much sabzz, i appreciate the comment; aww thanx so much dear....will do and lol thats good but im sorry there wont be ar in this ff😊

Originally posted by: iqbals4ever

awesome part cont soon plz!!!!!!👏

thanx so much dear, and i will -- i couldnt update any of my ffs yesterday was too busy with other stuff...

Originally posted by: deeya123

fab part sukhi😊

i really hate everysingle person who hurted her so badly in the cafeteria.
seriously these people deserves to be punished.
karan is a nice person
very well written.

thanx so much deeya, i dislike them too but kripa will have to endure more before she fights back...thanx a lot dear and karan is the one person who gives her strength and the courage to forgive and forget...

Originally posted by: stars_shine*

hey sukhi di

wondeful part
kripa's feelings r so hurt😭
thnx for the PM
conitnue soon

thanx so much dear, kripa is repeatedly being insulted but how long can she endure...we'll have to wait...no problem and will do ...

Originally posted by: prabhi

grt part! .. ohh ic

soo 7 more parts b4 kripa changes??...
omg. kripa!!! is she gonna try to commit suicide???!!!😲
plz continue with the next part...!😛👏

thanx so much prabhi, yes seven more before kripa decides to fight back....lets wait for the next part to see if kripa decides to or not...will her concious let her??? will do and thanx again dear

Originally posted by: chillingal16

a very well wrtten part...lets hope she does not contemplate sucide sriously...she jsut needs to stand up for her self!..continue soon pls..can u PM me when u post the nxt part..thanks in advacne!

thanx so much dear, i agree lets hope she wont...she will but right now she has to bring her self esteem higher..and i'll pm you as soon as i update....thanx again!!😛
thanx a ton dear!

Originally posted by: Kaj!

oh gosh, suicide?? she tried killing herself b4? n still her parents treat her like this?
i like karan. shes like the only ray of light in her life.
ur fan fic is really realistic. this happens everywhere, not identical to the situation in ur fan fic, but in different stages in life, u always get those who judge ur appearance. poor girl is dying day by day coz of this. did she get some kind of heart pain or something?
keep up the gd work sukhi. im proud of u😆

whoops sorry i explained that wrong -- i meant like the first time in her life she didnt hold her head up high and she was considering suicide...so two firsts happened in two minutes...hope that explains it....karan truly is the only ray of light in her life, he will be the one to guide her and shield her away from the pain she has to deal with....things like this happen daily -- some think it and others speak it...and the heart pain is something i deal with ...i'll explain as soon as i post the part....thanx so much im glad to hear that😛

Originally posted by: sujalangad_rock

just read ur fick....

& i am feeling so sorry for Kripa...
i just hope that there is some1 to help her...& stop her from commiting sucide
continue soon

thanx so much dear, i feel the same pain for kripa because i have slightly felt it and i see it constantly....someone will stop her but who? will do and thanx again😳

Originally posted by: someanshu2008

hey hi

i jst read ur ff
i will not say it was awesome, bcoz u know it
what i want to know is how come u know abt the degree of pain experinced by ppl having such looks?
and what abt our right to live?
anshu

thanx so much dear -- i will explain that in the next part, why and how come i know how someone has felt pain like this....but im confused about your other question...could you please elaborate?

Originally posted by: sabzz

i dont agree with you because ...she is just writing the story obvaiously she wont know the pain about it you are right but its fiction she is not writing a real life story ... she is writing fiction... amm... like when the shows come on tv there is evey time a things comes in writen before the show starts about the character resemlence(spelling?) ... so i think she dont want to hurt any one its just that she is writing a story which is NOT true .. 😃

actually sabzz dear -- this story is based on realistic things but this particular story is not real however some of the things i include i have personally dealt with or those i know have....thanx for explaining sabzz...
thank you everyone for the wonderful comments -- some of you have some questions regarding how i know so much...so i think its time i should explain -- i will in the next part and i have decided not to include a character intro...thanx a lot everyone
as always
sukhi :)
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Posted: 17 years ago
#78
HI sorry i am not able to post my reply .sorry for late .
I feel cry for kripa , boys are sooo mean i want to give them one one slap .every one hurt her very badly i wish one day she return them double .
I dont want kripa changed now i wish she make them relaize that faty people also can be smart & famous like them .
awesome story .thx dear .
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Posted: 17 years ago
#79
@monika: thanx so much dear for the comment, and as for kripa she has someone who gives her the ability to go through with this and for the boys they will regret their actions one day or the other...
@angullgrl91: thanx so much dear
@sun: im continuing right now..

Well a few of you have asked how come I know so much well as a child I have been a bit chubby but normal, however the few extra pounds I have on me have always added more pressure on me -- I have been told many times that I am fat when clearly the opposite person could see worse, but by thinking that I too was doing something similar to them…so yeah and the suicidal part my friend has dealt with it and thankfully because of friends she is back to normal….hopefully that clears out a few confusions…and as for the heart pain that is actually something I have dealt with for the past few years, I usually have heart pain randomly so I added that…

Chapter 4:

The rest of the day continued by, after lunch Kripa dealt with even more insulting remarks about her appearance, but what did they matter now? She was done for, her self esteem was far too low to be brought up again and there no longer was any point in living. Sighing she headed towards the gate to leave campus when a whistle forced her to turn around. Thinking it was Angad, Josh and Prithivi, Kripa turned around slowly she was afraid of them. She was completely scared of them, so much she feared to look them in the eye or upset them. That was had managed to happen in two days.

Closing her eyes she glanced towards the direction of the voice, five seconds passed, half a minute passed and finally fed up with the quietness Kripa opened her red eyes and shuddered. "bhai you and here?" she manage to say looking away from his disturbed and pained face. "Kripa are you okay? Your eyes are bright red!" Karan spoke slightly frustrated and scared, he couldn't see her like that but everyone around here was not going to help him and he knew that. "I'm fine bhai, I just have a headache and I've been rubbing my eyes for a while, they were hurting so yeah -- out of habit!" Kripa spoke hesitantly, Karan stared at her he easily knew she was lying but also knew she was in no condition to speak.

"Let's go sweetie, I came to pick you up and every day I will pick you up from school! Not to forget drop you off!" Karan spoke with authority. Kripa smiled and fell into step with him as they moved towards the car. "Kripa how was school?" Karan asked hesitantly, he was afraid she would tell him something he wouldn't be able to bear, but somehow managed to disguise his concern. "it was okay bhai, nothing so great and nothing so bad!" she mumbled adding emphasis on every word hoping that Karan would be able to understand she was not lying. Karan nodded negatively, how could she possibly think he wouldn't be able to catch that one. Perhaps he would ask at home, where Kripa would be able to express her feelings without having to think about anything else.

*****

"ELEPHANT! I missed you yesterday, you know how bored I was sitting in class and at lunch with no one to bother?" Angad snapped at Kripa, he truly missed having her around; it was as if someone important was gone from his life -- well that wasn't how it felt rather he just missed having someone to pick on! He truly looked forward to ragging someone to the point where they would break and leave forever. And that was what Angad Khanna would do from today onwards, something that would break Kripa down even more, but was that even possible? Well Angad Khanna was willing to take chances …

Kripa just stared back at him blankly, no softness, no rudeness and no emotion at all in her usually tender and cheeky voice. Angad stared back, perhaps she was rethinking about leaving the school! And he was very pleased with himself. "Can I help you?" Kripa asked expressionless. Angad stared back dumbfounded rather speechless, what was he going to say that was going to ruin her completely. He had totally forgotten.

*****

"Moti!" Josh screamed from the opposite side of the hall. All heads turned towards Kripa who walked with her head low, not bothering to glance at the accusing faces questioning why she was going to this certain school or fat? "you listen to me moti! I am talking to you elephant!" Josh barked at her. Kripa flinched away that was okay but it still hurt, everything was getting worse, how longer could she suffer. Just when she thought they couldn't she jinxed herself and found herself in the middle of the podium.

All around her, many of the boys and girls walked towards her dressed in baggy overly huge clothes. She tried frowning but she didn't care, they could do all they wanted and she wouldn't say anything because she was done. "fat ***, Fat ***, Fat **!" they all chanted at her, they hated her for no reason in particular. When from the far end of the hallway a voice spoke screaming at everyone to shut up, "what the heck is your problem, leave her alone! She is just overweight but she is exactly like us, you freaks!" an average height looking girl with short black hair screamed at those around her. Kripa looked at her, and shook her head it was just another ploy, and she knew it the instant the girl rushed towards her screaming at her in the face. Shaking her head she walked towards her lonely tree where she sat down blankly staring off into nothing in particular.

"its now or never!" another voice called out to her, Kripa glanced around trying to locate the voice but was momentarily distracted when she found piles and piles of food dumped on top of her. Kripa froze, and once again the blank tears rushed out of her eyes. And this time the nagging feeling for suicide increased, either that or running away but where? Where would someone accept somebody like her….

To be continued, thank you everyone for the previous comments and like I have continuously said I sincerely hope I am not offending anyone, this ff is based off of certain feelings those around me have felt and I have just created a character who deals with this and comes out strong….and I have bad news I will no longer be able to update like this anymore; like I had said in my introduction for this ff -- after today I will only be able to update on the weekends, Friday, Saturday and Sunday….

As always

Sukhi J

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Posted: 17 years ago
#80
that was a awesome part..the story is getting more and more interesting... your writing is very nice.....👏 please do continue soon..😊

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